The best kind of comedy knows how to escalate. This accomplishes such--not just for the fic but in the main body of the chapter as well. It's even more comedic that our protagonist, Flash, struggles harder and harder to distance himself from the madness only to fail at every turn. The phone call brings it to a personal, intimate level and helps everything land so terribly hard on point.
I dig all of the AU versions of internet/communication applications. Twilight's tiny bit was well written and I like that, in all things, Flash comes across as both respectable and sympathetic in how he tries not to render his mother the same objectification as everyone else.
Canon characters in character, escalation comedy progressing at a perfect pace, and an absolute adherence to the formula that saw the previous chapters as being works of art.
Shallow, you just love upping the ante on this story, don't you? Not that I'm complaining, mind you.
Of COURSE Twilight just has to go into research mode to figure out the meaning behind Azure Flame's attractiveness. Maybe some kind of new, undiscovered pheromones, or something? That's my opinion, anyway.
“Uh huh,” Flash frowned. “You wouldn't be at the supermarket stalking my mom, would you?”
“Whaaaaaat? Noooooo!” Twilight snorted. “Why would I do that? I mean, just because your mom happens to radiate sexual charisma in defiance of all known normal human response to the point of making me question my own sexuality, that certainly doesn't mean that I'm trying to get readings on her as she causes a five cart pileup in the produce section when she decides to eat a banana right there in front of everyone.”
Oh, well, as long as you're not doing anything like that, Twi, then by all means, as you were! You can pick up the sarcasm in my writing, right?
I wonder if they have the internet in Neighpal? I could be a yak farmer. They must always need yak farmers out there.
I laughed several times in this chapter, but I think this was one of my favorite quotes from Flash in this story thus far.
10554897 Honestly, I think if she really wanted to, Azure Flame could start a pretty damn successful cult.
Twilight may be onto something here. There's hot, and then there's impossibly hot.
This just keep escalating. I feel so bad for Flash. And the bit about fanart was a 10/10 joke.
I sense much therapy in Flash's future...
*Blink*
In before FirstChurchofDivineYogaPants gets mistaken for a cult.
I think I can see why Flash didn't say that was his mom... his house would be inundated with people! XD
The sexual tension in this story is bith funny and aggravating because we know nothing will happen.
Twilight: wait... how did Flash know? It's like he has a six sense.
Plot twist: Flash can also reach the "impossibly hot" state but only if he isn't trying and his unaware.
The best kind of comedy knows how to escalate. This accomplishes such--not just for the fic but in the main body of the chapter as well. It's even more comedic that our protagonist, Flash, struggles harder and harder to distance himself from the madness only to fail at every turn. The phone call brings it to a personal, intimate level and helps everything land so terribly hard on point.
I dig all of the AU versions of internet/communication applications. Twilight's tiny bit was well written and I like that, in all things, Flash comes across as both respectable and sympathetic in how he tries not to render his mother the same objectification as everyone else.
Also, Princess Dream for life. Thank you.
I don't know what to say. How hot is she to create such chaos while being oblivious about it? This needs further research!
Jajajajaja
Canon characters in character, escalation comedy progressing at a perfect pace, and an absolute adherence to the formula that saw the previous chapters as being works of art.
Keep up the great work—loving every line of this.
Shallow, you just love upping the ante on this story, don't you? Not that I'm complaining, mind you.
Of COURSE Twilight just has to go into research mode to figure out the meaning behind Azure Flame's attractiveness. Maybe some kind of new, undiscovered pheromones, or something? That's my opinion, anyway.
Oh, well, as long as you're not doing anything like that, Twi, then by all means, as you were! You can pick up the sarcasm in my writing, right?
I laughed several times in this chapter, but I think this was one of my favorite quotes from Flash in this story thus far.
10554897
Honestly, I think if she really wanted to, Azure Flame could start a pretty damn successful cult.