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  • E Tonight I Shall Be Laughter

    Princess Luna decides to work on her Element of Laughter. Captain Bucephalus gives chase.
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  • E Pumpkin Cake and the Storm Giant

    On a blustery night, the Cake Twins embark on an epic quest for the legendary Plate of Cookies!
    5,787 words · 3,173 views  ·  352  ·  3
  • E Short Cakes

    The Cake twins discover Ponyville.
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  • E The Cake Twins' Surprise Party

    Pumpkin Cake plans a surprise birthday party for her brother. Which is challenging, considering that they are twins.
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  • E Today I Will Be a Princess

    Mayor Mare greets a new day. Her faithful clerk defends Ponyville. A party! And after.
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  • T It Is My Fate To Enter Every Door

    Blythe Hyacinth Pie goes to visit her family, in Tartarus.
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  • E Hearth's Warming Eve: A Princess Promenade

    Ponyville Playhouse presents a bold, new interpretation of Hearth's Warming Eve. Music! Adventure! Intrigue! And a few surprises!
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  • T The Rummy Business of Old Blooey

    What ho! Big doin's on the night of the Grand Galloping Gala!
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Blog Posts51

  • 8w, 3d
    Shadow Day, Revisited; The Boneyard, Expanded

    I've been stuck on "Shadow Day" for quite awhile, to the point where the rest of my writing has stopped. For this reason, I have reluctantly revoked the story until I can develop a good resolution for it.

    Part of the problem is the Breezies. My original resolution involved re-introducing the Breezies into the MLP universe and I was knocked a-kilter when the series decided to do this without consulting me first. (This is the second time the series has made me abandon a story; I was happily working on a story about a solitary shapechanger, and then the series introduced a whole race of shapechangers. And, try as I might, I couldn't figure out a good way to distinguish my character, the Munkydo, from the Changelings.) I kind of trapped myself by publishing the "Stormy Weather" bits; try as I might, I couldn't figure out a way to get to my desired ending without the Breezies. (Although, Diamond Tiara, Ponyville's new expert on the wonders of methane, had this idea for a stinky fuel-air bomb...)

    A second part of the problem, which many of the kind respondents have noted, is that "Shadow Day" started wandering all over the place. Frankly, I kind of fell in love with the idea of mixing and matching the characters and their roles and I enjoyed trying different things out. This was fun for me, but I don't think it was much fun for the reader. I want to re-focus the story on the four main characters, Twilight, the Mayor, the Mayor's secretary and Pinkie. Each of them has something to teach the other and I don't want that little story lost amidst the sturm und drang of Ponyville battling a Storm Giant.

    I hesitated over the "revoke" button for quite awhile, because I feel it is unfair to the many good respondents that shared their encouragement and thoughtful criticisms with me. But I also feel I owe them a better story than the mess o' pottage that I have produced so far, so I hope they will forgive me.

    From this point on, I will only publish completed stories. No reader, I think, needs to waste time on some half-baked tale when there are plenty of other tasty treats available.

    While I am working on other things, one project that I keep in front of me is a re-write of "The Boneyard." I originally wrote this for a competition and, as many of my respondents have noted, the story suffers for my attempts to compress the story below a word limit. I'd like to slow the pace of the opening down a bit, spend some more time describing the setting and the characters, particularly the revenants. I want to include a scene I wrote about the impact the of Come to Life spell in Equestria, but had to cut for length. "The Boneyard" is my "Earth Ponies are magic" story and I hope, with a bit more work, to help you feel what I felt, when I realized that Earth Ponies, across the span of eons, still see each other as family.

    11 comments · 127 views
  • 20w, 6d
    Bad Gateway 1

    I'm sorry I've been away for awhile. Personal issues. Let's move on.

    I'm kind of stumped about where to go with "Shadow Day." The story spun out of my control at some point, I think because I was confused about where the series was headed. (I really thought that Twilight would end Season Four much like she began. I never imagined her being punched through a mountain!) I think I need to make this story much smaller, and focus just on Twilight, Pinkie, Marigold and Fletcher. While I like the bits about Filthy Rich and his daughter, Diamond Tiara, and adore the scene with Tank, I think this story needs to be pruned a lot.

    I'm pleased that the end of Season Four validates (or, at least, doesn't contradict) my story, "The Tree That Blooms in Darkness."

