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After Izuku was attacked by the sludge villain, All Might was able to apprehend him without incident. Izuku never gets One For All, and the last words he heard from All Might were "you cannot be a Hero".

Izuku finds himself torn on how to move forward, but fate had decided to intervene. After an impactful meeting with a certain Alicorn princess, Izuku finds another way forward. He just wished that path wasn't so extreme.

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Looks good so far. Can't wait for the next chapter!

Wait, I’m confused about a lot of things.

10779770
Ask your questions then. We cant unconfuse you if you don't tell us what confused you.

10780033
Ok, my first question is if this is supposed to be a second person story? Because, I saw ‘you’ in it.

10780044
Where? None of us (the editors or the author) caught anything like that. It's not written in second person at all to my knowledge.

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Izuku walked back and forth along the shoreline of Takoba beach, staring out at the ocean. It took a bit of an effort to get past all the trash, but thankfully once you were at the coastline, it wasn't as much of an obstruction. It seemed to Izuku that it was actually getting easier, like there was less trash to move through, or more likely that he was getting more used to it.

Here

10780055
That's not second person. Second person is specifically when the story is written from YOUR perspective. This is still written from Izuku's perspective. The word "you" here is not enough to make that second persepctive.

10780056
Oh my bad. Got the perspectives confused for a minute. So it’s supposed to say ‘you’ instead of ‘he’?

10780059
Yes. In this case, it's just a matter of the words being used. I'm pretty sure this is still proper grammar, or at least the intention is still fairly clear. Grammar isn't my specialty though, so I could be wrong, but I know the sentence (and the story as a whole) is still in third person.

10780062
Ok, another question I had was are mha and mlp in the same world or different worlds?

10780071
Then how did starlight get there? And how is she a human?

10780075
That will be explained in a future chapter.

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Hazard took the flash drive and placed it in his coat's pocket. "I didn't say you had to be a part of any plans, but have it your way." Hazard unplugged the small computer—it must have finished its search—and attached it to a harness on the inside of his lab coat, which he then buttoned up. "That should do it. With any luck, your father's reputation will be a smoldering pile of ash by tomorrow afternoon." He turned to leave, then paused for a moment like he was going to say something. Whatever it was, he evidently thought better of it as he shook his head before continuing out the door and down the hall.

Another part I was confused about is this.

What about it is confusing?

10780085
Was what he was gonna say important? Also, you for got to push the reply button.

10780105
Oops XD

That is actually a case where the author felt like he SHOULD say something, but he couldn't think of anything. Then the author realized if they couldn't think of what the character should say, maybe the character would too, so he decided that's what he did. He felt like there was something more he maybe should say, but couldn't decide what and gave up.

Twilight walked over and rested one of her wings on Izuku's shoulder. It was surprisingly soft. "I know. Just remember that this isn't permanent. I just need time and another human." She gave a reassuring smile. "Is your home nearby? We should probably get you someplace safe, then we can get you back to normal."

The last part I was confused about was this.

10780120
Do you mean about returning him to normal? Twilight transformed Izuku by basically copy/pasting herself on top of him. Her only scan of a human at that point in time was one with a massive hole in their body and severe damage from the impact. In order to reverse him (if he wanted to be reverted to a human) without a hole, she'd need to scan other humans and reconstruct his body by comparing the damaged parts with undamaged parts.

If this isn't what you were confused by, please let me know what you were confused by.

10780123
At first she said that it was irreversible, now she’s saying that she can change him back. Which one is it?

10780129
Ah. Weird wording choice then. It's not that the spell is REVERSABLE (that is, there's no undo function), but that it can be cast again in the opposite direction using human templating rather than a pony, which would revert him to his human form.

10780131
Ohh. Because, it was kind of confusing.

Bruh...
Ok I’m not sure how this book is going with but ok can’t what for the next chapter

Oooh, now this is a weird one, but well written. I'm super curious to see how this turns out (though it hasn't been updated in a while... not that I have room to speak on such things, however, given my own project that I haven't touched in months).

ok now this is interesting! i wonder what inko and bakugo's reaction will be to his new pony self

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