James Alvera, age 18, former Brony, and currently living alone on the second floor of an apartment complex. His life started smoothly when his parents enrolled him in private elementary school; with good grades and lots of friends. Along the road were a few road bumps, but James always climbed back up. Well, all of that changed just as soon as he graduated high school. After the big ceremony and family celebration, he was unfortunate to hear the news from his parents at the dinner table. They would have to leave him for their workplace.
Saddened and dejected, he struggles to find a job and sits all alone in his apartment; remembering he has until summer vacation to find a job for his college fees. But that all changed when a strange letter offering a quick salary arrived at night.
Quick money for one simple task? how hard can it be?
This should be interesting I like James already. I can relate to him as someone who is also having trouble finding a job and as someone who hates season 9.
Reforming these villains will be tougher than I thought. And I hate how the villains ended.
H m m m... The title is familiar...
This certainly has potential so far. Look forward to reading more.
Good start, keep up the work!
Allrighty, let's see where this goes then.
Also the title reminded me about "How a realist hero rebuilt the kingdom" anime/manga.
This caught my attention. Hope you do more
A very awesome story ... Keep up the good work.
So.... When's the new chapter coming?
Will Tirek and Sombra appear in this story?
No bat-pone?
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No gryphons, changelings, dragons or kirins? It leaves a lot out.
I think it would have been better to not limit the species and keep the same restrictions but as it is they can just be added to the app later so it doesn't really restrict the writing options, it's even written in
Just in case.
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I believe that a changeling would make the whole app redundant because James could just use that form all the time and change to any creature.
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Yeah, but bat-pony is at least a pony species, and has a purpose, being nocturnal.
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Well not really if you keep the same restrictions that changes use his phone charge so it's already nerfed to a degree.
Basically he gets the powers of anything he transforms into except changelings transformation ability since the app does that.
Might be convenient to disguise himself as a changeling at some point even without the transformation ability.
Although I can't really think of a scenario where that could occur in your story as they've already reformed by the time your story starts and I can't think of any reason he would visit the hive and that I recall chrysalis doesn't have any followers left he could blend in with so it's likely irrelevant anyway.
Suppose it depends on how much of equestria he intends to take over and how much of it he intends to personally handle.
The anime has a guy that was declared king running things if anything similar happens here he could be directing armies rather than acting on the front lines.
romance tag?
for what, chrysalis? cozy? main 6? herd?
Interesting set of powers. One has to wonder how Discord gave it to him. Hopefully things will go well with Cozy.
Seems like a villain outfit. How nice! If he turned into a pony, how is he waving his fingers with the apparently matching gloves?
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Uh, can you PM me? I think I can help with your little take over. I love conquests.
https://youtu.be/MMwUOCkp-mo?t=124
James's reaction to Twilight was equal parts amusing and somewhat realistic.
Hopefully, this isn't a grim/dark version ... (no singing to start the school year?) ...
Too bad it's the poorly written Season 8 version.
Threats and coercion on the first day? How did you stumble into writing a even more dislikable Applejack then the writers of Season 8?
Less hilarity and more borderline endangerment. Let's just hope that no one ends up being crushed under rubble due to timeline changes.
Ok, this is getting very interesting and cool, keep it like that, I love it dude.
Ok, this is getting really really exciting, I wonder how James will kick some ass in the future with the new skill, or perk?, I wonder if James will have a perk of "Death by Daylight" like "Borrowed Time" that should be pretty interesting to see.
(Edited to correct some grammar issues)
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Most of his powers came from "Quantum Break" which is one of my favorite games. He will be getting new powers in the future
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Me: I'm forced to search for it to understand everything.
Btw good job with the writing, but you should take a look at Borrowed Time perk, sorry if I'm sounding like a maniac, but I'm really excited for this story, is getting exciting.
Here is a short video explanation of Borrowed time: https://youtu.be/udPuG_b17B8
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Sorry, I'm just trying to clear up some confusion on my end, but do you mean "Dead by Daylight"? As in the online multiplayer horror game?
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Exactly, man of culture that I got in front of me, let's clash our wines XD.
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... uh, sure? I guess? I was really just confused about the spelling you used, thinking it you were referring to some ripoff or another. No praise needed.
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Oh sorry, English is not my native language, and I use to be very literal for everything, sorry for that.
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Oh no, no worries man. I can't exactly blame you for something you have no control over. Hell, I'm pretty sure if I tried to speak like, friggin, Japanese or something I'd be absolutely horrible at it so there's nobody at fault here.
and our main character can be said to be very lucky.Usually, such suspicious lucrative contracts always contain nasty tricks.
awesome!
keep it up!!!
he better get familiar with Hay, flower and other horse-food stuff if he don't want to get caught
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but... humans suck at digesting fiber, really, REALLY bad
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he can eat it as pony form,i guess
great chapter!!
Keep it up!!
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Sorry to poke a hole in your logic, but the way it's worded implies that he was a unicorn when he ate the hay burger. Meaning that even as a pony, if he takes a bite of that crap, he's still gonna puke his guts up.
Well that does answer where her parents got too.
I mean if we have to have romance, I wouldn't mind something different.
They do have a interesting character dynamic, all things told.
I enjoy Smolder in particular for being arguably one of the most outgoing of the group, so seeing her well utilized is a prospect that I do look forward to.
On that note: Alone by Scyphi has some great interactions between the two of them.
Aw. That's so sweet.
It's funny. I don't actually know how I feel about this version of Fluttershy.
Given some time, maybe I'll figure it out.
Credit to Chrysalis, her attempt was surprisingly inventive, and it makes a certain amount of sense from the perspective of a girl who eats "love".
Is the twist going to be that she broke them up or something like that?
Apparently.
Classic Twilight.
Huh....well, that's certainly complicated some matters. But, it's not like we humans aren't good at fixing problems as we are causing them!
So what will his Earth Pony name be?
Klein Bottle?
Escher Stair?
Melted Clock?
Broken Wall the Fourth.
Questions:
How old Mobius in his colt body?
How old headmare twilight here?
how big is their age difference?
Now i imagine a 15 Year old cold dating a 25 year old mare.. :p
Did you plan making female Villains have crush on Mobius?
Is this fic categories as rgre?
Thank you
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1. Should be the same age as Sandbar, assuming that the school acts like a high school, he's 15.
2. I don't really know about her real age. I've heard that she's like 28?
3. From my previous answers, a 13 year age difference. Call the cops now...
4. Read the tags, it should be obvious
5. I don't know, does it seem like it? I wasn't intending on making it RGRE
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Thanks you...
Alright time to call cops now,
Or in this case
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Twilight brother
calling him now
XD
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Stop Hammertime ofcourse
Ok I already see a train wreck.
All on that list(except number 3) equals a heartbroken twilight and I hate that part.