    That said, while I puzzle over what to do with "Shadow Day," I'm now working on "Bad Gateway," a sequel to "Tonight I Shall Be Laughter." Yes, the title was inspired by an error message I've sometimes observed here on FIMFiction. "Bad Gateway" is about Captain Bucephalus struggling to command the odd lot of ponies assigned to him by the generals of the Royal Guard: a couple of Pegasus ponies, some eccentric Unicorns and the Cheese Family, who rival the Apples in their fecundity.

    8 comments · 157 views
  • 38w, 2d
    The Fox and Hound

    This evening, I decided to fix up some issues with my story, It Is My Fate To Enter Every Door.

    Okay, fine. Pinkie Pie has an older sister. I fudged my story to admit that.*

    Per Benman's suggestion, I've rearranged the opening, so that Emma's story comes to the fore.

    Most importantly, I've added a scene with Vixen the Clever and her nemesis, Laelaps the Hunter. The business with Vixen follows the pattern of mortals dealing with fay spirits. The story of Laelaps is softer; I liked the idea that Laelaps is fond of Vixen, despite her treachery.

    *Fudged again: Matilda Victoria Pie: Maud. I like that the daughters of Clydesdale Pie have these odd, grandiose names. Is it his influence, or hers?

    7 comments · 218 views
  • 39w, 6d
    ISTJ

    I guess at some point in your working life, you will encounter the Myers-Briggs personality profile. This is a kind of four-by-four Sorting Hat that will reveal which of the sixteen houses you belong to.

    I'm an ISTJ. Which, in English, translates to "minion." I am the orc laborer beneath the White Tower, forging swords. I am the contractor on the Death Star, working for benefits. I am one of those ridiculous rubber-suited guys trashed by Mr. Incredible, who were only working for the weekend and free beer.

    As I was sitting through my last lecture about Myers-Briggs, I entertained myself by sorting the Mane Six by temperament. Most were easy-peasy:

    Rainbow Dash: Artisan. Stimulus-seeker, duh!

    Twilight Sparkle: Rational. Knowledge-seeker. She lives in a library!

    Applejack: Guardian. Security-seeker. AJ epitomizes the Guardian type.

    Fluttershy: Idealist. Identity-seeker. How many times have we seen Fluttershy struggle to re-invent herself through her caring for her friends and critters?

    The last two have puzzled me.

    Pinkie Pie. You might assume she is an Artisan. But she lives not for herself, but for other ponies' smiles. I judge her a Champion, a subset of Artisan. The idea that Pinkie is introverted may seem counter-intuitive, but we have seen ("Party of One") that she has a rich inner life.

    Rarity. You could make the slam-dunk of Aritisan and call it a day, but I'm not so sure. I see her as INFJ: introverted, intuitive, feeling and judgmental. It might surprise you that I think of Rarity as introverted, but look at the facts: come rain or shine, good fortune or ill, she works in solitude in her shop and holds to her inner vision. She is a Counselor, I reckon.

    The Myers-Briggs test is not destiny, of course. But thinking about it might give you some insight into a character that you thought you understood. And, if you take the test yourself, some insight into your own thinking.

    7 comments · 214 views
  • 41w, 6d
    Party Canon

    A confession: as a teenager, I adored The Man from U.N.C.L.E. novels. Do not be surprised if this means nothing to you. You are young and these are stories from another age. The Invisibility Affair! If you had an invisibility cloak, of course you would drape it on a zeppelin! That's just what supervillains do!

    James Blish, an author I had admired for his Cities in Flight novels, wrote the earliest Star Trek adaptations which, to be honest, were little more than transcriptions of episodes. Later writers of Star Trek, in this forbidden zone between the original series and its sequels, were happy to flesh out the odd corners of the universe. (How Much For Just the Planet?)

    Alan Dean Foster wrote Splinter of the Mind's Eye, the first Star Wars novel. I'm still a little uncertain about the relationship between Foster and Lucas. There are elements of Splinter that only bore fruit in Revenge of the Sith, years and years later.

    All of these guys had it easy. They were writers for series that were complete or, in Foster's case, in the gap between the first film and its sequel.

