The Crimson Crusader

DisplacedWriter

DisplacedWriter #1 · Jul 6th, 2021 · · · Chapter 1: We come in Peace...Not ·

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You might wanna read your story description. You made some typos. :p

ElementBrigade

ElementBrigade #2 · Jul 6th, 2021 · · · Chapter 1: We come in Peace...Not ·

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10890593
Thanks for the heads up

DisplacedWriter

DisplacedWriter #3 · Jul 7th, 2021 · · · Chapter 1: We come in Peace...Not ·

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10890602
np! ^^

OP Omni God-Emperor Doom

OP Omni God-Emperor Doom #4 · Jul 7th, 2021 · · · Chapter 1: We come in Peace...Not ·

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There was a moment of tense silence and awkwardness, until Twilight spoke. “Um...m-my name is Twilight Sparkle, faithful student to Princess Celestia, co-ruler of Equestria, and princess of the sun." she said, before jestering a thumb over at Spike. "And this is my number-one assistant, Spike." Spike poked his head out from behind Twilight and waved. "To answer your second question, you’re in the Everfree Forest, located in Equestria."
"Alright, that answers two of my questions.”
“Now care to tell us who you are?”
“Right, sorry. The name’s Amy Anderson the Third. College student at the University of Texas.”
Twilight smiled nervously and shook her head in affirmation to the creature. "Well, a unicorn to be precise, but..oh where are my manners?" She cleared her throat, closed her eyes, and began to introduce herself. "Ahem! My name is Twilight Sparkle, faithful student to Princess Celestia, co-ruler of Equestria, and princess of the sun. What's your name?"
"The name’s Amy Anderson the Third, semi-famous artist and cosplayer."

Yep, you said this twice.

OP Omni God-Emperor Doom

OP Omni God-Emperor Doom #5 · Jul 7th, 2021 · 3 · · Chapter 1: We come in Peace...Not ·

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Anyway, Twilight is a dumbass. I think Celestia should be very disappointed and punish her.

ElementBrigade

ElementBrigade #6 · Jul 7th, 2021 · 1 · · Chapter 1: We come in Peace...Not ·

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10890675
....I miss having an editor. Thanks for pointing that one out

Starlight Nova

Starlight Nova #7 · Jul 7th, 2021 · · · Chapter 1: We come in Peace...Not ·

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PLEASE tell me Laby will appear in this story.

technofan

technofan #8 · Jul 7th, 2021 · · · Chapter 1: We come in Peace...Not ·

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ah yes a female main character, i will watch your career with great interest

Titan Commander Sebaste

Titan Commander Sebaste #9 · Jul 7th, 2021 · · · Chapter 1: We come in Peace...Not ·

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Funnily enough, I just hit Crimson Avenger myself on Elsword

KarasAdamas

KarasAdamas #10 · Jul 7th, 2021 · · · Chapter 1: We come in Peace...Not ·

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I feel like this is either gonna be hilarious, disturbing or stupid... or maybe all three.
Either way, looking forward to the next chapter.

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The Radiance

The Radiance #12 · Jul 8th, 2021 · · · Chapter 1: We come in Peace...Not ·

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Awesome first chapter, but the art for the story is Flakes from Happy Tree Friends?

ElementBrigade

ElementBrigade #13 · Jul 13th, 2021 · · · Chapter 1: We come in Peace...Not ·

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10892390
.....It's was kinda the only art I could find that would give a decent description of what Amy looks like Q^Q

Pete100

Pete100 #14 · Jul 14th, 2021 · · · Chapter 1: We come in Peace...Not ·

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Eventually, the two companions made it to where the smoke was coming from. The smoke began to slowly disappear. To their surprise, there was somepony, or rather, something, standing in the midst of the smoke. As the smoke vanished, it became apparent that whatever it was, it wasn’t a pony. What stood there was a creature wearing a greyish-black sweater. Underneath the sweater was black skin tight suit that covered her body and had red glowing marks on her arms, a red and gold colored scarf wrapped around her neck. It had a rather pale complexion, with amber-gold eyes and crimson red long hair. The creature was also carrying a sword with the coloration of crimson red and black covering most of the sword.

