Inspired by the artwork A Royal Picnic by ShutterflyEQD
Set after Season 7 Episode 10- A Royal Problem
After a mission well done, Princess Celestia invites Starlight for breakfast before she and Twilight leave for Ponyville. Starlight, finally out of Twilight's questioning has a chat with Twilight's own long-time teacher. They find that both teachers have a lot in common, and turns out that the student and teacher are more alike than Starlight thought.
Going for a nice, easy-going one-to-one character story for this.
Chapters (1)
Oh yeah the time spell oops
Oh yeah lesson zero man that was like the ultimate Twilighting ever lol
That's actually a pretty good aftermath of the episode which I really love that one but it's nice to see Princess Celestia and starlight having a casual conversation with each other it's really nice I like that keep up the good work
Needs some editing to better convey it's messages and themes, but I saw what you were going for, and I enjoyed it.
I kind of still wonder why Starlight never got into the school herself. Shes obviously gifted enough.
Her dad probably couldn't stand the idea of his pumpkin being so far away, so didn't enroll her.
I see what you're going for, and I like it, but you might want to give this a once-over for misplaced words and grammar flubs.
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Thank you for the tips ^^
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Yeah that sounds accurate.
You have some grammar to fix, as others have said, but far more importantly, I liked your character dialogue, it felt believable and fun. The latter is far harder to grasp and fix if you don't already do it by nature.
Keep at it!
For grammar I recommend Grammarly, it's an autocorrect more powerful than basic ones and detects any writing in any text box in a browser.
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I actually have Grammarly which I used for these stories. I downloaded it for my studies
Thank you for the compliment
This was a very good one-shot.
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Thank you so very much ^^