Fluttershy gets hypnotized by Rarity before she goes of to Canterlot for a week,
because of reasons you will read in the second chapter, But Rarity accidentally leaves a hypnotic suggestion in her subconsious.
Poor Fluttershy...
First story I am critic proof but will listen to any critisism (also english isn't my strongest point)
I added it to the Fan/fic/ Theater 3000 group, because why not? Riff it if you like. Get creative. And let me know if you riff it, no hard feelings will be involved.
Chapters (9)
Just a idea that popped in my head one day. I saw that no one did a hypnosis story on this site so I decided to make my one. Just thinking about all the possibilities this story can take after (around) chapter 3 (give or take) makes me thirsty I need to drink something.
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Okay, what is your story about? You left nothing in the description that pertains to your story.
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Well so far there is none, I pretty much planned 1: Setup 2: ? 3: ? , I'm making stuff up as it goes along. It will most likely kick off at the third chapter. Also writing isn't my best points, this more or less a practice, Once I have an idea what going on I will put it in the description.
Thanks for the critism.
I was intending to make a comedy and then this happens. I felt not very while writing this, and it shows.
Even though you're not a hypnotist, you made it pretty accurate, good job !
I wonder if the suggestion will be something that swap Fluttershy/Fluttercruel
Edit : « You don't need to see MY that way ». “My“ should be “me“
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because of that you know why. I also fixed the typo. Thanks
Yeah it kinda scares how much I now about hypnotism...
Fluttershy/cruel? A possibility, hypnotism is a weird thing. also if this fic is mood swinging
She's going to be Ponyville's Puppet, huh?
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Maybe... maybe unknowingly to both Fluttershy and Ponyville, nopony so far knows she's hypnotized
1262635 Yep, I can see the comic insanity in that.
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I haven't written that far ahead yet, but have I have plans for something like that.
1262656 Kay. Got your story in track!^^
This is what Pinkie's crystal ball told me: Setup for a cliffhanger, follow up on cliffhanger... rinse and repeat until the ending and I have no idea how long story will be, at least longer then 2 words that for sure. Don't ask why I don't know how to write, that's why I'm doing relatively well for a beginner... I think
Most faults can be blamed on me because I haven't seen a SINGLE episode since the week of the season 2 finale.
Anyways enjoy
This story is on haitus, why? I can't make any thing of it... I will return to this story once I have better ideas. That and I regret putting Fluttershy in the lead role, it should have been Rarity
, Applejack
or Rainbow
... I apologize
1494365 Why not side stories of all three??? Just a thought, or maybe just mini stories, enough to do one for each member of the Mane Six?^^
1933877 mmm... I'll consider, but it another story though. Not sure if I can finish this story. There is another story in the works already.
This should continue, there are not enough hypnosis fanfics on the site.
In other news there were A LOT of errors in the first few chapters.
Hope to see more!
2155123 It's not completely dead, every once in a while i go back to writing this story. But don't expect a new chapter anytime soon. I'm writing something else right now. Glad you seem to enjoy it BTW.
I never noticed that before! MLP actually made a reference to The Jungle Book! When Fluttershy gets hypnotized by Discord, her eyes do the same thing as when Kaa hypnotizes Mowgli in the tree! Same colors and shape too!
2558808 Yeah, the show can be sly with it's references like that.
Sounds great!
Also going to check out your other story that's hogging the writing.
No promises.
Wait... 'hey' Rainbow Dash... Oh no!
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About finished with chapter 1, there were A LOT of mistakes. Lol.
3121091 I know. It may have caused my short sightedness it was that painful.
Sorry, everypony!
Fire bird, my concept artist, Endycat, and I riffed Hypnotized Fluttershy's first chapter. Afterwards, my own editor made a certain comment at the end.
Check my blogs for the riff, It is the most recent 'riff' blog.
Also, Twi, don't do it!
3207830 I knew adding that "I swear" would pay off. Best laugh I had all day.
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Sure wish you continued
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? So your not continuing? Well that's unfortunate.