For the past few weeks, Fluttershy had noticed that Tree hugger and Discord had been getting together and started enjoying one another's time. This would generally make her happy, but the more they hung out without her, the more bothersome it became.
What confused her the most was this strange ritual they do every Friday: Sleeping on top of clouds that are colored to resemble outer space.
Why wasn't she invited? And does this bother her so much? What the hay are those clouds even for?
FLUTTERCORD SUBMISSION DAY #3: Treehugger
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Should be you're
Should be Fluttershy sighed.
Apart from those errors, this was a great story. Also, you forgot to mark it as complete.
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Thanks for the corrections!
Fixed!
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You're welcome!
From what I see of it here, you write a good Pinkie
Oh yeah that's right I forgot she has that costume back in season 2 and even Pinkie Pie can see your disguise Fluttershy
Oh wow I would say that would be interesting shipping between those two
Well that was a pretty interesting story so it looks like Fluttershy was pretty jealous of treehugger hanging out with Discord even though it was her idea for letting him to hang out with other ponies not just her and it was nice of Pinkie Pie to give her some advice even though she has to deal with her problem so it looks like she wanted to join into this chaotic Cosmo whatever they call it and it became overwhelming for Fluttershy but Discord always help her out so after that chaotic moments Fluttershy wanted to apologize for being jealous but both of them forgave her and it looks like treehugger is dating with Zephyr Breeze that was an interesting ending keep up the good work
Ooh, this was very interesting! Fluttershy becoming one with existence was well-written, in my opinion, and perfectly surreal. I enjoyed how when Discord arrived to help, things were still surreal, but in a more calming and beautiful way that made her feel safe. I loved the detail of Fluttershy recognizing Discord's hug by the scent of lemon-flavored mints. Also, I think that Treehugger's dialogue was on point!
There's just one small grammar issue that stuck out to me while I was reading:
Should be "you're". Overall, this was an excellent read! And those last two lines got a chuckle out of me, a perfect way to end