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alCROWholic


I write TF stuff. Commissions are open, $20 for 1000 words.

Comments ( 11 )

Well this was certainly interesting read. I especially liked the ending, good job!

Is this connected to ‘Twin Moon’?

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They feature the same OC, but are seperate otherwise. Although I'm not stopping you from imagining that this dude somehow manages to get turned into other people every other week.

Twilight teleported it back, “Please don’t kiss the vial.”

*wheeze*

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Will Twin Moon get a sequel?

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Nothing planned at the moment, sorry.

I'm really enjoying these. It's a neat transformation topic that doesn't get written much.

However, much like any story I end up enjoying. I end up subconsciously looking for spelling errors, and:

An elegant lady didn’t need such a brutish thing hanging between her legs, and elegant flower was much more her speed.

Should be an

Also there is an odd disconnect I'm having when we get to the part where Rarity gives Starfire the "Special Tea". She talks about finding one last package that needs to be delivered and even says that'll be all for the day. Starfire then makes the delivery and... goes back to the shop afterward and is given MORE packages to deliver? I thought that was the last one of the day. What happened there?

I feel like we missed a scene or time skip. It also has Starfire commenting on how everyone was giving him compliments on his appearance, but the only person we see actually do that is Lady Green. I'm assuming on the way back, perhaps he met other ponies, but it's unclear and immersion-breaking.

That was a good story.

This is an amusing story, especially the ending.

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