Jackson, Jack for short, has never touched a video game in his life, he has always been the type of person to mostly focus of school work and grades than games, never having any time to spend it on games, or with his friends. When a friend of his forces him to try out a new VR type MMORPG game called New Equestrian Online, or NEO, based off a old cartoon franchise about ponies. A game where everyone can create their own fantasy adventure or life with their own pony character, where they can be a knight or mage to fight off enemies, a smithy to craft new gear and weapons for everyone, a salepony to sell valuable potions and boosts, etc. Is this new MMORPG game the type of game that Jack can get into and finally likes? Who knows.
Chapters (2)
Is this story based off of Friendship is Optimal?
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No, that is actually the first time i heard that story
Cute so far, not normally big on dragons in these kinds of stories, but it could be interesting, I think the raffle price of a dragon character was pretty neat actually. The prologue part had issues with not really telling what the character is really thinking and had to do it through dialogue but it seems to get better in the first chapter. We don't know much about the main character other then he is worn-out and mostly studious student, would need to learn more about him to get a more clearer idea of what sort of person he is. I wonder who his companions are going to be? Also I would suggest that you try out using a Text to speech program, like Balabolka (yes it's absolutely free) to sound off how your writing feels. Best of luck to you story.
Also you might want to add this to other specific story groups if you want to have better chances of being notices like Humans in Equestria, ponyfication, transformation groups and so forth.
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sorry bout that, a bit rusty after coming back after a long time on hiatus, plus work is keeping me busy so that's the other problem as well
Is this an mlp x SAO crossover?