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Best one yet, get me crying near the end.
He was so close. ;-;
Poor Sunny Days
I don't say this lightly, but this is one of the greatest stories I have ever read. No novel or set of characters aside from Project Horizons has ever been able to give me such a powerful emotional response. I just wish this story got the attention it so rightfully deserves.
But... Sunny where not lethally wounded?
"My eyes fell upon Sunny once more. Her blood was leaking from a dozen holes...nothing fatal,"
Then for no reason, Murky knows she is dead (and she is) without any mention of her?
Same for the rest... Did i miss something?
Great chapter... Damn you, damn you for sunny should she be dead as written
1. Love the writing style for this chapter. The flashback sequences were done amazingly.
2. Like the person above me said, I didn't make the leap between Sunny being taken away and her suddenly being dead. EDIT: Oh, you meant spiritually dead (or something), that makes sense.
3. Sunny's death was crushing. Honestly, you're killing me. When I first started reading, I thought that Murky would only be in Fillydelphia for a few days. Watch his hopes being destroyed again and again is scarring.
I love this story, keep it up!
This chapter was ALSO quite good, I like how you're not afraid to shake up the narrative style, by doing a "this is how we got here" story. I like that!
It had some really solid action and I was able to follow and visualize it all very clearly. It had also had some lovely bit of humor and Murky is really getting better as a character to me, as is Brimstone. I don't feel very strongly about Glimmer as of yet, she just doesn't really have a strong "hook" for me. Shrug.
I always make face when I see a character/plot/what have you taken verbatim from the Fallout games, but these are your toys and I won't tell you how to play with them.
Protege's interaction with Murky towards the end was GREAT, it said SO very much about both characters and the way Murky has grown.
Then of course there was all the senseless griffon carnage! Those poor catbirds never done any harm to no one.. well no one who didn't have it coming!
And then there was that most tragic of characters who's end rocked me to my very core. I of course mean, the ticket robot. He was a real human being, and a real hero.
Joking aside, the Sunny revelation actually DID catch me by surprise (the Doc's betrayal didn't, the quote you used pretty much tipped me off straight away as did his insistence that Murky not look out the window or leave) and it made me go
But what I don't get is how everyone was calling her dead at the end. Last we see of her it's explicitly said she's non-fatally wounded and dragged off to enslavement. *edit* I looked through your comments and apparently her being alive was an error. You should do something about that for future readers and maybe make a little announcement. It's sort of a big change from "she's being enslaved but I will break free and rescue her" to "She's dead but she'd want me to flee". I seriously went back and read the scene like 4 times trying to figure out where I missed something.
Best chapter so far in my opinion.
For FUCK sake! Cant Murky just get a break!?
Fucking HELL. This one was a goddammed emotional rollercoaster. I don't even know what to feel, besides seething anger.
That rooftop scene... amazing. Absolutely amazing. If I ever draw a scene from this story, that will be the one.
Your ability to DANGLE freedom in front of Murky's nose, only to snatch it away when he leaps for it, and having to watch him fall afterwards... incredible.
A shockingly great chapter. I thought, early on, that the Doc would betray Murky...then my mind was changed and I thought Murky would have new friends to help him...then the betrayal came and it was a surprise.
Kind of like those moments in a horror movie when you know the monster is going to pop out, but it still takes you by surprise because it doesn't happen at the moment you expect it to.
that line stuck with me more than most.
Murky is luckier than Protege in one regard. Murky knows he is a slave.
Protege thinks he's free, after all he earned his freedom by working two years and then Red Eye, or some lackey, told him he was free. But really, he's still just a slave obeying his master. He may have some authority lots of perks, but really it's all a gilded cage. He's still just as much a slave to Red Eye as he ever was. The chains are gone but the slave no longer sees the need to run away and, in fact, wants to stay.
or maybe I'm reading too much into it.
Holy shit, I commented last chapter about how full of emotion this story was. But I was crying when sunny showed him the toy. You are a really emotional author and commend you sir
Doc....he needed to die...I just wish it was in a slave pit so he could know what he condemned Number Seven to.
Fantastic chapter.
This chapter was glorious.
That is all.
angerrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr!
Please Murky, you must live!
Oh please tell me Sunny isn't dead. If she is I will start crying
This story is probably the most depressing of all the Fallout Equestria universe stories. I feel depressed after reading each chapter.
The amount of *Blam* in this story is worthy of a commissar.
Since the very first time I saw that episode, that Want-It-Need-It grenade has been a concept in my mind. Strangely enough, I think this is first time I've actually seen it used.
Typos
“Get those lugs of yours working, listen, where are they?” - *lungs
My breath as rasping - *was
behind Protégé, I could still the wastes beckon to wastes beckoning to me - could still see the wastes beckoning to me
Darn. You were so close to all three typo sentences being breath related
He was so close! And, Sunny better not actually be dead. From what I read she would survive, unless Shackles killed her in rage. Hopefully, Murk can still find Glimmer once he's back in.
Over all, an amazing story that destroys my feel box. Looking forward to reading more.
What... What is this liquid running down my face?
Tears
Oh... Lil' Murk... You Could've been free... I Can't seem to read anymore without expecting him to lose... at all costs.
