Hello my name is specimen 6 but everyone calls me 6 for short i was once a human female pegasusister but i met a guy that looked like mr. Wayland and i bought some stuff then got sent to equestria as a chest burster and well turns out I bursted out of my previous body and to make matters worse I am in a research facility were changelings have killed all the ponies by breeding xenomorphs so yeah when I get out I'm gonna do my best to kill/harvest all who are responsible for the deaths of the equestrians and I'm not alone in this [displaced fic]
Chapter 1-5 are the prologue to ark-1 of the story and the displaced crossover's won't happen till chapter 6 ark-1. So I hope you all enjoy the story and have a great day. 
I don't own avp or mlp other than oc's
interesting. If I may suggest, make paragraphs for easier reading.
LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Love the old game and really loved this chapter would like to see more
I love playing AVP on the Xbox 360 it was best game wish they make a long alien campaign
This will be a very good story.
What happened to spike?
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he's in the resistance camp
I really liked this story, Please continue with the good job. Thanks for the chapter :D
Always been interested in the AvP game this is will you be putting a predator in this or just the xenos
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there will be predators but not until later.
Nice that would be rather interesting to see I foresee many a changing having their heads ripped off
Two main issues. Your sentences are too long & lacking some proper grammar, making it hard to read. Also, the story is far too much a cookie-cutter of the game. There are other minor points, but I'll focus on these two.
For the first, I suggest tossing each paragraph (if not the whole chapter) into a word editor & letting it show you what corrections could be made. Microsoft Word is an obvious choice for this, but there are other free bits of software you can do this with. Even some that use a web browser so you're not actually downloading anything. Having a proof reader helps, but there is still quite a bit getting through, leaving the whole chapter a bit rough.
For the second, the first chapter can be excused, but from the second or third chapter on, it really should divert off of the games story line. Similar events can certainly still happen, such as the predators arrival, but otherwise it's just a 90% written copy of the game with some names changed. This may be interesting to some, but most others will just get bored & drop your story the moment they realize that is what's happening. If you don't consider yourself to be the greatest of writers & / or one with an imagination strong enough to divert much from the games story (which there is NO SHAME in either), then at least put a notice on the stories front page to give a warning. You mentioned that the first few chapters are a prologue, but that isn't quite the same. Example below:
[This story / these first chapters more or less follow the events of the AvP Game]
This can warn readers that the story or first few chapters will feel very familiar for anyone who has played the game, reducing the chance that they'll be disappointed upon discovering it themselves.
Otherwise, your story is interesting enough & I'll be watching for the next chapter to see where things go. I'm personally curious about these Queens born from the Alicorns.
My apologies if what I've said came off as cold or harsh.
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It's ok, I actually have a answer for the fic being like the game the first 5 chapters follow the game mostly. But at the end of the 5th chapter this go differently and I have something likely no one will suspect. Just bare with me for a little while and you'll see what I mean once the 5th chapter comes out. Also sorry about the grammar I've never been good about that and my old editor prity much quit on me and I haven't been able to find anyone willing to help me.
Most interessting
I expected actualy that you play out the game story than crashland on Equestria with or without other Xenomorphs.
Since you have a Phoenix feather even a total destruction of all lifeforms on the Science Vessel you rise from the ashes of the crash landed wreck...
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It needs really some edits here or there.
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Indeed. A good start. I wonder why the Author killed off everyone... Its simpler to start decades, centuries or millenia before MLP storyline...
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Really love the mod that allows you to plax Singleplayer campain co-op up to 4 players. Only downside is no respawn if you die... Also singelplayer campaign co-op mods has no balance. In short:
Marines basicly run out of ammo very often & if your not careful game triggers might lock players in areas.
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Meh... PC MASTERRACE since we have mods for days.
Soundtrack/ soundenviroments / co-op mods and even self made missions
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Looks like it. I hope at least it will.
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Its nice but i really dont see the point killing of everyone
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Personaly i think replaying the game and narration of it would be a nice 'pre story' wile crashing the science vessel into Equis would be the start of the story...
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I never expected to see you here
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Xenomorph are almost as awesome as Changelings.
