The Forest

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TwilightGamerz

TwilightGamerz #1 · Apr 12th, 2020 · · ·

Do you will continue your story. I really want know what happen to rarity and fluttershy and applejack. BTW,your story is awesome.

Cinders of War

Cinders of War #2 · Apr 15th, 2020 · · ·

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Thanks for taking the time to read it. What about it did you like? And I did have some ideas for a sequel, but that's if it's something people want to read.

Cinders of War

Cinders of War #3 · Apr 16th, 2020 · 1 · ·

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SHE GOT MERKED BY A F*$^7ing (Can't swear I am a Family Channel. Okay, Elsa Spider-Man Mickey Mouse Play-Doh Gone wrong and all that) DEMON, MONSTER, A BALD TELLATUBBY. BRUCE WILLIS A**

Thanks for taking the time to let me know! Yeah, english is a strange language, there's always weird ways to use everything.

Anything I can work on to make these kinds of stories scarier?

Cinders of War

Cinders of War #4 · Apr 16th, 2020 · 2 · ·

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Haha, thanks for this feedback. Yeah! Weather and smell, that’s a good idea. I’ll be sure to try these out the next horror story.
As for swear words, it depends how you use the word. Using it to refer to an illegitimate son, well, yeah, but just calling someone that, I guess it counts? Haha. And hahaha, glad you really like That! Perhaps I should try to come out with more ideas and continue That, since Flame of Disparity is done.

Thanks so much for taking the time to read this! I guess I know what I’ll try to work on next!

Skulljack17

Skulljack17 #5 · May 2nd, 2020 · 2 · ·

I liked it. Reminds me of a Wendigo, a creature that is like a man, and yet clearly not. Something was traded, exchanged...sanity and soul for strength and the ability to survive. To persist, despite what may come. It's not bad at all, and I've seen far worse horror showings, so to speak.

Cinders of War

Cinders of War #6 · May 3rd, 2020 · · ·

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Thanks a bunch for taking the time to comment. If I may ask, what points can I improve on? Still trainin' up on my horror style.

Skulljack17

Skulljack17 #7 · May 4th, 2020 · 2 · ·

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Couldn't say I rightly know for sure. More of a reader instead of a writer, heh. I found the beats of what was going on to be good, and the clear struggle that was had by those who survived was obvious. Maybe a little more heartbreak as to those lost, but that's just personal musings, and I can see why that in particular wouldn't work in this story, especially with the eventual outcome of things. I still liked it overall, and encourage you to keep at your craft while I read some of your other stories!