Twilight Gets a Puppy
Season 4
By TDR
Flounder to the Finish.
Epilogue
[ Crystal Empire]
“In lucent of the ostentatious display being quite exemplar as well as compellingly put together, in lieu of or even because of the age category presented. The originality was something quite unexpected when compared to other rival ternion, who while also putting their own spin on things, with the exception of the group plagiarizing miss Brisby's well known work, Nimh, still seemed to incorporate elements of other works and sometimes even each other. The choreography was much more refined than expected in this category of display, while still requiring work, it could almost be on par with at least a moderate amateur performance. The motivation however was truly the biggest point of interest as they seemed exceedingly driven and that energy was expertly channeled into their presentation, with no displays of stage fright, nor hesitation in what I expected were several impromptu changes in the routine due to small errors that were expertly ad-libbed on the spot. While noticeable they hardly deviated from the message of the performance. In light of the combination of these elements of the display I shall be giving a favorable tally to this group.”
The other judges, the competitors, and the entire audience stared at the speaker.
Except of course for the collection of mares, and a few stallions, that fainted at the sound of his voice.
Shining Armor snorted in amusement as Rahs stared back at everyone staring at him. His ears flattened to his head and he let out a sigh.
“Woof.”
“He says it was good.” Shining Armor smirked holding back a chortle.
“OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOHHH!” the whole stadium erupted as Rahs smacked his head into the judges desk beating his forehead against the wood as he held up a card reading 8.9.
“I must agree, that the performance was superb.” Miss Harshwhinny stated with a hint of more emotion in her voice than she had expressed with any of the other ones aside from Dinky Doo's group. Granted that filly could give a rock a heart attack without trying. They had to talk Cadence down from giving her group a 80 on a ten point scale.
She held up a place card with a 7.2 on it, her highest score thus far save for the aforementioned Dinky Doo, who got . 2 higher.
Still with the last judge having shown her tally, the winners by .5 overall for the Ponyville district, were the Cutie Mark Crusaders.
“Spike I need to have a word with you.” Miss Cheerilee stated as she pulled the small dragon to the side of the back room of the stadium, frowning down at him. The rest of the area was filled with screaming foals and a number of family members and others congratulating the Crusaders.
“Hmm what's up?” Spike questioned.
“I am quite cross with you for lying to me about the train, and I am even more cross with you threatening Diamond Tiara.”
“Ahh found out about that huh?” Spike let out a sigh.
“It was uncalled for Spike and I had hoped you would remain the more level headed one in class that I could trust.” Cheerilee scolded. “While I rather expect this sort of thing from your sister, I trusted you to do better. So imagine my surprise when several other students brought this to my attention.”
“She needed it.” Spike stated, unrepentant.
“it is not your place to judge that. Nor did she need to be terrified like that for no reason Spike.” Cheerilee stated with a glare. “ You should have informed me and I would have dealt with her.”
“Maybe, but you and I both know punishment doesn't take with her, it just makes her madder and more eager to go after the ones who she perceives are the cause of her punishment. Besides do you really want to deal with spoiled again?” Spike offered.
“That is not your call to make Spike.” Cheerilee stated.”Spoiled is all mouth any way, Filthy Rich is much calmer and easier to deal with. Problem parents are my concern, not yours.”
“Yet Diamond remains a bully. Whose favorite targets are friends of mine.“ Spike pointed out. “Thing is this is to protect her as well as the Crusaders. What do you think Princess Luna would do if she knew her 'younger sister' was being bullied? How well do you think Applejack would handle it when she has a hard time with her own emotions and even her own body after this curse of hers. Heck the less said about what Rainbow Dash or Scootaloo's parents would do the better.” Spike offered. “And that's hardly even all of it.”
“What?”
