It seems there's a new map mission, one that requires Applejack, Applebloom, and of all creatures, Zecora. The map in the Treehouse of Harmony is calling them to Zebrat, which isn't some place Zecora wants to return to.
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Is this an alternate take on the season ten comics?
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Yes
Definitely Griffinstone is starting to get a little bit better
To be honest I would love to see the interaction with the Cutie Mark Crusaders and Diamond Tiara and silver spoon ever since season 5 which it was one of the best season for me at least
Suddenly, a glowing light appeared from behind Zecora. She turned around and could see a glow coming from Applebloom’s cutie mark. Zecora noticed there was still a glow from behind her. “Zecora, look! Your mark!” Applebloom cried.
They both looked at the zebra’s spiral mark, like Applebloom’s, it was glowing. “Well, what do you know…” Suddenly, images of their mark appeared in the air and flew out of the hut’s window.
Now this is something I really love to see other characters not just the main six called by the map I mean they did it with Starlight sunburst the Cutie Mark Crusaders Spike
Oh yeah a very interesting moment 🤭
Huh that is weird I thought Medley Brook and Crystal are Kelpie and Dust Devil and Catus Rose are Abada even though I never heard of that until the comic came around
By the way I did look it up and those I mention are kelpie a water creature and Abada kind of like a tall version of a pony I think but here check it out
https://mlp.fandom.com/wiki/List_of_non-pony_characters/Other I just want to give you guys a little heads-up in case there's any confusion
Not a bad story, although the grammar errors could use some fixing.
Ok this is a very interesting alternate take on of season 10 which it wasn't that bad but anyway so it looks like Apple Bloom wants to visit Zecora and it's been awhile they ever hang out and it was a pretty nice to see that but then the tree of Harmony is calling out for Applebloom and surprisingly Zecora but they didn't think they will go to the castle they went to the Treehouse instead which pretty surprisingly they never seen this place before and it looks like they're not alone Applejack came along once they got into the place they saw the map but much different from friendship Castle but hey it's pretty cool so the location they are going to Zecora Homeland which unfortunately she is not too happy to to go back home Applebloom and Applejack were pretty worried about her but she really don't want to talk about it but when they finally arrived to their destination they were greeted by a zebra name Marini and surprisingly her and Zecora know each other which apparently it's a very awkward situation but anyway she explained about the problem of a very Heat Wave they're having and that's a huge problem but it looks like the rest of her friends are there which again she looks very awkward seeing them and something tells me things did not turn well for them and whatever happened in the past I guess we'll find out next time
It's too bad we never to see fizzlepop berrytwist and rockhoof in this story it would have been awesome to see them here
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We’ll, I made a couple of changes like the species of Zecora’s friends to have more zebras and camels. I’ll try and explain more in the author notes soon.
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Oh ok I mean to be frank I thought they look cooler in a comic especially their design but okay I guess
Ooh, I like how you changed Medly, Crystal, Dust Devil, and Cactus Rose to more obviously desert-suited creatures. Though Medly and Crystal were cute river sprites (or whatever they were called). Great start!
11182002 I would've loved to see such interactions too. Blame Hasbro for thinking Diamond and Silver's stories were done now that they were reformed.
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Yeah that was some very unfortunate just like Gilda thanks hasbro
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Hello. PonyPixel’s editor here.
I understand that his grammar is off the rails, but I am trying my best to correct it. I was also the one who added some lines or paragraphs that can make the flow of the plot smooth.
Although when you did say that the grammar needs to be fixed, well… I’d say… there are times that I forget to double check, especially in character names. So, technically, it’s my fault for not double-checking sometimes. Forgive me.
Thank you 🙏🏻
Home land
Okay not to be too ungrateful or anything but it's going to be very confusing since Dusty Cactus Medley and Crystal are different creatures in your story it's going to be a little confusing for me since I read the comics but it's not going to be a problem because I'll probably have to treat it a sort of alternate universe type of things
If only we have a magic Ocarina
Oh yeah the poison joke that was pretty funny lol 🤣
Oh boy things are not going too well so apparently they try to find what is the cause of the drought of course it was the heat wave but that has to be something else it looks like Applejack found something in the well a huge Boulder blocking something maybe that could be the cause as well they wanted to move it but it's too dangerous to do that but what if they can make a rain cloud something that will give them until they figure out another solution so they made off the potions for a second there Zecora was doing just fine despite how awkward it can be around with suppose her friends but they were close to finishing the potion but unfortunately something went wrong apparently they were missing ingredients and it was ripped out and it cost a potion to explode and of course the villagers was not too happy not only we wasted the water but almost got some creatures killed Zecora and Marini are having a heated argument what went wrong but it looks like they're bringing back her past again and Zecora could not take it anymore she ran away oh boy this is really not good I wonder how they're going to get the rain cloud and what happened between Zecora and Marini friends I guess we'll find out next time
That's the least of your worries.
The text could still use some fix-up.
May I suggest using Grammarly? And maybe use the auto-read to make sure that all the errors have been ironed out.
Poor Zecora!
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Hello. PonyPixel’s editor here.
I did use Grammarly, but it isn't in Premium. Again, I'm the one who edits his stories.
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No need to use premium. Best way to proofread it afterward is to use "Read" function so you can hear what's being said. Helps a lot because you tend to find errors even after using Grammarly.
So what happened to the missing page?
And that's how she learned how to rhyme
Ohh my God that's actually more sadder 😭
Glad to see Zecora could patch things up with her friends.
But that was so sad what happened to her father.
