They say everything comes to an end, but it seems like rainbows never fade. Though they disappear visually, a certain magical element stays in our hearts. The same is to be said for Rainbow Dash. No one ever thought she'd go. Accidents were common for Dash, but... nobody thought it'd end this way.
Like I said, rainbows never fade.
(Note: This is my first fic, so constructive criticism is welcome.)
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Nope sorry don't read stories like these pass! and the picture is misleading!
Not trying to put down your writing at all neither! I just totally despise tragic fics. I like seeing conflict maybe some harm but no death! and especially not RAINBOW DASH AHHHHHH!! so I am sorry.. I will not read or even vote. Again I am sorry if I offended you.
Urgh.
Had a longer critique but I accidentally lost the page so it's gone. So here's a sort of reminder based on what I read:
Use lines whenever switching scenes so you don't confuse the reader
Use quotation marks for speech cause I saw that you used apostrophes when 'I' was recalling what Granny said.
Other than that, couldn't find anything major so I guess it's pretty good for a first fic.
rainbow noooooooooooo!!!
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Not bad. Not particularly my cup of tea, but it has some potential.
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I do have to admit.
I was GREATLY amused by the fact that it WASN'T Twilight who caused the magical accident for once.
I am very glad you ignored that trope.
Like for the writing style and the premise, a good little sadfic
Good job my friend but I do think you could have clairifed what Rarity did that caused the accident that led to Rainbow Dash's untimely end!
thank GOD i can whip my emotions back in line through years of practice
heh but seriously dat left a dent in my feels
its stories like these that push me to make sure to be the one to die first
among my friends HAHA!
Meh.
Thanks everyone for the comments
I'm really grateful for them, and also a big thanks for the constructive criticism! I will be working on that ASAP! Thanks again! 
awww that is so sad, ur gonna make me get all sappy!
That was so cute and sad, u did a good job weighting a sad story I can tell cuz my jaw got stiff and my eyes are watering
dammit I told myself I wouldn't be crying... so much for that. well done though
I cied
Damn..... that hit me....