Captain Lightning Dust of the airship The Washout has everything she wants. Everything but a cream-coloured mare who plays the violin like a soul possessed.
Maybe my entry for the crackship contest, I'm still deciding.
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The Washout is not italicized in your short description
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as far as I know there's no way to use formatting in short descriptions :P
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The issue appears to have been fixed.
Hahahaha FiddleDust yassss
Nice.
it's beautiful
great opener! poetic and abstract, then undercutting that poetry, then grounding the atmosphere with the senses
most ships would be, i imagine!
ah, love how the ship is a true representation of Lightning Dust!
ooh, love how this paragraph sets down the pieces of this AU! reimagining pegasus flight teams as ship crews is very fun
aww, an adorable title drop!
love the cinematic character background establishment!
ooh, a delightful,steampunk feel. securing energy sources is so vital to any civilization, no matter how dangerous that enterprise is. also, love "kilowings" as a unit of measurement! it's little things like that that make these horse words so fun
i have a guess!
ooh, dramatic
aww! i do like this headcanon of Fiddlesticks growing up in Octavia's shadow as her sister. so many possibilities for bittersweet angst
these being Lightning Dust's last thoughts on the verge of an ill-considered self-sacrifice is so great! still being her spiteful and prideful self even while dying a hero is just so perfectly her
oof! love the understatedness of this tragic detail, hinted at by the "in her place" earlier. also, augh, their poor parents!
aww, so adorable! to have earned her pride for once, it must be quite a moment for Lightning Dust
oof! all the flashbacks linking together to this tragic reveal. it even recontextualizes Lightning Dust's fillyhood wish! she got what she wanted then, but only through events that she clearly regrets. i love the way you built up the pieces, great stuff!
and this feels like i am looking into her eyes with her. just so well-earned after all of the scenes of grey, menacing clouds and pain.
she's not talking about just the violin!
a lovely idyllic moment, and it's a nice touch to show, not tell, the hoof-in-her-mouth thing. a very understandable hoof-in-mouth thing to say
and oof! how discovering something so precious and then losing it tarnishes what once brought you joy before. that is a loss twice over
and a hopeful, optimistic end, with our pair sailing up and out into the open sky.
i really love this AU! it was something that i felt and absorbed more than read, if that makes sense, which is what makes for a good AU story in my book. the setting is perfect for evoking those feelings of adventure, danger, and comradery that is so fitting for ponies of the sky such as Lightning Dust, as well as tragedy and loss for the ponies of the ground such as Fiddlesticks. just very 18th century pirate adventure, you know?
and of course, the imagery and poetry were top-notch throughout, for contemplative and action scenes both. a lovely FiddleDust, and a beautiful read. thank you for it!
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Thank you for the lovely comment! It's really nice to get a blow by blow of all your favourite bits!