Just some weirdo looking to make something interesting.
When Aeryn Boyer finds herself falling into the magical land of Equestria, she not only has to find a way back home to her family, but also has to handle her psychology without her old support system. Between her half-way encyclopedic knowledge making others uncomfortable, depressive/manic mood shifts, fear of danger, and social anxiety, a lot of plates have to get spinning, fast.
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Fun start to what seems like to be a potentially interesting story. I enjoyed the image of no-clipping through the floor.
Shame it hasn't been updated since July. You should keep it going. One bit of helpful critiquing: SLOW DOWN! lol. The beginning reads like a recap from this guy:
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And I think the profanity filter could be quite the fun running gag.
Keep it up!
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Hey hey, thanks! The reason I haven't uploaded the second episode is that, well, It's a CMC episode, and I'm having a bit of trouble deciding how it'll play out. As far as the opening pace, I both agree that it could use some more breathing room, but also I kinda wanted that sudden whirlwind energy, as that's very much how the character is feeling, almost like a panic attack.
Also, with the profanity, not to spoil the fun, but I plan on a running gag of RD learning human swear words, but having no idea how to use them.