Story about a human getting displaced by a wild unstable portal to another earth. Damn it Starlight Glimmer, next time crossreferance your stolen timespells!
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I really want to read more of this store, but please for the sake of any deity that exists, try to limit the jumping all over the place, it makes is hard to get a decent reading pace, as well as making it feel like your simply cutting characters off. So longer segments like in the first chapter perhaps?
Maybe instead of mixing the Griffin part with the Pony parts, maybe just dedicate a chapter to that instead?
The small interludes around notes and murphy as stuff were fun the first few times, but when it got used so often, it just sadly lost its charm a little.
That is not to say that its a bad story, I really like the premise of it, and I'm looking forward to when the "necromancer" part get into it.
This was just my titbits, and I'm looking forward to see more to this story.
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Next chapter is a special.
GrayGabriel will have his first fight. The problem with Necromancy is that it uses death as catalisator. Without dead bodys one do not necessary is tipped off to his nature and affinity. As of yet only Pinkie Pie, is the only active mortal to know about it since she peeked over the scribt and the telling titel.But when the campsite get attacked and the not awakend Necromancer has the time to sit down and help take care of the corpses...
The random nature will be reduced slightly but one reason why i do it is that my 9/10 of the story is mobile phone writen and edited. That sucker isn't very formation friendly. Noticed for instance how huge the autoread function chunks of area is when the text to speech function is used?
Anyway... So far i established the setting and some characters. It was maybe not ideal, but i tried it way better and Moderator don't approve it. To technical and to few ponys mentioned in the first three chapters despite it focused on a world of them and non pony races...
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Also Pinkie Pie is on the cover... Random is kinda a thing here. Funny enough i wanted to make it like my 14 non approved storys, but only the very chaotic and random story made it past moderation...
Anyhow... Grammar overhaul this weekend like announced on all chapters in the authors notes.
Also a question of mine. How did you like the Author to become a character that get forced to interact with Pinkie Pie? I found the idea absolutly mindblowing that the Author (me duhhh) and Pinkie basicly having to agree on story progression. Her 4th wall bending literally changed the story by the fact that she killed the first minor boss before it made it to it's battle event. There for delay the dormant Necromancer to come in contact with dead bodys and it's potencial.
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In my blogs are examples how i usualy write my storys. You see quite the difference there. Have fun
Reading password next to the names of the as of yet not approved storys.
Good stuff mate 👌
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Thanks. Hope you will like the next chapter. It will be a bit longer than usualy seen here.
good job!
And, if i may suggest for the future, space out the paragraphs. So, instead of this
make it like this instead
Much more easier on the eyes.
I also hope you are doing well in these times, kinda missed ya. no offense
Black-Soul writes some good stuff.
Well done
I hope you're not going to keep us waiting long.
Monk
“Shhh, it’s ok. The crotches won’t get you.” - BobAlcove
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Currently working on the Sci - Fi Contest and 1 old passion story. 6 Chapter ready but not approved do to the end of the year...
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This story next chapter is 30% done, before i give it a 'until new year vaccation' its only 1-2 weeks now i guess.
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Cool, I'll look forward to it.
The Monk
“To say that Twilight Sparkle went bugfuck would be like saying the Incredible Hulk had some mild anger management issues.” -DustTraveller
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I released some chapters on other storys today, i have a lot of proofreading to do. I see if i can release the next weekend Chapter 12. The first Chapter where Necromancy is awakend and Death will be found plentyful...
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it is merely that 'ponys' is not considered to be the multiple of the word 'pony' but rather 'ponies'. in short the English language is horribly confusing and barely ever makes sense
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I noticed, yet i see it used by other Authors
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Do what you want
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That question is to open without context to answer...
A mate, money, cuddles, success, snuggels, Ice Cream & sooo mutch more
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What
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I'm as confused as you are ¯\_(ツ)_/¯
You question had no context to understand it what so ever...
Example:
Changeling. Changling what?
Do i like them? How do i look at them? Why do i view them the way im doing? Why have Changelings not a more refined name or describtion. Etc. etc. etc.
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‘Do what you want’ is a rather uncommon way to end a sentence and a conversation. in no way is it a question.
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That seem to be a contradiction...
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Never mind, I never wanted to ask a question if you think I implied the existence of a question then I am sorry to inform you that you are wrong.
I am annoyed and tired
Goodnight
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O...k...?
Good night and sleep well
I see we have a rouge tower fan.
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I don't get the referance... Might you elaborate please?
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Next chapter is the last before the big showdown.
I try my best making bigger sentences before scene changes. Can't guarantee it will be very successful.