If none of the male characters get a little bit of a crush on her, then I’ll be shocked.

"Oh Spike, I'm sure she'll tell us everything we need to know, once we get to Canterlot. I'm sure Celestia would want to know as well, especially Artemis. Now come on, let's go back and see if she’s willing to come with us."

Artemis?

It was the last part of what Twilight had said that sent chills down Amy's spine. If there was one thing she hated the most on her list of things she hated, other than her father and mother, that would have to be being used as a test subject and being experimented on. Well, that and a few other things, but those were besides the point.

How many things does she have on her list?

Pete100

Pete100 #15 · Jul 14th, 2021 · 3 · · Chapter 1: We come in Peace...Not ·

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10890678
I’m more disappointed that spike barely tried to talk her out of it.

OP Omni God-Emperor Doom

OP Omni God-Emperor Doom #16 · Jul 14th, 2021 · · · Chapter 2: Southern Hospitality ·

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10900433

That too!

OP Omni God-Emperor Doom

OP Omni God-Emperor Doom #17 · Jul 14th, 2021 · · · Chapter 2: Southern Hospitality ·

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Okay, this is getting into levels of "highly stupidity" right about now!

Pete100

Pete100 #18 · Jul 14th, 2021 · · · Chapter 2: Southern Hospitality ·

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"Oh god. It’s the stalker maid all over again! Quick, think Amy, what did your teacher say when you’re in a situation like this?"

Stalker maid?

“Remember Amy. When dealing with a crazy anthro alicorn, always remember to sucker punch them in the face, horn, or give them sugarcubes.”

Timeout. She really said that?

“Holy crap! Is that a monster with razor sharp teeth!?” Amy yelled, causing Spike to turn around quickly to see if Celestia was behind. This gave Amy the opportunity to deliver a powerful kick to the dragon’s private area. Spike’s eyes widened upon feeling the intense pain below his belt as he fell to the ground while holding his crotch.

Why does my man spike always has to suffer?

"Sorry buddy, but I don't like to be experimented on." Looking through her backpack Amy pulled out an ice pack and placed it next to Spike. “For your boys down below. If we meet again, then maybe I'll buy you a drink or something as an apology." She said before running off out of the EverFree Forest.

Wow, that’s very unexpected.

“Huh...Okay...that’s something I wasn’t expecting if I’m being honest.” Amy said before feeling a pair of familiar eyes drilling holes into the back of her head. She turns around to see Applejack fuming with anger and rage as she notices the mare’s face burning red. Her only guest that she’s pissed at her for what she did to the apple trees. “....I’m in trouble...aren’t I-?” Before she could finish her question, she felt the farm pony quickly deliver a powerful kick to her stomach. A gasp of air escaped her mouth as she felt herself being sent flying off into the air and towards Ponyville. “TEAM ROCKET’S BLASTING OFF AGAIN!”

God damn. She needs to take Taekwondo.

“I’ll go after her, you go and see if Applejack’s okay.” Twilight suggested as Spike ran off towards Sweet Apple Acres while she ran off after the flying human.

Something tells me we’re gonna have a magic duel.

Pete100

Pete100 #19 · Jul 14th, 2021 · 1 · · Chapter 2: Southern Hospitality ·

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10900444
It might get better.

OP Omni God-Emperor Doom

OP Omni God-Emperor Doom #20 · Jul 14th, 2021 · · · Chapter 2: Southern Hospitality ·

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10900465

Well, it is Twilight's fault for being a mad scientist and has a psycho vibe. Hopefully, it will be Celestia herself that stops this reckless behavior.

Punishes Twilight, and help out poor Amy with the unnecessary drama and hostilities from Twilight and her friends.

Plus, I'm very disappointed in Spike for being a total coward for not stopping the unnecessary situation, because of a crazy Twilight. Or help out the real victim: Amy!

I glad he got kicked in the balls, really I am. Because, he deserve it for choosing the wrong side, but he was mentally weak for not stopping Twilight!!!!!

