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A Sleepover to Remember

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The Rainbooms are having another one of their fun little sleepovers. This time, Juniper Montage, Trixie Lulamoon, Starlight Glimmer and Wallflower Blush are along for the ride. What crazy antics will they get into?

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Mystic Sunrise

Mystic Sunrise #1 · Sep 30th, 2020 · 1 · ·

Oof. You need an editor. Badly. I can't even get past the first paragraph because it is so badly written. And then I saw you drop that Twilight apparently has Autism here.

Which, okay, she probably does have something along those lines, or maybe Asberger's Syndrome. But that is something Starlight has no right to be telling anyone. At all.

If Twilight wants people to know it, then it is something that she should do herself, and only then if she feels right in doing so.

The idea for the story isn't bad, seeing as it is your first one. But sweet Celestia, does this need work. And even the story idea has some holes in it. But that's more a personal opinion.

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