Written as a commission for: Gyro Pony.
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This story takes place a week after the events of A Dog and A Pony Show.
Rarity was rescued by her friends from the vicious, jewel-hoarding Diamond Dogs after they had kidnapped her whilst hunting for gems with Spike. Upon escaping captivity with her friends, they had also managed to secure some of their horde for themselves, but was taking the carts of gems evening both parties, or was it stealing? Rarity, as the Bearer of The Element of Generosity, begins to have second thoughts and she heads back to the den of the Diamond Dogs.
Was this a smart move, or would it prove to be a big mistake?
Chapters (1)
Hmm...
I get what you were going for with this story, and I think you almost made it. I have no idea if this was something the commissioner specifically requested, but... at no point did I ever get the sense that Rarity was genuinely seeking to make peace. OKay yeah, they were completely in the wrong in the episode, but the synopsis makes it sound like she actually feels bad for taking all their gems. Also, all her "help" just felt mean-spirited. "I've brought you this fabulous shampoo because you smell like a dead rat's asshole. Oh, aren't I just so generous?!"
Iunno, maybe it's just me missing the point, but I was expecting more info on the Diamond Dogs. Why do they hoard gems and things like that. And I was eager for seeing the beginning of a possible friendship between them and Rarity, but even her parting comment about how she would love to come back was wrapped in an insult.
Still, decent story. Hope the commissioner enjoys it!
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First:
Second: Stop making me laugh!
I get how it can come across as mean-spirited, but I guess it's how Rarity would react to some extent, judging by how much of a germaphobe she is and how high her standards are shown to be. I figured she would say stuff along the lines of the dialogue I included, and yes, she does feel bad for taking their gems. (Even if the dogs told them to take them as long as Rarity would leave.) BUT, in Rarity's defense and in all fairness...they probably do smell like a dead rat's asshole!
Eh, some of it likely has to do with me not being a fan of Rarity to begin with. And I don't like dogs. Wet dog smell...oh, there's few things worse to smell than that.
As a final note, yes, the commissioner did sum up this kind of interaction and storyline for me to follow, so we did chat about what to include and how it should play out.
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Indeed.
I gave the initial idea of Rarity herself wondering if taking off with many wagon loads of gems was perhaps too much.
Maybe she returned a day or two later to return some of what she had ?
In that case, how would the conversation between her and the Diamond Dogs go ?
What terms would they leave on ?
I'm not a writer and FireRain has never written Rarity or Diamond Dogs before.
When I first read this, I felt that those little quips of "so you don't smell like a rat's a-holes" were part of keeping Rarity in character as the fastidious pony she is.
While at the same time, exploring the notion that she wants to leave on better terms that she originally did in the episode.
I can see that when she offered creations of her own talent as a peace offering and possibly a seed for the future.
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Thanks for your feedback.
I can see where you are coming from.
It's honest and helpful.
I enjoyed this story. It fits in with Rarity's character in the first season.
It is a great follow up to one of my favorite episodes.
This was a pretty good story of the aftermath of that episode I kind of wish we could see them again and I feel like they just completely forgot about them and I did like how you kept her character from season 1 nice job on that