“What happens if Diamond finally pushed one of them too far and they lashed out at her. Diamond might be an earth pony but she doesn't have near the power or durability a life long farmer like Bloom has, not to mention Applebloom's still learning things from your mare friend, and Zecora has taught her some potentially dangerous things. Then there's Sweetiebelle, who's being taught magic by Princess Luna, who wants to train her up to be a magus. A war mage...“ Spike offered. “And we can't forget Scootaloo, who despite not having a major patron like the others, is a powerhouse on her own and is likely the most physically fit out of all of them, including Applebloom. Add into the fact that she's taking two martial arts classes because Dash did and so far she's really good at them. Would you rather I terrify Diamond Tiara or let one of them snap, which Scootaloo almost did this time?”
Cheerilee stared down at the dragon a moment before letting out a sigh. “I cannot fault your logic Spike. I can fault your execution. And I will be bringing this up with Nightlight and Twilight Velvet as I expect your sister would just give you a high hoof if she caught wind of this. I will also be assigning detention and it will be some time before I place my trust in you fully again.”
“Expected, and accepted.” Spike nodded.
“For now however go back to the party, we will discuss this again later, and you will leave Diamond Tiara alone.” Cheerilee ordered.
“So long as she behaves herself.”
“Spike.”
“Fine, fine....”
[Ponyville]
“The nerve of that ass... How the heck does Rarity deal with him?” Twilight fumed.
“Likely the same thing he thinks about you Sparkle.” Chrysalis offered from the Library couch.
“Chrysalis? What are you still doing here? Shouldn't you be in the Crystal Empire judging the Games flag carriers?”
“Pffft yeah right. I sat in on, I lost count of how many, junior recitals and other events preformed by foals when we were still hiding. For every decent performance there are thousands of foals that are only skilled enough to be a back ground tree in a desert scene. The parental love was great, but holy fuck was the rest bad." Chrysalis waved a hoof in the air dramatically. “I have no idea how your brother can stand it.”
“He can't.” Twilight smiled darkly.”I tricked him into going to the Empire for something else and let Shining and Cadence trap him there for this as I signed him up to be a judge.”
“Bucking Tartarus mare. You are far more evil than I thought.” Chrysalis clapped her hooves in approval. “I am almost upset I sent a stand in and missed his reaction, almost.”
“A stand in?”Twilight offered.” You trust some one else to assume your identity?”
“Just this one.” Chrysalis grinned.
[ Crystal Empire]
Shining Armor took note of Cadence's reactions to the foals. His wife's lowest score for the day was 9.8 and that was only because a pegasus foal who flubbed a line swore and she had to dock the team for that.
This would be a discussion later he could feel it.
Shining himself was just making up arbitrary scores at random depending on how well the foals seemed to have their act together.
Miss Harshwhinny and Rahs were taking this far too seriously and had ranking and reasons for every single decimal point they gave or took away.
Then there was …. 'Queen Chrysalis'.
The changeling sitting to his left was a stallion. He was also smaller than Shining was. He had a tiny paper crown on his head from Hay Burger and long stringy hair that Shining was pretty sure had started life as a mop before it became covered in green mildew.
He also had a sticker on his chest that read ' Hello, my name is 'Queen Chrysalis and definitely not Bees'.
He made up scores based on what number he could remember, or he copied some one elses card. At one point he held up an uno draw four card.
Cadence played along with it. Shining didn't say anything, but rolled his eyes at the changelings antics.
Miss Harshwhinny was not amused, but that was normal.
Rahs was grumbling under his breath about digging a shallow grave for his sister as the 4th hour of nine hours of events began.
For Spike being the level-headed sibling, I am not surprised some things of his siblings did wear off on him, no matter how small.
Honestly, I can sorta understand Cheerilee here, but then again, she just says the usual American teacher thing: "Don't fight back, better tell the teacher, so the teacher can... do nothing".
Don't hate on Bees, Shiny. He's doing his best
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It's less she's 'don't fight back as she does punish those she sees or hears about and more DT does not take any responsibility for her actions seeking to only blame others for what she never seens as her fault. If she's punished for picking on the crusaders, it's their fault for her sitting in detention not hers.
It's hard to deal with a mind set like that.
Oh god, not the Bees.