*slowly going insane*
Nope
Nuh-uh
Fuck that
Such bullshit
Just no
My milky tits no
Stahp
Someone give him a break!
- A very emotional reader
"Hey baby, it's how the game is played. You are either the winner in life or the died loser." -Benny.
As much as I like the story, the see-saw of Murk's freedom is really becoming tedious. I can stomach him being a mostly useless character, but the way he unnaturally attracts the most improbable, bullshit events is starting to rub me the wrong way.
Im torn apart right now.
Writing and chapters are getting better, but really...this is so depressing and improbable that I actually seen it from the very start of the chapter.
And as I said before, this starting to rub me off wrong. Im loosing all empathy I had for Murk, Im simply so worn out by bullshit that I dont really care if he dies or not...not anymore
Still continue tough, not so far away to give up yet.
Ah! A Fallout New Vegas reference
Shit, give him a break!
This is Blackjacks level of unfortunate, damn it
I can't help but picture his head starting to slowly rotate in circles at a weird angle around in its socket.
Anything, huh?
This chapter is like a horror movie. You're just waiting for the horrible monster stalking Murky and his friends to suddenly appear and grab them when you least expect it. That's what Shackles is: a monster in body, mind, and soul. It still fills me with anger, it's a stab in the heart! What happened to Sunny Days is almost worse than if she ended up dead. At least then her suffering would be over. Now not only does she have to toil under Shackles, but she also has to live with the knowledge that the person she's been working with for years and was good friends with utterly betrayed her so he could see his loved one faster.
I completely forgot that it was Protégé who ultimately stopped Murky, damn. Those speeches he makes are just great. He's at least partially right too. Murky cannot last long out here without Brim and Glimmer. He's right to shoot down Minstrel, I don't care if that piece of shit never sees his loved one again after what he's done.
It hope Sunny is with Murky again.
You know, the moment doc showed up, I was immediately suspicious. Murky just can't catch a break, can he? Also, Protege is an idiot.
Oh boy i love this chapter!
When i read the wiki and decided to read the story, i thought it would be about a slave ran away in the chaos caused by Littlepip, and than trying to find friendship and freedom in wasteland *insert classic wasteland adventure stories*. But i was wrong, yeah, it totally makes sense that the slave in mind can't be shaken off so soon.
And then he made up his mind and tried once again! I thought oh yes, you spend more time protraiting his change and then now it's time. Buuuuuuut...
Then you cought me once again now >:) Yeah i got the feeling that this doctor would not be good, but damn i still thought he could make it. I felt a little bit sad as well when i thought i couldn't see Protégé more often cuz i reaaaaaally like him. But okay, seems like i at least don't need to worry that...
Yeup, and this is time i suddenly admire you. This is indeed a story about a slave trying to be special, not simply about another hero but with slave background.
And please let me complain a little bit... Cayenne, well. Everytime i saw a cute animal companion appeared in wasteland (or some similar story background type) i just had to take a deep breathe and step back for a second cuz i knew they will get killed sooner or later
I took it upon myself to reread one chapter of this story, remind myself why it is was my favourite one. Lately, I have been debating over which one do I like more now Project Horizons or M#7. Reread a chapter of each. And the conclusions is undecided. They are very different. I cannot bring myself to say one is better over the other.
Project Horizons is bigger, stronger, harder, buffier. What I'd call Fallout Equestria 2.0 on steroids. With unimaginably complex lore and mysteries. Over the top. Appealing to more people.
Murky is grounded. It is real. No one, who goes through this story can treat it as lightly as PH. The jokes are scarce, the harsh reality of Fallout - crushing. I love it for how immersive it is. No plot armor. No senseless stalling for our hero's benefit. Just a random buck in the wastes trying to survive.
Minstrel put it perfectly into words. Murky is just that whimpy slave that you rescued. You know he will die on his own, that is more than obvious. It is safer for him in slavery. And it pays high caps for one of their rarity.
Minstrel didn't show a single sign of betrayal. All he did was keep Murky from having a peak of the outside world.
All in all, I remembered this chapter being way shorter than it actually was. A whole 40k words of him between the stable and back inside the walls.
It is sad thinking how niche this story is, how little people will experience it's greatness.
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I’m still going through this story, and I haven’t read Project Horizons. But besides the numerous things I dislike about Fallout Equestria as a whole, this story got my attention a lot more than the OG fanfic that started the subfandom.
I’m not sure exactly what it is, however. Perhaps that this poor colt is religious and doesn’t say the bad F-word even though he went through (and continues to suffer at this part of the story) hell for a lot of his life? Maybe it’s the intriguing usually-morally-grey characters the protagonist meets across his journey? Or the author has a writing style that enraptured my attention compared to the OG Fallout Equestria? Or maybe it’s all of the above?
As I’ve said before, I’m not a huge fan of Fallout Equestria and its fan stories for many reasons. The brutal gore and NSFW content, the excessive profanity and the graphic abuse, and many other things are hugely off-putting to me. With that out of the way, I have to give credit to where it’s due, and it’s that the world Kkat created, and a very few fanfics that were inspired by his or her story, are wonderfully made, in my opinion.
-Davidtin, an enjoyer of post-apocalyptic aesthetics but not of the immoral chaos that is in it