Apple Bloom is a pony you've spent most of your time with and come to view as a little sister. That being said, you've watched her grow up from a playful and adventurous little filly into the independent mare she is today. You've seen her relish in her moments of triumph following earning her cutie mark and you've seen her at some of the lowest points in her life when she needed somebody to be there for her.
You've always been there for her when she needed that shoulder to lean on, as rare as that event takes place, but you know she requires you to be there when she comes home in a bruised and battered mess after spending time with her coltfriend. Learning what he had done to her, you take it upon yourself to show this stallion what happens when they hurt your little sister.
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WARNING: Before reading, understand that this is a non-consensual fic and involves some heavy stuff and a topic I never write for due to personal reasons. It hurt to write this.
Does NOT contain any sexual scenes, but is clearly stated what happened, so is Teen rated.
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FEATURED (briefly) 04/10/2020...twice.
05/10/2020
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Cover art credit: https://www.deviantart.com/lady-jay-bird/art/Sad-Apple-Bloom-576628860
Noted.
Great Story, kinda reminded me of a scene in Goodfellas when Henry Hill went after the guys who hit his future wife.
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Ah, Goodfellas, what a film! Can't remember most of it, but that ''How am I funny?'' scene stuck with me. Got it on a shirt, too!
(Was that Henry, or is Henry another one? I forget.)
I would do that for dear bloom I like this story so much for the abuser to get fucked up thank you for this
https://youtu.be/ODfCVxVLqiE
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My pleasure.
If there's one thing I absolutely hate and will NOT tolerate, it's a guy mistreating a girl, partner or not. They don't deserve somebody special in their life, or a girlfriend / boyfriend, whichever way they swing. It'd be a field day to beat the hell out of all of those types of people for how they treat the ladies. Nobody deserves that kind of treatment. 
I believe this is what's referred to as an educational beatdown. Some folks have a hard time learning, so you have to insert the lesson into their brains manually.
Sadly not usually so simple
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In wise words of Zenyatta: "Pain in an excellent teacher."
I'll admit, I normally don't read these kinds of stories as they're not my cup of tea, but I must say that beatdown was sensational
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Simp
he got off easy
Explaining why you didn't want to write this story is a weird promotional tactic and not one I'm sure I fully understand.
For one thing if you didn't want to write it why did you write it?
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Do not accuse me of promotional tactics. I don't do that stuff, it's not my thing. I was just describing it, simple as that.
To answer the second question: It's a two parter answer with the first being that I have a soft spot for Apple Bloom, so choosing her for this situation hurt quite a bit, but that was why I think it worked out. (in some sense.) The second part: I was once in an abusive relationship. And I have a friend who's had a traumatic experience like Apple Bloom went through.
So, in short, I wrote it because I wanted to make it clear you should respect the ladies. I wanted to make it very clear that any man who so much as puts their hands on a girl and hurts them when they're supposed to love them will always get their comeuppance. As I said in the author's notes - Respect the ladies. Or turn in your man license.
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Of course you do promotional tactics. Every author does. Even something as simple as choosing the right cover art is a promotional tactic - you do it because you want people to read your story, right?
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I suppose in some sense, yes they do. It's just to make the story look good, to get the point across. It's more a necessity than anything. I mean, why put effort into something you don't try and make others want to read? (I'll admit I sometimes spend up to or over an hour finding good quality art for covers, both for stories and YT videos.)
Also bear in mind, while I obviously wanted people to read this, I did make a blog about it describing it as a disclaimer / warning about what it involves, as I know some people aren't comfortable with these stories. Neither am I, to be honest. Non-consensual hits a nerve with me, but that's another story.
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They always do. He got what he deserved. Next time, he won't be so lucky.
Nice story.
Nicely done! It really shows how that is a very difficult aspect. In a way, that reminds me of that one mission in the first mafia game.
And I can understand your struggle, I also wrote some things that were not easy
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Or that mission in Mafia 2 where Vito's sister is upset about her abusive husband and goes to the party to set him straight while fighting to Rock Around the Clock. Loved that game.
Yes, writing these things are never easy to push through if you've lived through similar experiences, but raising awareness can help many people in the process. Sympathies.
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Yes, it's great, though I actually meant that mission from the first game where you chase the guys who wanted to harm Sarah.
Indeed! Me, if I may say, I dislike torture, but wrote it in a few stories for plot sake, wasn't easy either
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And I recognize you, read one of your Scootaloo stories long ago, was great work
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I never played Mafia, only the sequel. About the torture thing, it really is not easy to make violent scenes that are believable or realistic. Torture is usually only seen in the darkest stories on here, like Cupcakes. Sergeant Sprinkles (the author) was forced to delete it because he got attacked all the time in the comments, death threats and the like. Also like Sweet Apple Massacre, which I really, REALLY regret reading...
Oh, really? It was You Are Not Alone, right? That was the first one I EVER wrote! (Don't know if it was featured or not. It was popular, though.) Much appreciated that you enjoyed it!
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I had fun writing it. Hit a girl / force yourself on her, what'll happen to you will be very guaranteed to be far worse than anything you do to her.
Was considering making it more graphic and slow, but didn't want to turn this into a sadistic fic. I sure do love me some mare-abuser justice beatdowns!
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Well, I could show you, tell you more if you like.
Yep. Me, I try to keep it teen, with a warning. And yes, I think that was it.
Ironically, my first torture was with Scootaloo, but as it was one of my first stories, offscreen, also for the sake of treen rating
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Nah, no spoilers. I'd rather play it for myself one day if I get chance and discover the story in its entirety.
