Missing

An amalgam of three stories originally produced as their own progressions, the Missing series includes stories from HiddenBrony's Hop, Skip, and a Jump! universe that follows the story left after Eggheads and First Date.

Chapters (2)

Call Him in the Morning · 18th Aug 2011 · 6,821 words
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Running Rings · 11th Sep 2011 · 10,462 words
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HiddenBrony

HiddenBrony #1 · Aug 17th, 2011 · · · Call Him in the Morning ·

Y'know, as standalone stories, these three chapters of the Hop, Skip, and a Jump series fall a bit flatter than other stories simply because they are meant more as bridging chapters rather than self-contained stories, and require reading the earlier stories to understand completely.

So I apologize if that bothers any of you.

Brony Tom

Brony Tom #2 · Aug 17th, 2011 · · · Call Him in the Morning ·

It wasn't so bad, but at the same time not quite as good as the others. Still a 4.5, though.

I guess the whole chapter was something of a "yeah, it's good, but it doesn't really pop" kind of story.

There were a few grammar errors I noticed: "feinting" where there should have been "fainting" and "would of" instead of "would have".

HiddenBrony

HiddenBrony #3 · Aug 18th, 2011 · · · Call Him in the Morning ·

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Man, I try to catch most of those errors when I do the re-read... but I have to say, you gotta be looking at older versions because every time you've brought up the would of/have fiasco from my past works, they simply don't exist in these versions, BT. I should know because I've taken crazy amounts of time to comb through the documents and make doubly sure that no "would of" or "wouldn't of" or "Would not of" could slip in.

It's just not something that is there anymore.

solsticebrony888

solsticebrony888 #4 · Aug 19th, 2011 · · · Call Him in the Morning ·

I liked this chapter. not as great as Hop, Skip and a Jump, being that the only one of read of yours besides this one, but it was good none-the-less. I would really like some more Applejack and Fluttershy short-stories. you strung it together so well that i cant read anymore shipping/romance about either of them, because yours is my favorite. great job :)

Not

Not #5 · Nov 20th, 2011 · · · Running Rings ·

I smiled so hard that my face was starting to hurt. I couldn't actually make any noises to express my happiness due to it being about 5 AM when I started reading this, but on the inside I was exploding with happiness twice. Big Macintosh is the best big brother a pony could ask for. I wonder how they convinced pinkie to leave Bitey at home though... He would blend in if he was there. He does have a tux and top hat after all.

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I am many things in many places. Here I am Not.

Not

Not #6 · Nov 20th, 2011 · · · Call Him in the Morning ·

With just a little bit of background this chapter is beautiful. This gives partial resolution to a powerful internal conflict in Rainbow who, let's face it, needs a little internal conflict to balance her out. It is sad, but it is a good kind of sadness. It gives us something to look forward to in the future without promise that it will be fixed. Also which generation of Dr. are you basing your Dr. Whoof on?

Karrakaz

Karrakaz #7 · Nov 28th, 2011 · · · Running Rings ·

liked it a lot, the progression kind of has me confused though, since you see the whole wedding again, which as far as i know already happened in first date, and also twilight and rainbow dash not being together anymore even though at the end of first date it seemed like they would still be.

anyway wonderfully writen, keep up the good work