An alternate excerpt from IWAM: True Love Never Dies (A story I hope I get to write).
Discord has always prepared himself for the worst. Outliving his loved ones was an easy fix, just pure immortality. A loved one stricken with an illness, a mere poof away. But death? No pony can prepare for death.
For Day Four (Tragic/Angst/Sad) of Fluttercord Week
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Dawww poor Discord :'( <3 <3 <3 He's trying so hard to create something perfect, without imperfection and without magic. He's literally yelling at him and his body to do something perfect, despite going against his nature to leave at least one imperfection on something:'( That, right there, just killed me :( Also, it's also strangely funny yet depressing and dark that on Fluttershy's gravestone, it includes "Yay"...I don't know how to feel about it. So wait, is Discord in this story singing "So close" throughout or is it just background music going while Discord is doing stuff?
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I was thinking that this is just going on his head, thinking how close he was to saving her. He was only mere inches from saving her. It would’ve been more thoroughly explained in the full story.
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My only suggestion would be for you to take this out and let the song guide you when writing out Discord's thoughts throughout this process. It already pushes the audience's patience when you have characters sing in your fanfics, believe me I know and I get those comments, but when you have songs in your fanfics without having the characters sing it or some kind of stereo/machine playing out the song in the background, then it draws people out of your story.
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Granted, this part of the excerpt I used hasn’t been updated in a few years, but it’s understandable that it would do that. I’ll make sure to fix it when I get back to it.