Back inside Stable 4, I was destined for greatness. Outside, I was nothing more than a filly. At the same time, I also seemed to fit in very well into the horribly violent Equestrian wasteland, more than you would expect from somepony my age.
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The it's dark comment was more of an observation then anything. I wasn't I wasn't disparaging it. But perhaps you have a point about just being shock value. It does just kind of happen out of the blue. In my opinion so far it reads more like a game of Fallout 4,"and then this happened." I like a bit more reflection about events and there consequences.
Could just be me to be fair and how I perceive the writing, it's your story and you can do what you want. But the reason you might want to update up the earlier chapters a bit is because they are your first impression and people can drop the story just because they don't like something. It's normal for story writers to rewrite entire books because they want to improve it and are just not happy with how it turned out. You don't have to go that far as I know it takes time or even touch the chapters if you don't want to.
Thanks for replying to my comments, I appreciate it.
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Yup, that's exactly why I'm thinking of rewriting the first volume from scratch. Not only is it by far the worst of my writing, and so might turn away someone from my fic, but also… If someone enjoys the first volume, they might not like the later ones since the style is so different.
Also, you accidentally posted a comment on the latest chapter Makes me happy that I'm not the only one who messes this up
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Lol I didn't notice, to be fair to us both the "view on site" link takes you to the main page instead of the chapter.
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Yeah it's kinda stupid, especially since the other person might not get a notification in that case (unless they're the fic author, ofc).
What a ride so far. Almost done and really liking this story.
My only critique is the perception changes mid chapter from one character to another without warning or notice.
It's jarring trying to find out who the story is following several times in a chapter.
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Yeah, that's definitely one of the things I've learned from writing this. I do enjoy changes of perspective (especially ones where it might not be obvious whose perspective it is), but I won't do it mid-chapter in my next fics.
And thanks, really appreciate it
Well that clears things up, from a certain pov his actions make since, but you just don’t treat your spouse like that, and what he did to banter and crew is disgusting. As for snow, I don’t really know why she lied, but what she did to iron was really in the grey area and idk if she can really be blamed for it.
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Yeah, Plat's a complete asshole, blinded by his sense of "justice" to the point of believing he's always the good guy.
oof...
oof
I was really hoping everything would be rainbows and sunshine after Airdrop was out of the picture... Nothing's ever happy in the wasteland 🥲
wow big chapter, I'm sure we haven't heard the last of airdrop since all of his misdeeds haven't yet been brought to light by everyone but I'm sure impatient to see what happens between candy, iron and the others
Well, this was a can of worms. The worms are out of the can now, wriggling and squirming on the sunny pavement as a big, stompy hoof approaches.