Wow that was a very interesting story here and a very interesting turn of events as well although I still like the idea of the tree of Harmony location and everything but everybody has a different opinion so again with the story I probably had to treat this as an alternate universe because they'll be confusing for me but anyway after the failure and Zecora ran off Applejack and the others need to find her but before they could they needed to know what happened between her and her friends and apparently it was a tragic one her younger years was good she was not the most socialist with anybody but with a little push from her father she had the courage to talk with Marini and her friends and throughout the years they really became closest friends but then one day Zecora wanting to do shopping for her father but unfortunately they need the item what they needed is out in the desert so Marini and her friends wanting to help her reluctantly she accepted and unfortunately there was a giant bird try to attack them and both Zecora and Marini were separated from there friends but worse there was a sandstorm and they have to Duck and Cover but after that Zecora wanting to stay put until help arrives but Marini didn't want to stay there because of that giant bird or the sandstorm so she went out there not knowing where she's going and of course Zecora fellow her but unfortunately there was a poisonous snake attack them but luckily none of them got bitten and Zecora father came to the rescue but unfortunately he got bitten by the snake and apparently the Venom is starting to affect him Zecora woke up and trying to find her father but her friends told her the bad news that he didn't make it she was so devastated and really mad at Marini and she doesn't want to do with anything with her and with that she decided to leave her hometown and that's what happened so Applejack and the others found her they wanted to comfort her of what happened was an accident that nobody never knew this would happen but Marini wanted to apologize for everything that her friend had to go through and it looks like things are getting better with each other but they still have to figure out about the drought situation but they have an idea to get the boulder out of the well so Apple Bloom and Zecora came up with an idea to make a potion that will help Applejack and they use the last potion as an explosion so they can get rid of the boulder and she took the potion and she ran so fast when the boulder explode and the water flowed and it looks like it solved the problem and they finally got the water back not only they had the village but they also help Zecora to mend there friendship with Marini and her friends and it looks like the Mission was complete and they had back home but not until they had their goodbyes drink and it turns out it was Zecora father recipe and she even promise she'll come back to see them again and with that they went back to Ponyville again this was a pretty interesting take on the comic even though there was some changes and it really threw me off a couple of times but it was still good and well written keep up the good work
Lastly, let’s talk about Tempest and Rutherford and why they’re not in the comic. I don’t want to bring along characters I don’t think will be important to the plot. I think a story about Zecora’s homecoming would be best with just Zecora, Applejack, and Applebloom, the last of which was one of the only ponies who wanted to know about her when Zecora made her debut.
Rutherford? He was not even in the comic it was rockhoof.
Luckily, with some help from Greg, I was able to work out some details. For starters, I didn’t want to have multiple trees of harmony since it would feel kind of gimmicky. It’s like having all of the mane six becoming alicorns, it feels more like a gimmick if you do it like that.
Okay to be honest with you I thought this is actually a pretty neat idea having other ponies or creatures to represent the elements of harmony not just only the main six the pillars are the young six and yes I hear a lot of people said it will take the unique of the tree of Harmony away but it doesn't have to I still think it can work and I read the comic I was actually pretty excited for that one I mean yes they could have done a little bit better with the storytelling and the pacing and a little bit more history with that.
Another change I’ve added to Zebrat, is that it’s mostly just zebras and camels. I’ve changed Zecora’s friends into those species too. I looked around but Crystal and Medley Brook were the only kelpies I could find. The same applies to Dust Devil and Cactus Rose being abadas. Sorry if this is controversial.
Yeah that kind of threw me off a little bit I mean I guess you want to go for realistic animals when it comes to the desert or something I sort of like those other creatures even though one I never heard of like Dusty and Rose that was like a new creature. But anyway no worries
Lastly, let’s talk about Tempest and Rutherford and why they’re not in the comic. I don’t want to bring along characters I don’t think will be important to the plot. I think a story about Zecora’s homecoming would be best with just Zecora, Applejack, and Applebloom, the last of which was one of the only ponies who wanted to know about her when Zecora made her debut
Okay I guess I agree with that ever since her first appearance in season 1 a lot of ponies wanted to know where she come from and mostly Apple Bloom since she became good friends with her and taking an interest of making potion despite that she has no magic but I still think that's actually pretty cool she wants to learn about it and I'm sure she wants to know where she comes from so I guess that's a good move to make her to come with Applejack and Zecora in there journey.
So that just my thoughts about that and everybody as different opinion but it doesn't take away about how I liked about your stories ever since I join in the fimfic site
Dang it! How could I not see that typo? Fixed it.
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That's okay it would be very odd if the Cutie Map did call him 😆
Aww, that was a great ending! Sorry it took me so long to get to it! I don't mind the changes, I think it made the story better to make them all align like that. Great job! I can't wait to see what you have in store for us next!
https://online-calculator.org/how-long-does-it-take-to-walk-1.5-km
We sure we are talking same logic?
1) Humans are not known for their speed.
2) Equines usually can carry more than a human.
So, a WALK would take a few HOURS at MOST, with CONTAINERS for water transport. A single day at MOST, going BOTH ways. TO the ocean, and BACK to village. Or am I reading something wrong? You could say 20 km, or even fifty, if you really need a distance.
Are we taking comic into account? Because if we do, then the village is not even that far from the ocean? Now, this is whole other matter if they need drinking water, because they would need to purify the ocean water, or dig an actual well.
You might want to have an editor check the story out. Saw some weird and just wrong sentences.
In the Gameloft My Little pony game one of the special in-game events was Zecora and her friends all getting together to play O&O.