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Equestria. A large, prosperous country, filled with happy ponies, two loving leaders, and enough resources to last then for centuries.
The changeling Hive. A small, depressing country with too many mouths for the Queen to feed. But that doesn’t mean she can’t fight a war.
With two bombings on Equestrian bases, Chrysalis has sparked a four year long conflict that will claim millions of lives.
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So far, so good.
Ooh! Great start!
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Really?
Is the title a Larry Niven reference or a coincidence?
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Wait until they see each other again—
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Probably a coincidence
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Yeah!
This is amazing so far!
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Yay!
awesome chapter mate keep it up can't wait for the next chapter nice battlefield 1 reference
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Thanks!
Can't wait to read.
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Yay!
This is great so far keep up the good work!
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Thanks!
Chryssight, huh? This should be interesting.
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Yep!
It’s not happening yet tho!
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Keyword: Yet.
Awww, good Luna!
Great job!
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Eeyup.
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Heheh, thanks
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Of course
awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter
Well, that's something to put on my watchlist. I'm eager to see where it goes. A bit awkward with wording at times, but nothing major aside from one point.
Though one thing that confuses me is the usage of crossbows, and the reasoning behind it, both in universe and as a story. Like, we have tanks, flamethrowers, chemical weapons, field guns and howitzers. So the technology looks like something from WW1 at its earliest. And even the wording seems like it was taken from a setting that was supposed to have guns, but then swapped them out for crossbows. Like, there are automatic and bolt action crossbows, and shotgun equivalents. They are apparently loaded by clips. Dynamite tipped arrows instead of rifle grenades. They even click when the magazine is empty. I'm not sure things like that are even possible.
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Well, the tanks are exclusive to the changelings, since Chrysalis found out how gunpowder and oil worked , the pesticides are just pesticides, the flamethrowers are just spells, and the crossbows have certain mechanisms that chamber bolts like a gun, and clicks when nothings in said chamber.
There are cannons, and in universe, there are attempts at making guns, but things like recoil knocking the user down and it sometimes exploding in the user’s grip happen, so crossbows are safer in universe.
Also, I really didn’t want guns, so I kinda just had them use these crossbows/arrow launchers.
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Fair, I guess, even if I don't really understand what exactly is it about guns that doesn't sit well with you. It doesn't have any impact on the worldbuilding because the tanks and artillery place it firmly in semi-modern warfare era, and writing crossbows exactly like guns with some key words switched out feels kinda jarring.
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Fair.
I don’t hate guns, in fact I love them. I kinda just wanted something different I guess
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Is it really different when absolutely nothing changes in the story though? Sure, you could write an AU where Twilight has a yellow coat, but if that's the only detail changed, is it really different?
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Well to be fair, this is in the canon timeline. Just, way before the show takes place. There’s basically a 1,000 year gap or so.
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Okay, that's interesting. Not sure how it's relevant to the discussion at hand though. Guns don't exist in the show, but neither do remarkably gun-like crossbows, howitzers or internal combustion engines. Also, does that mean we get to see Sombrero's shenanigans with the Crystal Empire and Luna's banishment to the moon, or is it outside the scope of the story?
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Kinda? I’m not sure yet.
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Well then, we shall wait and see.
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Okay
Nice,you make both side have good and bad side,not like some fanfic "oh no, Changeling are Evil"
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Yep
There’s always a bit of grey
Great chapter! I like seeing the contrast between the lings and the bats. Someone really oughta give Granite a bitch slap though, and soon
Glad to see Silverfang adjusting.
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Heheh, we’ll see what happens.
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Yep
She’s probably got that feeling of when you walk into a new classroom
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Fine...you sure I can't just do it myself? I can make it look like an accident!
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Not yet
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Fineeee
awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter
Foresight and Chryssi sitting in a tree—
Ooh, well, this will be interesting
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Yessssssss
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Oh?
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K-I-S-S-I-N-G
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Mhm
Nice last line.
Uh-oh
Luna. You have doomed us all.
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So much for best princess, amirite?
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Heh
And so it begins