Really now? Kinda taken notice that when it comes to sad fics with some adult themes, the CMC are usually the characters involved, usually Scootaloo, sometimes Apple Bloom. I've only seen one with Sweetie where she was bulimic and almost killed herself from it, all because of insecurity. As for myself, if you've been around since that time, you've probably noticed that Scootaloo has been involved in a number of my stories with hurt / comfort themes and self-harm / suicide situations. Very heavy subject. It became more meaningful to me after surviving my own encounter, but writing for the sake of awareness, letting others know they're not alone in the struggle is what I write them for.
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Then you are in luck, on 25th September, a remake of the game was released, and I enjoy it just as I did the original years ago.
I hear ya. Me, I did it with her as a means to show her issue with flying, though I also did 2 stories with Apple Bloom, she gets traumatized from a near-death experienced/fate worse than death
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How am I a simp if I was her brother i would do the same and so would any male family member too.
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Maybe not my hands but with a metal baseball bat.
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agreed no one has the right to abuse their partner or force them into something they're not comfortable with. Honestly i would have beaten that guy up then finished him off with a powerful hit to the groin
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Um, he did. Right before he left, gave him a good belt in the knackers. Actually, there's a point: If ANY guy rapes a girl, then they should be gelded with hot tongs. Or given a ''smoothening'' like in American Dad where all their junk gets brutally removed via electric saw device.
To be frank, if some bastard even tried to make a move on my sister like that and she came to me in tears, I'd go straight after him and hurt him so bad that he'd wished I'd killed him. Last thing you want is one of my giant boot-clad feet up your arse, or somebody my size knocking on your door. I wish there was a non-negotiable law that forces rapists and women abusers to undergo sterilisation, just to ensure they don't and can't do it again.
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That could work
I love reading fics like this when I am frustrated.
Wait till Big Mac hears about this, Lonefree will probably wish he were dead a hundred times over
*whips out shotgun*
We huntin' some horse t'night.
I swear, if anyone violates my actual sister, I'm grabbing a gun.....
Anywho, I liked this, especially when Lonefree got makeshift neutered.
Amazing story, 10/10
You deserve an award for this
I will do all of this if this sort of thing happens to my little brothers. I WILL BEAT UP THE BISHES WHO DID THAT BECAUSE NO ONE, I REPEAT, NO ONE MESSES WITH MY HOUSEHOLD.
I have two siblings, my sister is 29 and my brother is 25. I am 27, but age never matters when it comes to shit like this. I get along well with my sister but my brother and I tend to stay out of the other's way.
I'm not a violent bloke, really I'm not. But if anyone ever dared to hurt them, nothing and I mean nothing could stop me from beating whoever did so senseless.
Good one shot, nicely written. Kept me here from beginning to end!
I have no idea why, but I picture the human as Arthur Morgan
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That part where he grabbed Lonefree by the throat and held the other fist up to strike him was inspired by Arthur Morgan!
''You borrowed money from my business partner, Leopold Strauss, you took the money, now I'm here to collect, what's not to understand? We ain't your idea of charity!'' - Arthur to Mr. Downes.
The entire beatdown on Lonefree does have a certain Arthur Morgan vibe to it, doesn't it?
I am overthinking this here but the way this is praised but this is implying someone needs a good reason to beat up on Appebloom when it's a very bad idea to. I know what the context is... it's just, it sounds like Applejack is saying someone needs a good reason to beat up on Applebloom. I know this is more in line of "let's here em out on why they did this" .... ignore this, I am just overthinking this!
Boredom and all that. A good story and a good cautionary tale. As if it was needing of a cautionary tale in the first place. Sorry for downplaying the message!
It also occurs to me as I read over the quote, that what I was initially saying makes no sense. So I just wrote out nothing and wasted time. In my brain, it sounded like Applejack was saying someone couldn't beat up Applebloom without a good reason in stead.
Reality: Applejack said nothing of the sort. I reacted because it sounded off, but there was nothing there. I read too quickly, I guess. Sorry again!
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And yeah, the entire set-up and beating just oozes of Arthur. Well done I say, well done.
That's awesome
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No, you weren't overthinking it: the same thought crossed my own mind a few times when I re-read it myself, and I was kinda waiting for somebody to comment upon it as well. I know how it sounds.
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Sister, girlfriend, wife, best friend's sister, doesn't matter. Even the male equivalent of those things should be kept safe from these assaults, regardless of which one they are. Nobody has any right to violate any other human on the planet. If they do, they are less than human and don't deserve to be a part of society. They'll always get what's coming to them. Some wise words they should do well enough to learn: Don't. Drop. The. Soap. Oh, they'll have fun with those people in prison!
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I got paranoid and thought I was making an out of nowhere observation. Good to know I was right initially. I felt bad at laughing at such a tense scene, but it honestly doesn't sound all that good of AJ to say something like that. "You could beat up Apple Bloom but only if you had a damn good reason for doing so." I don't think you were intending for black comedy in such a story!
Wonder what a good reason for beating up on their lil' sis would be?
But... Apple Bloom already has a big brother. Why not use him?
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Because this is a human story and a second perspective. It's not from Big Mac's view, it's from your view. It wouldn't work the other way around.
Hello again.
I would like to ask if I could do a reading of this story, and share my thoughts and opinions about certain points.
It's okay if you say no.
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Hello again... again.
I'd like to retract this statement, seeing as I have just checked my microphone quality and....
Well, just remove "quality" and I think you'll get it.
Good day!