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Rivet, the last remaining Alicorn has had a very long life. He is known as the last bridge between Imperial Equestria and modern Equestria. Despite being over two thousand years old, he has never discovered love, until a special earth pony mare from back east comes his way.
This story takes place in the year 1979 of Equestria's contemporary (post-Celestial) era.
G4/G5 crossover.
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Thanks. I started on this a while back, then I got to working on other things and then I decided to finish it today. I have a story where Luna proposes to Twilight, the third story in the "Hidden Desires" series in the works as well. I have other self-insert x various mare stories planned as well. I'm glad you liked it.
so he isn't a PegaCorn !?
p.s. where should we put this ?
https://www.fimfiction.net/group/215292/non-royal-alicorn/folders
10967145
Well I labeled him as an Alicorn. I would say born as an Alicorn but not related to the princesses. I've only heard of the term pegacorn once or twice. I don't know much about them but he has the lifespan of an Alicorn. Yeah he doesn't have the same level of magical power as the princesses did but he has been alive for over 2,000 years.
10967155
PegaCorns are half PEGAsus, and half uniCORN
But... how did you become one ?
He was born with both wings and a horn and both his parents were unicorns so I don't know exactly what that would make him.
10967172
an,... Alicorn ThrowBack?
0:55-1:35
10967227
I don't get what Batman has to do with anything.
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KillerCrock is a ThrowBack
and the video explains what a ThrowBack is
Nice to see you giving your old Avatar a Tribute.
And his co worker, good aint Wolf whistling
Very nice!
A nice ending, could not be more realistic
10967642
Well I figured it would be a perfect ending. They were out there on spring break, there is usually two months left of the spring semester left after break. The love they developed is deep and I also did not want Sunny and Izzy to be parted as friends either. What do you think about Rivet's views of a couple not sleeping together until their wedding night?
10967994
I think that is honorable of him
10967996
Well he is an honorable pony with a much different mindset. Despite them being friends, it is obvious him and Hard Hat are on the opposite ends of the spectrum when it comes to relationships. Unfortunately for him, Izzy only likes mares!
10967998
Okay. You know, your self Inserts remind me of a Story universe of mlp i got introduced some time ago
10968002
Well Rivet isn't exactly a self-insert. I got him from the "Grannies Gone Wild" episode so I suppose since he was a one time animation error and I gave him a distinct personality, he could be classified as more of an OC. My self-inserts, they are for the most part clop.
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Of course, said universe has a similar aspect to your self Inserts, thus i had to think of it
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I'm thinking of writing a whole string of self-inserts....and Izzy Moonbow will be in one of them. I basically came up with a list of mares, ones I found good anthro artwork of, and I found a good one of her. Finding good anthro artwork of Sunny isn't so easy though. I can't help but wonder if Izzy will still be everyone's favorite after the movie comes out?
10968024
She's Cute, I like pipp as well
10968031
I like Izzy and Sunny, which is why I wrote that clop fic where they got busted in their dorm room. I was doing searches regarding them and I think I'm still the only one to have done an anthro lesbian clop fic with them.
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good idea
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I have seen an incest fic involving Pipp and Zipp. I have a feeling that once the movie comes out, we'll see more G5 fics on the site.
10968112
mhm
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I'm glad you like it. This one does leave room for a sequel, although I'm not planning on throwing any smut into it, the love between Sunny and Rivet is truly genuine, and both have more old-fashioned mindsets. Sunny feels like she would relate more with society in Imperial Equestria and Rivet, he is old enough he remembers it so it is the culture he came from....and his blue collar mindset will remain....he will never want anything fancy.
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And of course there will be plenty of porn. I'm sure some will involve Hitch Trailblazer but I'm guessing the main ships will be Pipp x Zipp and Sunny x Izzy. He might be used in three ways though.
10968258
good
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I won't be putting him in any ships though. The only straight ship I have ever done that didn't involve an OC or self-insert is this one. Sunny is supposed to be studious, Rivet is a walking history book....perfect match!
10968343
indeed! my pony counterpart is a history guy too. sorry, just slipped out
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Now Rivet here is over 2,000 years old and the story takes place in the year 1979 of modern Equestria. Yeah he may be robbing the cradle with Sunny but hey, he's an Alicorn and she is of legal age!
10968357
mhm
10968360
In the Izzy x Sunny story I wrote, Sunny's parents are extremely racist. Sunny has stated that they are racist in this one too so if they ever meet Rivet, it will be a very tense meeting.
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of course
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Now of course Izzy's parents are pretty laid back, but then again the fact that Sunny is a mare is why her parents didn't care that she was an earth pony. Had she hooked up with a stallion, they may not have been so understanding.
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naturally
There are a few spots where the grammar seems a bit off to me, but nothing glaring as far as I can see. The wording is a bit unusual, but that’s part of how you write, not a mistake.
It is very to the point but still doesn’t skip any important information, which is always a pleasant surprise after reading a lot of stories that have hugely detailed descriptions. I like it!
I have to say that I expected more after reading the prologue. I am a bit disappointed, but I still like it. I hope the following will help you on your journey as writer.
The biggest strength you have is that you’re very to the point, as mentioned before. However, that seems to come with a catch; While you avoid giving too much information when setting up the scene, you’re sadly giving too little when the scene plays.
The overall grammar is worse than in the prologue; it is close to bothering me when reading this. But don’t be discouraged by this! Everyone makes mistakes, you just have to learn from them.
Some words are repeated quite a few times and the conversations are very dry, with the first one, the one with only the construction ponies, being the exception.
The wording is a bit off at times and the interactions seem unrealistic; this can probably largely be traced back to the lack of detail.
The pacing is very fast and probably one of the more extreme ones I’ve read. This isn’t good or bad, but I personally like it very much, it works well with your style.
I hope this little “review” of the chapter helps. I am going to read the rest of your story at another point as I am very busy, but you can count on me being there. If you want me to give you more detail about specific points I mentioned, just tell me and I will do so. If you want me to shut up, just tell me and I will do so.