A very not lonely Heart's Warming

Daring Do explored the ruins of an abandoned civilization. But instead of adventure or treasure, she finds something, a little closer to home.

This was written for Flash Notion as a part of Jinglemas 2020! For more information about Jinglemas, checkout our group!

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Yoshifan30

Yoshifan30 #1 · Dec 26th, 2020 · 1 · ·

Aww this was a very nice story and very cute too and this is a very unlikely encounter which is cool so daring Do was exploring this new area called Mount aris where are the hippogriff who used to live and it looks like this is during the time before Twilight and the others came here so she explore the area finding the clues what happened to them but what she found was a seapony name Skystar and she was asking why Daring Do doing here during this holiday season I guess daring doesn't have anybody to celebrate with which that is pretty sad and that's why she's out here so she doesn't feel alone but skystar bless her goodness of her heart decided to stay with daring so she doesn't have to be alone hearths warming eve and they told story with each other this was a very short and very cute story especially during the holidays keep up the good work merry Christmas and happy holidays

Flash Notion

Flash Notion #2 · Dec 27th, 2020 · 1 · ·

Okay, so, first thing
Thank you! For actually writing something and thus sparing me the anxiety of the whole breezie thing.
This was nice!
I like the detail put into Daring exploring the city. It felt right.
And I feel like skystar had just the right mix of her usual perky-ness, and some nervousness about meeting a new pony.
I did notice some grammar and stuff- I only mention it because one was right at the start and very hard to ignore. It's not the biggest deal since even published novels have errors, but still. Trying to give constructive criticism.
Otherwise, thanks again! Happy hearthswarming!

Arcticbrony

Arcticbrony #3 · Dec 27th, 2020 · · ·

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Glad you enjoyed it^^ And ye, I did not have the time to give it the proper once over I wanted to, checking for errors and whatnot before posting.

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