Rainbow Dash lived a great life--but it wasn’t good enough. If she wants to fly out of the rat-race of reincarnation, she’ll have to learn some very important lessons about love, loss, and letting go. With the cosmic spectre of death as her guide, her soul will soar through multiple lives in an effort to do something few have ever dreamt of doing and even fewer have accomplished.
No worries, though. She’s got time. She’s got all of time.
Written for The My Little Pony Renaissance Contest
Chapters (7)
Wow. I...
I love your easy-to-read, conversational writing style, which was the reason why I followed you. It's a style that I aspire to achieve in my own works.
This story is exactly what I love about your writing. You don't waste a single word. Every detail feels important, and the theme of the desire to fly ties all the disconnected stories together. Wish I had more to say, other than...great job!
"And on that fateful day on the beach, those negative traits manifested in a very real way. They nearly cost one colt his life."
Honestly, I'm not quite seeing it. I think she did pretty well. I guess I agree with Balsam.
This is a great example of how when your story does so many things right and well, someone comes along and comments on the ONE thing that they don't quite agree with.
Oh, by the way...congratulations on writing this story that I keep reading, as opposed to some other story that I might not want to keep reading.
Too bad it's hard to get many views when fimfiction.net is hit by a big end-of-contest rush.
JUDGES, DON'T YOU DARE READ THESE COMMENTS! Thank you.
I didn't entirely like the first paragraph (extended line?) of this chapter. (I don't think I liked the depiction of flappers as 'flimsy,' quite. I have a lot of opinions and feelings about birb things.)
But by the time I'd finished this chapter, I liked it a lot. I enjoy the way you depict the birds as simple-minded, but as birds doing bird things and having birdlike thoughts. I applaud your nerve (casual guts?) in writing your whole chapter in a particular style of verse.
The one thing I really didn't enjoy about reading this chapter was when I tried to go to the next chapter, and there was no more story. Because iirc the deadline for the Renaissance contest has already passed, I guess there won't be more later, either.
But maybe that's the way life works. There's always more, and never a real, final end...even if it takes reincarnation, or other forms of spiritual advancement or broader perspective to make it that way.
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SCREW YOU I DO WHAT I WANT.
What a perfect way to go for her, midway through boasting.