I didn't actually read this story, but I need to thank the author. This line in the description "In a world of darkness and decay, can something beautiful thrive?" I believe just inspired me to write my own story completely unrelated to this one.
I just found this story (congrats on featured btw) and I rather like it. You do, however, need to watch your tenses. You keep mixing past and present tense, and it's rather distracting from the actual story. For example, this:
This was the third time now Twilight has had to hunt the girl down in this manner.
I didn't actually read this story, but I need to thank the author. This line in the description "In a world of darkness and decay, can something beautiful thrive?" I believe just inspired me to write my own story completely unrelated to this one.
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Why not?
...Loyalist scum.
nice to see this get an update.
Nice to see a character that isnt a mary sue or a woe is me type, a nice read compared to others.
I just found this story (congrats on featured btw) and I rather like it. You do, however, need to watch your tenses. You keep mixing past and present tense, and it's rather distracting from the actual story. For example, this:
mixes past tense with present perfect.
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Exactly... she doesn't seem to miss them at all or even mention them, that strikes me as odd.
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I am afraid I don't know what you mean.
Please clarify! I enjoy reading criticism for my work, good or bad. Can't hurt the artist by learning what the audience prefers right?
Music is the universal language. No matter what you are, music leaves an impression on you.
Is this gonna update at any point in the near future? Chapters seem to take a very long time for this one...
Update?
Update?