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It is the year 0179 of the Cloud Century. Almost two centuries have passed since the Pegasus Enclave closed the sky and cut off the toxic, uninhabitable surface world. A new home for ponykind, where pegasus ponies are born, and raised, and die.

Before the war, before the sky was cut off, something terrible was locked away. Chamomile is an average pegasus, born into a family of archaeologists and living at the edge of Enclave territory, far to the north. When she stumbles into ancient dangers and conspiracies, she finds her quiet life turned into a horror story. Can she set things right, or is the Enclave doomed?


A Fallout: Equestria sidestory. Thank you to all my readers, patreons, and well-wishers!

As always, I most look forward to seeing what references and cameos people notice. You surprise me sometimes with how you pick up on minor details!

Here's a gallery of the previous cover art, as well as a few bits of character design I put together: Gallery

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Comments ( 370 )

How is this an unofficial side-story?

Comment posted by Thought Prism deleted Oct 14th, 2022

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From what I read I don't see that myself. Most FOE stories don't really have this. Of course, it's a matter of perspective.

“Hey you, you’re finally awake.”

:trollestia:

“The corner, Chamomile!” He pointed.

I grumbled and stepped into the corner, facing the wall and mumbling to myself and started counting quietly.

“You can tell me why you’re here after you get to a hundred,” he said.

“A hundred?! But that’s like… that’s a lot!” I protested.

Is that... an Indiana Jones reference?

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At least he didn't make her count in greek!

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Gotta say I really like the tone in the story, not just from the references but it feels very fun so far.

Interesting... Quite a few mysteries here!

Well! Further interesting developments...

While he might’ve just ran off into the ghettos and thrown away a life more comfortable than what he and his daughter could of had, at least her dad isn’t slaughtering prisoners for efficiency.
And in the end, isn’t that all that matters.

I continue to enjoy this story; thank you for writing. :)

...Uh. Hm. Sorry for not noticing this before, though, but I was looking back to check something else and... where did Chamomile get Destiny's name?

Yeah, have to do retcon either to last chapter or one before to insert name, even as simple as, "Captain's log, first and apparently, the last entry. I, Destiny ....., captain of ...., hereby ...."

This is Dead zone meetimg GitS meeting Dead Space <.<

“A different doctor,” I said. “This one is broken. What even happened?”

lol

Well, that rather escalated! :D

Stopping things with a head/body is a time honored tradition when fighting. Sucks when they're shockprods though :(

Surface is inhospitable except to monsters, and downsizing means killing off the prisoners you don't need. Sounds like Mom is the villian here.

“If it causes brain damage it probably won’t be so bad for you,” Rain Shadow said.

Yeah, I like this :)

"Stasis pods"

ahah - that's what those tubes were. Well, they were empty, so where have all the sleepers gone?

“I’ll do what I think is best. For her and Equestria. If we lower the shield and access the SIVA core I can use it to cure her, and all the other ponies lying in agony in the medical bay!

Help the ponies in the medical bay, who are all dead. Uhuh.

Hmm, is Destiny the ship or the SIVA, or the armor? Time for the next episode.

It went for Mom first? I don't think she's dead.

Mom inhabiting a giant blob of living metal, off to do who-knows-what. Not good.

Oh, intersting cliffhanger...

Why didn't you respond to my comment?

Thank you for writing.

“Yes,” Emerald said. “Actually, pouring alcohol on the wound was a really good idea. Washing promptly will keep SIVA cells from getting a foothold.”

If that's the case, shouldn't Chamomile go full Blackjack at closest alcohol cache?

“It’s been a long week,” I said.

If doctor knew her from before, I wish to like what he thought at this moment

Enferon

Waaait, are we suddenly in Dark Sector?

I’m a bucking calculator

Only if armor wasn't in the way...

Well, buck that cloud hanger

Oh that's some nice new cover art.

"Boss shoved a bottle into my hands and I took a sip."
"Boss shoved a bottle into my hooves and I took a sip."?

"Quattro said. He raised his voice."
"Quattro said. She raised her voice."?

By the way, sorry I've not been commenting much, but I've been enjoying the story. :)
...And I'm rather curious what was going on with that extra system at the end there. :D

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Governors Little Fuse's birthday party?

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Possibly!
I mean, I don't know why that'd be hooked into the security system, particularly in a way that it could be set off accidentally so easily, but, uh. Let's just say I've not been especially impressed by the governor's decisionmaking so far, so I don't think I'll discount it just because it seems like a bad idea. :D

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The idea came from FO4 crafting paradigms (where all systems linked) and a bit of Fallou76 beginning...

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Oh, interesting; my limited familiarity with both those games apparently didn't extend to knowing about either of those, uh... whatever the events(/features?) you reference are.
(What came to my mind was the Sierra Madre Opening Gala, but of course this place is a bit too not dead for too strong a connection to that event from the games. :D)

"“He couldn’t have slipped past us,” Emerald said. “He must have…”

She turned around and pointed to a ladder leading to a thick hatch..

“The fire escape!”"
The abandoned assistant just told them he went out the fire escape, though; why does Emerald seem to be figuring it out independently here? Or am I missing something?

Thank you for writing!

Well. That was a surprise, near the end! And a mystery indeed.
And of course... they will have to go back, as well, which would mean either going through that ship again or finding a different route on their own. Either way, potential interesting times. :)

“Of course I did. I wanted to see who knew you were here,” White Glint said. I pulled the letter out and scanned it. “It’s apparently an invitation to visit the Greywings.”

Wrong Bethesda property

In all seriousness though, this is great. It's a unique take on the FE universe that I very much enjoy.

And more interesting developments, I see. :)

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Perhaps it's where RD was hiding for awhile.

She also should be alive by this time, if it's Horizons canon and it's prior to battle for Hoofington?

My infected hoof slammed into his face. I barely felt in control of it, like I was punching him on reflex. Whatever he was going to say, he stopped. Blood sprayed into the air. I pulled my hoof back and saw what was at the end, a long curved blade coming right out of what had been my flesh.

Wolverine, but as a pony. Awesome...

I'm not sure what others feel on this writing, I admit during the beginning there was times where I didn't feel it worth continuing.

But there was a strange compulsion to persevere, I'm quite enjoying this alternate perspective up in the clouds, getting a more in depth look of the enclave and the society. Now that the plot is progressing I'm finding myself more and more drawn.

Make no mistake, your an excellent writer, a few rough edges from what I've read from you so far (witch of everfree and Twilight III). Both excellent reads that I've enjoyed immensely but at the same time had parts I had a bit of trouble getting through.

Continue what you're doing by all means. I've yet to pick up a story of yours and not enjoy it, and this is looking promising ^^

“Most flanks are, Emma,” I retorted.

If flank isn't under (behind?) the belt, something went very wrong.

Interesting! :D
This story's taken many turns, but I think you've been making them work well. :)

I continue to enjoy this; thank you for writing. :)

"Wolf-In-Shadow"
"Wolf-In-Exile"?

And interesting developments continue. :)

“No, that’s totally different, don’t be stupid! Unlike him we’re actually going to be directly fighting a singular force of terrible evil spreading its corruption across the land. It’s not naive because I can back it up with data.”

Yeah! Now lets go suplex a bear! :rainbowdetermined2:

I don't know if it was deliberate or not, but just in case, I thought I'd let you know that Fornax appears to first be referred to with "their", then "he", and then "her".

Also, as a general comment, I've continued to enjoy the story; thank you for writing. :)

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