Fluttershy has been called weak and useless for as long as she can remember. Though she doesn't show it, she's been hurt by every insult. And she's getting desperate.
Rainbow Dash has spent nearly five years away from Ponyville, fighting and dying alongside so many other Equestrians, when a piece of home unexpectedly appears at her hooves.
Wrapped in darkness, Fluttershy finds herself in an unknown place. Where are her friends? How did she get there? What's that scratching sound following her and why is she terrified of it...
It does not make any sense. Rainbow wakes up one day to find that nopony can see her, nor does anypony care. She desperately tries to find ways to somehow undo whatever is going on. The problem is, she doesn't know where to start.
The idea was good (something similar to the movie the sixth sense), but the problem is that the writing is somewhat confusing. It would have been funny that at the end of the fanfic it was all a nightmare that Rainbow can't remember (and there the title of forget it). But I'm sure you can improve in the future.
Ohhh that hit on a spiritual level holy crud
I'm confused.
that was dark, really, really dark.
The idea was good (something similar to the movie the sixth sense), but the problem is that the writing is somewhat confusing. It would have been funny that at the end of the fanfic it was all a nightmare that Rainbow can't remember (and there the title of forget it). But I'm sure you can improve in the future.
However, I was hoping that she would manage to sort it out and everything would return to normal... sad