Not bad
Also first comment! WOOOO!

The answer is yes. And then sex happens.

Best ending ever. Loved the story. I'm giving it a hunky Shining out of a small Twilight.

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Please keep in mind, I know I can be overly critical and negative at times. I can always find something to nitpick, even in the greatest works of literature ever written. Please don't take it personally!
-doing what Applejack referred to as "sibling bonding" -- I think I can see the innuendo there ... pretty nice way to open the story.
-Really nice how casual they all are about fucking each other. I like this version of Equestria!
-do you intend to fuck me right here in your foyer. -- needs a question mark.
-I do think the final anal scene should have either been omitted or fully developed. As it stands now, it's kind of a tease.
-Pretty good pacing on this one, though I'm not sure a story this short really needs to be split into two chapters. Although, on the other hand, the chapter titles are cute.

To clarify what these scores mean, check my judging rubric.
Cloppability: 94/100
Allure: 75/100
Enticement: 90/100
Immersion: 89/100
Prose Quality: 89/100
Total Score: 437/500
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This was wonderful to read.