Set after the events of Hop, Skip, and a Jump and Eggheads, Rainbow Dash works up the courage to ask a certain violet pony out on a romantic excursion - but even after the hard part is over, can Rainbow Dash catch a break?
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HiddenBrony
The proprietor of the series known as 'Sweet Special-Nothings'. Well known for the story Hop, Skip, and a Jump! And First Date. Also wrote the Conversion Bureau tale, A Mare's Tail.
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Working through and editing my backlog. I think this is the most editing I've done for grammar and flow so far. Which really stands to reason as this was the chapter which went through zero revisions as I've passed it along from place to place. However, like all FiMFiction versions so far, this one has just a touch more content in places that, while important, would otherwise go overlooked.
this is a great start cant wait to see what happens in the future
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Excellent story so far. I hope futute installments hold to the same quality.
well written and a good story. one problem though. rainbowdash is a girl *cough*lesbianism*cough* sorry ive got a terrrible cold
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Oh shi- you're right, she is a chick! And so is Twilight!
Truly I have made a grave error.
You have delivered once again. I'll be honest, that wedding scene really had me going!
One problem that I have seen throughout your (excellent) writing is that you use 'would of' instead of 'would have' or 'would've'.
Oh my, loved this story!
Any plans on more chapters? If so, can't wait for more!
good story, i'm enjoying it so far. you're making the unlikely occurrence of 4 out of the 6 main ponies being lesbian/bi believable!
Awesome story :D
few parts that may or may not be errors, like; if you're going to call the position "Mare of honor" wouldn't bridesmaids technically be called Bridesmares? and I'm not sure if calling their manes 'hair' is an error or not, i just don't think they've ever called it hair in the show. I really REALLY look forward a continuation of your story where Twilight gets with Dr. Whoof. You're the only author I'm going to read shipping stories from anymore, too well-written ^_^ 5 stars.
Kind of cute, but the grammar was awkward, the plot development was vague - as was the ending - and the story really didn't go anywhere.
And please, enough with Dr. Whooves. It's somewhat (but not very) excusable to have him if he has a functioning role in the story, but a cameo appearance and random allusions just detract from the main story.
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You confuse me good sir. At one point you claim the story doesn't go anywhere, but then you claim that Whoof detracts from the main story! This was along the first row of fictions I wrote when I was, how to say... 'getting back in the writing game', but even with my low ego in terms of my own writing I find you've missed the point. This is one of the few times I've actually considered asking you to read through again, but slower. Yes, you'll likely stumble over what awkward grammar there is, but the plot is very much there.
And Whoof has every reason to be there. If you've paid mind to the series I've made as a whole, you'll find the stallion to be quite important to the story, if not a Time Lord pony, but as a Doctor none-the-less. But I digress, I'm sorry you didn't enjoy the fic, and I'll try to pay better attention to grammar and plot development in the future so I can satisfy all crowds of people.
1594 just realised that was sarcasm. sry. this was the first shipping story ive read and i didnt realise there was so much lesbianism here.
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Yeah, that was sarcasm. But I'm not actually prone to making ponies lesbians and the like, but the females are the only established and strong personalities to work off of. Later works depict some straight ponies, and even at the end of this Twi is most obviously with a stallion.
Now, don't be hatin' on love just 'cause it's between fillies, man. 'Taint right, limited someone(pony?) else's love when ya ain't got business to.
best rainlight story i read
1594 biggest mistake ever, mare and mare what ever will you do? its not like there are dozens of other writers who do the same, oh wait there are never mind.
Well Hidden. I must say that I like your style. I still noticed a few typos, but not many. I am a bit confused as to why you are using unto instead of onto when unto usually just means to. Seeing Rainbow in a situation like this made me smile. It is funny and awesome to see someone so sure of herself be so uncomposed.
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I am many things in many places. Here I am Not.
'twas good and had a good ending that felt a lot like the ending to .hack//sign The ending to that was a big party with many characters that you hadn't necessarily met yet, but they were present and important in the other .hack// series. I will read some more of your stuff because I need things to help me stay awake when I pull all-nighters like tonight.
Kinda sad that they didn't get together, but a nice story regardless. Others have noted, as shall I, that there are some grammar as well as term errors(bridesmares/bridesmaids, mane/hair etc), But don't let them detract from a well thought out shipfic.
"Whoo...!" She snapped back, her wings shooting out again in reaction.
-what exactly did she order, that a drink could cause that reaction... ? lol
but anyway great fic, but like all of your romance fics, needs a sequel where the rest of the romance plays out.
After a first date, talking about marriage? Wow Twilight, I thought Rainbow was the one who moved fast.
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Wha? I don't follow you, where was she talking about marriage?
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Pausing slightly, Twilight laid the dress gently along Rainbow's backside, smiling gently. "You know, Rainbow, I don't think it will be too long before we're both up there one day."
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You might want to look over the final section again. You're taking away something completely different from what's there, I think.
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I did completely skim over something there. That makes me more sad though, as I love Twidash 
Derp, my bad
So Twilight and Rainbow aren't together? Aaawwww...
I love how you never actually say who Twilight went out with after Dash. Poor Dashie, got a case of the 'what if's'
I did notice one error, though.
"Not exactly what a meant..."
What 'I' meant, i believe is what you were going for.
Anyways, nice story! *thumbed*
10/10 Spikes
G'day!
-Jrzfine
Did I miss something?
It's not TwiDash? Even it you lead is to believe it was? That's just cruel! Still, have a like!