    And, here I am, writing My Little Pony fanfiction, an ongoing series, and contemplating an upcoming episode title: It Ain't Easy Being Breezies.

    I have written one story that featured the Breezies, in G3 Equestria. In a couple of incomplete fanfics, not posted here, I've hinted that the Breezies and Derpy are good friends.

    I had this idea, in Shadow Day, that Derpy at last saves the day by convincing her tiny, Breezy friends to turn their monstrous storm castles away from Ponyville. I never imagined that the Breezies, or anything like them, would appear in Season Four. I'm not sure where to go with my story now.

    This is our fate, I guess, as fanfic writers. We have to roll with the punches. Hey! Once, I was writing this great story about a shape-changing creature entering Ponyville. The plight of the shape-changer was moving me to tears. And then, of course, we learned about the Changelings, an entire race of shape-changers. Sigh. My story was tossed into the bit-bucket, never to be seen again.

    Sorry. This is basically a rant. I need to resolve Shadow Day without the Breezies. I've got this idea about Diamond Tiara and methane. I hope it works out.

    UPDATE: Nuts to it. I'm going with the Breezies. "Ready, Whoopsie Daisy?" "After you, Trough Aloft." "Ha ha ha! No, after you, Sky Blink." They nod. "Then, it's settled. Together, it is!"

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Gummy has heard the primal call of the Ponyville River. He scurries to answer the call, but between Gummy and his goal is a town full of friendly, helpful ponies. How can a tiny alligator find his way across Ponyville and achieve his heart's desire?

First Published
4th Sep 2012
Last Modified
4th Sep 2012

Apologies for the title to PhantomFox ("Sunny Skies All Day Long").

"[F]linging his eager craft through the clawless halls of air" is, more-or-less from John Magee, Jr's poem "High Flight."

"Feathered Canyon" is a reference to Joni Mitchell's "Both Sides Now." A good name for Rainbow's house, don't you think? In contrast, Gummy's dilemma has nothing to do with America's "Ventura Highway."

Stephanos Eridanos Magnus might be translated as "the Great All-Encompassing River." My best effort at making sense of "Steven Magnet."

Pinkie's comments at the end about "messing about with boats" is, of course, a wink to Kenneth Grahame's Wind in the Willows. And "three ponies in a boat" is a nod to Jerome K Jerome's Three Men in a Boat (to say Nothing of the Dog).

#2 · 112w, 3d ago · 1 · · Jurassic Dork ·

*drops everything*

Must read!

[edit]

And wasn't that worth it!

To quote Gummy: Wow! Just Wow! :pinkiegasp:

Gummy's life is hard!:applejackunsure:

That last sentence!:twilightsmile:

Oh this is brilliant - with the happy ending, and Rarity having tea with her old friend.:rainbowkiss:

Gummy is now officially the best pony.

Oh, that was just delightful!  Marvelous pun hidden in plain sight with the Oolong tea, and do I detect Stephen King references in the capitalized way Gummy thinks of ponies, along with the mention of the behavior of balloons?

See you soon in the feature box, I'm sure!

These pet stories are always fun to read.

But you ain't got to make sense of Steven Magnet, any more than you got to make sense of Diamond Tiara's cache of explosives. It's just a joke about Youtube's arbitrary auto-captions that needs to have died a long time ago.

So Rainbow Dash is Gummy's personal saviour? I can see it now: Rainbow Dash, First Mare to Perform the Sonic Rainboom in Generations, Element of Loyalty, Future Wonderbolt & Saviour to Small, Adventurous Reptiles!

Or to put it another way RDFMPSRGELFWSSAR.

Curses, foiled again!

More awesomeness. And I can see Dash learning to enjoy Dickens!

And at last, a happy ending! Great job using Steven, too; he's not a character that appears often in fics.

Truly a most epic story. I love how Gummy's deity is the Almighty Sobek. :rainbowlaugh:

But why, I must ask, did he choose to appear in the form of an effeminate sea-serpent?  

A delight to read, as always : )

#16 · 112w, 2d ago · 1 · · Jurassic Dork ·

>>1218087

But that's part of the fun, isn't it? Trying to make sense of the often nonsensical parts of the "canon" (quoted, since "Steven Magnet" isn't exactly canon).

