Princess Luna's secret Lover

Love is cruel to those who can't be together. Especially for those who's lover knows not of their exisitence.

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Xerzes

Xerzes #1 · Sep 11th, 2012 · · ·

whose.

Jewel_Eater_Dragon

Jewel_Eater_Dragon #2 · Sep 11th, 2012 · · ·

Whose? Whats that supposed to mean?

Scribblestick

Scribblestick #3 · Sep 11th, 2012 · · ·

Review time!

1) I thought you went a bit overboard with the sappy descriptions at the beginning. There's a point where it starts to get cheesy, and I thought you passed it.

2) I've seen this idea done before, but I like how you took a different twist on it. Most of the time I was wondering who or what this secret admirer was, and I like what you did with it.

3) Some minor grammatical things. Nothing a good proof-reader can't weed out.

Hope that helps!

VampGirlPony

VampGirlPony #4 · Sep 11th, 2012 · · ·

it was so good. i wonder who the dragon is . . . omg is it spike?

Jewel_Eater_Dragon

Jewel_Eater_Dragon #5 · Sep 12th, 2012 · · ·

ScribbleStick
Yeah, I guess I was laying it a little thick and cheesy there. I was tryng to go for an utterly emotional dragon character. Breaking the bonds of the selfish, horading, angry stereotypical 'evil' dragon.
It was also probably the case since I myself was rather moody at the time. (Please forgive.)

VampGirlPony
I was about to tell you if it is or if it isn't spike. But I don't think I'll do a spoiler just yet.