Sometimes It's Hard To Say No

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Fluttershy, Rarity and Rainbow Dash have been charged by Celestia to bring an obnoxious doctor to Ponyville, but he seems less than willing. Can they persuade him, and can they stop themselves from punching him in the process? Well, they can only try, right?

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fluttershywriter

fluttershywriter #1 · Aug 20th, 2012 · · ·

Well, this looks promising! I laughed out loud a few times. Nicely done!

Mexi-Can

Mexi-Can #2 · Aug 20th, 2012 · · ·

three killstreak... spy plane standing by.

Tomi

Tomi #3 · Aug 20th, 2012 · · ·

Gigantic likeness of Celestia and Luna, wide eyed and smiling together as they gaze down on Mane with vacuous expressions and dead eyes mocking him.

Cant stop laughing, help.

Is that rat going to be okay? I’m sure it isn’t natural for them to be floating like that..’
Hope that rat will pop up every now and then in the future chapters.

Good work so far, hope you get next chapter up soon.

reflexrex

reflexrex #4 · Aug 21st, 2012 · · ·

Wooo, glad this fic seems to be going down well so far! It was fun to write, so I'll probably be posting the next chapter pronto. Here's to the lulz (hopefully) yet to come!

Chief Big Tree

Chief Big Tree #5 · Aug 21st, 2012 · · ·

Not too shabby, reflex, not too shabby. I chuckled a good bit!

Looking forward to more of this.

Backburner

Backburner #6 · Aug 22nd, 2012 · · ·

You askedfor my opinions and here i am to give them. I'll be doing a read through reveiw so as I see things pop up int the reading i'll come down here to type my responses. Disregard anything I say that is resolved later in the chapter as I may not bother to edit this comment after I finish it.

*There be spoilers beyond this point*

Your paragraph where Fluttershy sccidently calls the docter a handsome stallion is a bit off. First of all it was reallly hard to tell who was saying it, I had to read it twice to figure it out. Second, it's out of character, Fluttershy dosn't let things slip like that, third Fluttershy dosn't gock as much as she quietly watches, your story though, maybe you see her as a little braver then i do.
The ever the diplomat line seems out of place, exspetially do to the fact it sounds like she suducing him, i supose thats diplomacy but your on the boarderline (HAH bordeline, diplomacy, political jokes.)
Never heard hoffing used as a cuss word, not a fan of bucking?
It says Rarity came out of a shock sielence, when did she enter said sielence? Whit the mascarra comment? That was only a paragraph or two ago.
That is neither here nor there? What do you mean by that?
House? He has a house? You didn't mention it till now.
Say that Fluttershy emerdes from her mane before she speaks.

All and all, very interesting. I like the idea of the mane six, (or in this case mane 3) dealing with a pony that dosn't buy into the whole freindship thing. If you keep wrighting, i'll keep reading.

kaminohi