Pete100

Pete100 #21 · Jul 14th, 2021 · 1 · · Chapter 2: Southern Hospitality ·

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10900599
Something tells me that twilight might get herself hurt trying to experiment on amy. Kinda like how she got herself hurt trying to figure out pinkie pie’s pinkie sense.

The rest of the main 6, something tells me they won’t need twilight to be hostile towards Amy. Applejack wasn’t hostile towards amy until she stole an apple, if the others are the same something tells me Amy is gonna do a lot of damage. I’m almost willing to bet one of those cloud houses was rainbow dash’s.

As for spike, you know the rules. Never listen to the younger sibling. Now thinking about it, depending on when this takes place spike might be used to it, but if he knew she wasn’t gonna listen he probably should have stayed out of it. Anytime my siblings don’t listen I either call them out or wait for whatever they’re doing to blow up in their faces.

The A I

The A I #22 · Jul 14th, 2021 · · · Chapter 2: Southern Hospitality ·

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Next amy shall be trying to get twilight's pikachu

Pete100

Pete100 #23 · Jul 15th, 2021 · · · Chapter 2: Southern Hospitality ·

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10900743
Are you talking about spike? Because it’s not gonna be hard to capture him.

The A I

The A I #24 · Jul 15th, 2021 · · · Chapter 2: Southern Hospitality ·

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10900848
I was referring to the team rocket reference

Pete100

Pete100 #25 · Jul 15th, 2021 · · · Chapter 2: Southern Hospitality ·

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10901162
I know, i was going along with it. You know, because spike is basically twilight’s pikachu?

The A I

The A I #26 · Jul 15th, 2021 · · · Chapter 2: Southern Hospitality ·

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10901167
Ah right xD sorry. It didn't click xD

Pete100

Pete100 #27 · Jul 15th, 2021 · · · Chapter 2: Southern Hospitality ·

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10901174
It’s ok. Probably should’ve worded it better.

The A I

The A I #28 · Jul 15th, 2021 · · · Chapter 2: Southern Hospitality ·

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10901182
And i probably shouldn't jave replied while i was still half asleep xD

Pete100

Pete100 #29 · Jul 15th, 2021 · 1 · · Chapter 2: Southern Hospitality ·

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10901188
Lol. It’s ok.

Pete100

Pete100 #30 · Jul 24th, 2021 · 2 · · Chapter 3: Bloody Passion for Fashion ·

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“Oh her? My little sister, Sweetie Belle.” Rarity answered as she motioned for her little sister to move. “Sweetie Belle, it’s rude to just stare. Go ahead and introduce yourself.”

A piece of roof must have hit rarity on the head.

“Better not tell her I’m a human, otherwise she might tell one of the locals about me. Or worse she might even tell that crazy unicorn lady or that farm pony.” Amy thought as she scratched her head. “Um, I have a rare skin condition. I never had fur on me the moment I was born.”

That’s gonna bite her in the a**.

“Well it’s not like I can pay you back anytime soon. And it’s not like I did it on purpose. I got thrown across the air by a potion that I was trying to make.”

I thought she got kicked.

“Mechanical engineering, I was going to college to become an engineer, but things kinda got out of hand.”

I think I’m in love.

“Okay, lead the way Sweetie Belle.” Amy said as she followed the teen filly upstairs to the sewing machines. “So are these the machines that Rarity wanted me to fix?”

Teen?

“Well, if worse comes to worse… I can help you get out of here if anything crops up.” The Teen Filly told her. “Now, we should start working on these before Rarity thinks we’re not doing anything.”

Shoutouts to sweetie belle.

“Tome of Elemental Mastery?” She said to herself. “Hey, maybe I can get my cutie mark in elemental magic and do cool things like Amy.” With it, she opened the book and began to turn through the pages as the magic from the book surged around her. Then, a knock on the door went off, catching her attention.

Is that what she uses?

“Look, all I want to know is how Amy is able to use magic without the use of a horn. Now if you’re not going to help then you can leave me and Spike in the search for her.”

Bullsh*t.