One of the reasons i love AVP. There are some good xeno storys out there in Fimfiction
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Okay. A friend of mone made 2 xenomorph stores on fanfiction, which I thought to make a mlp crossover to it one day
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There are why to few good ones. Maybe i see it in the search list one day
There is a displaced story on 'Six' out there.
I recommend it
Maybe both displaced Six can meet one day
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They must have a field day with all the Changelings running around. The hunt will gain the unblooded younglings a lot of prestige.
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There are many trophys to be made. MUHAHAHAAA!
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i could tell you more of you like
Hive was my longest match with 4 hours. Had to wrap it up because the Host didnt expected me to survive that long
Good times...
Did you guys know the game has co-op campaign? It was buggy last i checked but it was still funny
Update ETA?
Well done. I'm enjoying this story a lot. Dont take my criticism as a negative thing. Writing is like Music and Art, it takes hours of practice to get good at it. Lots of broken guitar picks and lots of wasted canvas. You get better through practice.
The Monk
"Yes, I will eat the Fear Turkey." -Illua
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Thank you for the advice, and a lot of reasons to why my story has a lot of errors is because my proofreader/editor bailed on me halfway through the story so I had to do everything else by myself.
But I'm glad you enjoy it, as a side note once it reaches ch.5 is were the real story begins because the first 5 chapters are basically the game. Pritty much being the prologue of the overall story.
How's it going. And how far is the next chapter?
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Google Doc's is great for correction of general mistakes.
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Great question
When will the next chapter be released? I wanna read how far Six has progressed now that she had freed the Queens from captivity. Also, will Celestia live instead of getting burned to death, will Six become next in line for the throne on Equestria instead of on a ship, and will Queen Chrysalis die by her hand?
Im about to read this but I already can see where this is gonna go since your planning for crossovers at chapter 6+
Plus the fact you're doing crossovers at all, fun
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When's the next chapter? I only ask because I am a HYUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE fan of the Aliens franchise.
New chapters ?????
Continue please
nice can't wait to see more soon keep up the good work
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And that was only the first chapter
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Ever played AvP2 plus Add on? That was fun
- Marines with up to three Sentryguns free to be deployed.
Predators with self destruction ability when they reach 10% or less.
- Xenomorph... Em... ¯\_(ツ)_/¯
Anyway if one uses the UMP - Ultimative Map Pack one get over 300 new multiplayer maps and some of them are extreamly high developed.
One is a full functional base where airstrikes can be called outside the front section on the base where the alien can attack from. The aliens can tunnel underground inside the hive ( alien spawn point) to avoid them. The Marines have multible defenses in place to protect the front so the aliens attack don't destroy the front gate. Once the alien breach the front section the marones can retreat into the base that has sentry gun employment. The sentry guns can be deactivated by destroying the main power of the base. Marines can delay that with welding the vents shut before aliens breach the main entry section.
At the core of the map us a map room tracking alien movements, perfect for a coordinated counter attack from rhe marine side.
A brave marine might fight his way to the front entry to sctivate the Emergency power generator to restsrt the Sentry gun defense system.
The last stand of the marines was usualy near the maproom/command center or the armory...
Good times... Good times...
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Pc versions are more fun with mods. Especially the fan made campaign of AvP2 and the addon Primal Hunt.
Good times... Good times...
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Really hope so, my other favorit Xenomorph storys are completed or on hiatus...
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He probably get ignored by everyone. Thats his special Talent
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Unless... He isn't... DUN DUUN DUUUUUN!
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How about females once? ♤
They are bigger and stronger usualy...
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Looking forward to it
Are you still writing?
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yes, I'm just taking a break. Don't worry I'll be back soon.
Have u played Aliens: Fireteam Elite? Bcuz I learned from the game that the black goo from Prometheus and Alien: Covenant is called Pathogen. Weyland-Yutani used the substance as part of their experiments on the planet LV-895, and had even set the Engineer Ship they found on autopilot to head straight for Earth to unleash the Pathogen on human life.
Pretty interesting concept
Is Spike still alive in this too?
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he is, i don't want to spoil it anymore than that though. I'm still workingon the story chapters itself.
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Ok