It seemed reasonable to assume that "Steven Magnet" is a corruption of "Stephen Magnus" (Big Steve) since Steve surely is big (as large or larger than any of the dragons we've seen to date). "Stephanos" (from the Greek) means something like "encompassing" or "encircling". "Eridanos" (again, from the Greek) is both a real river and, in mythology, a river than encircles the world. Add a little Latin (sorry) and you could get Stephanos Eridanos Magnus (the Great River that Encircles the World)

.>>1223735

Here's the thing, though. "Steve's" design is clearly based on a Chinese Dragon, and Chinese Dragons are kind of a big deal. (Paired with the Chinese Phoenix; well, hello, Philomena!) Sobek, in Egyptian mythology, was one of the World Creators, associated with the Sun God, Ra.

As I hint at in this story, I think of Steve as an Old God, much diminished and eccentric, a relic of a time when the Everfree covered all the world. He was the analog of Celestia in the Old Lands, before the subtle magics of the Earth Ponies domesticated Equestria. Though reduced, he is a figure of importance within what remains of the Wild Lands. (Not unlike Tolkien's Treebeard, come to think on it.)

And I think of him less as effeminate than playful, grown childish and, yes, vain in his old age. But there was a long eon when he and his children ruled the earth. Perhaps they do no longer, but they deserve our honor and affection.

>>1226891

"Stephen Magnet" was the result of YouTube's horrible caption feature naming him such for no good reason during the episode.

Gummy, if you can squeeze between the crack of the door and floor, you're not predator. You're prey!

So. Adorable!:pinkiehappy:

Gummy looked at them as if he had never seen them before. Living with THE PRETTY PINK THING, balloons were a natural part of the environment, like earth and air and wax teeth.

You have no idea how much I laughed at that line. :trollestia:

I loved this so much. Gummy, you deserve a montage song for all your hard work!

Ah, this was a fine little read!  Thank you for providing it!  :pinkiehappy:

Also, congratulations on making EQD!  :twilightsmile:

gummy got swag

Lovely little read, I do so love these pet stories :twilightsmile:

"Gummy congratulated himself on reclaiming his fierce alpha predator heritage as he huddled quietly in his box waiting for a group of pastel-colored unicorns to leave."

That line absolutely slew me. You have a dry sense of humor - I like it.

Was Gummy based off of krogan? I AM ALLIGATOR! GRAWR!

Next time I am faced with a moral quandry I shall stop and ask myself:  "What would Rainbow Dash do?"

I love THIS STYLE OF WRITING. Really. It reminds me of Problem Sleuth.

Loved it! :pinkiehappy:

All hail Sobek!

This story was simply glorious. I salute you, sir! :pinkiehappy:

It's interesting how he doesn't refer to Pinkie as a pony. Perhaps he knows something we don't.

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

best gummy story evur! :rainbowlaugh:

If I'm reading correctly; all Gummy wanted to do was breed? :rainbowhuh:

Well done, Gummy. A masculine reptile is the only appropriate comment. :moustache:

Brilliant. I didn't realise immediately that Steven Magnet was the river dragon, but when I did I laughed so hard I headbutted my desk. A triumph.

Poor Gummy, he gets no respect

Oh, Rarity.  You may not wish to have been so coy when Ponyville River is swarming with Gummy's dumpy green progeny.

If is isn't already.  Equestrian ecology is pretty darn exciting.

Yay, that was fun!

"We walked together in those Old Lands, you and I, the serpent’s eyes said to Gummy. We strode the earth as kings. We chose to share our world with the small, fast, warm-blooded ones. A mistake, perhaps. But we love and honor them. And they, in turn, must honor us and our ways. The relentless and unforgiving ways of the Predator."-Steven Magnet

Gods own speed, you magnificent sonuvabitch!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hlaXIRTjNfo

Also, I think Steven is a mix between a Fjord Linnworm and a Jiaolong. AKA a great big dragon who protects the waters of his territory.

#39 · 112w, 1h ago · 2 · · Jurassic Dork ·

>>1233447

It's the Circle of Life

And it moves us all

Through despair and hope

Through faith and love

Till we find our place

On the path unwinding

In the Circle

The Circle of Life.

>>1235519

Gummy: I tell ya, I'm all right now, but last week I was in rough shape. I went to see my doctor... Doctor Vidi-boom-ba. Yeah...I told him once, "Doctor, every morning when I get up and look in the mirror I feel like throwing up. What's wrong with me? He said, "I don't know, but your eyesight is perfect."

yes, swimming... lol

i wounder if the gender ratio is as far off as it is for the ponies.

#42 · 111w, 5d ago · 1 · · Jurassic Dork ·

This is one of the best stories on the site.

#43 · 111w, 4d ago · 1 · · Jurassic Dork ·

Stealth, cunning, guile… these are my inheritance. I AM ALLIGATOR! GRAR! Respect me, Ponyville!

“Why! It’s Gummy!” declared Rarity. “Pinkie Pie’s dear little… creature.”:rainbowlaugh:

yes swimming nothing else, just swimming:moustache:. Okay this story KILLED ME. I LOVE THIS STORY truly gummy is a fiece predetor againts the cute school ponies and pastel colored unicorns. BUT wow i love this story this is amazing. also i lov the names of everybody and just well eeverything, trully this is the explination of gummy:yay:

ps i belive in rainbow dash

This is wondefully amusing so far!

Oh ho ho my God, that last paragraph made me laugh so hard. :'D

This is one of the funnest, best light-hearted style stories I've ever read.  Spectacularly written, too.  And I found that Rainbow having a (very) soft side to her was perfectly in chararcter.  Well done! :D

Oh my gawd. An interaction between Gummy and Dash in a fanfic that doesn't involve Dash having a phobia of him and him trying to gum her to death?:rainbowderp::rainbowhuh::rainbowkiss:

You have made a NEW AND WONDROUS THING.:heart:

Cardboard box: too small to actually contain Pinkie (probably).

Important that.  She once managed to hide inside a can of soda (unopened no less)

Wonderfully well done! I just love the style in which you portrayed Gummy's thoughts. As a zoology buff, I found this story to be original, charming and inventive. Will definitely be you to my stalk watch list, now that I've finished the story. :twilightsmile:

:rainbowdetermined2: I really liked this story. Best bit was when Rainbow Dash turns out to like erudite literature (I've read A Tale of Two Cities and "Dude, make up your mind already" had me in stitches) and looking after little lost animals when no one's looking. That part would make a great story idea in itself.

:pinkiehappy: I'm impressed with the level of detail you put into the story. I didn't even catch half the references until I read the comments, but mostly I'm talking about how you depict the pony world through Gummy's eyes. The narrative switches were excellent; another good bit was when Twilight goes from deducing that Gummy is under the box to composing a letter to Celestia about it. The fact that the letter was played completely straight only made the comedy so much greater because of the strong mismatch between well-intentioned Twilight and poor Gummy.

:ajbemused: If I had to criticize, I'd probably say that making Steven Magnet appear as Sobek incognito came out of left-field. I get it now you explained it in the comments (rather cleverly too, but since I don't know Latin that well, is that what Stephanos really means or is this Canis Latinicus?), and in hindsight I rather like it, but not when it suddenly appeared in the story as it did. Also, Carrot Cake's speech seemed a little odd. His first line makes him sound like an age peer, not like a parent, and that comment about griffons and foreign food makes him seem a little racist. Was it a reference to Gustave le Grande or something? Lastly, the final section with Pinkie considering the Pony Pet Play Date didn't seem to focus on Gummy at all save for one last line. Considering we've just spent most of the fic following his thoughts, this seems a little rushed.

:scootangel: Still, it was great fun while it lasted. A fav and a like from me!

>>1273702

Steve may or may not be Sobek. There may not even be a Sobek except in Gummy's mind. But, being who he is, I imagine Steve's encountered this sort of shock and awe from reptiles before, and knows how to deal with it. I thought he was kind and understanding, in the way I think Princess Celestia is, knowing that someponies are a little scared of her. :trollestia:

The "what griffons would eat" was an allusion to Gustave Le Grand, as you inferred. I was thinking of Carrot Cake as less "racist" than merely provincial. And, just maybe, with "strudel" he's moving outside of his comfort zone as a baker. With strudel, he might have to "up his game." :rainbowdetermined2:

As for the ending, I preferred to leave the end to the reader's imagination. I rated the story for everypony. And I thought Pinkie's obliviousness was pretty much Pinkie-as-usual. :pinkiehappy:

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