Which would have acomplished nothing, just like every other time you have no doubt "dealt" with her, how many times have you tried that again?
Because there is this saying about trying the same thing over and over again expecting different results
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Ah, also, how will you be dealing with that episode when it comes along? I didn't quite like that one, if I'm being honest.
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Cheerilee in this story has dealt with DT quite often. She is well aware she is a bully and has punished her accordingly. The problem is DT blames everyone else for her own actions and refuses to do anything but plot while she's being punished against those she blames for her problems.
Cheerilee tries but it doesn't work on DT
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Not many did . I've not seen it so i couldn't tell you
I'm hitting a point where i stopped watching the show the first run and there's episodes this season i've never watched.
I then proceed to draw 4 cards “What color bees?”
Bees is awesome.
I just picture the changeling version of Moon Moon
Also need more kevin. Pretty please with Bees the changeling on top(would have been a cherry but AJ got mad, tried an apple, Rahs ate it. went with a cupcake, there was a white flash so I think Celestia got it.)
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Oof. Yeah, I stopped watching around the same time. The show just lost it's feel, yaknow?
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Not sure why i stopped, but i did see Starlight's first apperence and i think that was it.
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I dropped the show between Starlight's first appearance and her subsequent.....well....spoilers?
Did Rahs just make a speech where the number of letters in each word made the value of e, the base of natural logarithms or someting?
Cheerilee is trying to keep the children innocent? You kidding? they have to learn to be restrained otherwise theres no reason to feel anything when doing whatever brutalisation they want.
Children can fall into three main camps in what they tend to do? Evil, Idle, Ill? Before learning by example.
Did I just see a Secret of Nihm reference?! Stop hitting my childhood in the feels!
oh my lol hilarious
Never underestimate the power of the green #4 UNO card in the right hooves. Chuck Norris once won the World Series of Poker despite holding only a Joker, a “Get Out of Jail Free” Monopoly card, the two of clubs, the seven of spades, and a green #4 card from the game UNO. Of course, that was Chuck Norris; your results may vary.
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Gotta admit, Twilight is fitting in well with the other gods now. I half wonder how much longer it'll be before she starts directing annoying pranks/kills to Celestia, lord knows that a godly prank war has likely been brewing considering the temperament of the Equestria based ones, I want to see it explode into insanity while Discord sheds a proud tear made of ketchup.
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Ketchup? I think you mean sheds a statue of the Pieta (in marble) as a tear...
...that first paragraph gave me a headache
Oof
Bee's the greatest spy of any generation
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Not even close. Such a thing would be impossible anyway, as the 14th digit of e is 0.
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It's also impossible because i have no idea what either of you are talking about.
I gotta admit, Cheerilee rounding on Spike like that set off some bad high school memories. Teachers that only protect the children of rich donating parents, and actively villify any who try to stand up for themselves. I get that's not the case here, but still.
Found a typo
Also nice chapter Rahs's full on english speech about the crusaders's performance was hilarious
Another aspect of the God of Dream? He has such a dreaming voice.
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Basically, e is an irrational number that shows up a lot in mathematics. Much like pi, its digits go on forever: 2.71828182845904523536.... Booster Spice was wondering if the sequence of words Rahs said had any relation to those digits. Because there are no words with zero letters, such a relation would be impossible, unless you defined punctuation as being a zero-letter word.
One thing I'm really liking here is that I've really seen the grammar improve over the course of your writing. In season 1 the errors, while mostly minor, were all over the place, but for the last few chapters, I've felt too awkward to post a comment with only 1-2 minor corrections on it without any other content. Even the misplaced punctuation errors have mostly disappeared, which was one of the things that stood out to me when reading the other seasons. Keep up the good work, I've really enjoyed the story so far and I'm loving it even more now that the errors have almost completely vanished.
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This was the only case of misplaced punctuation that was distracting, the double-quote before Chrysalis should be moved one space to the left.
I wonder how Miss Cheerilee would react to Spike's chewing DT out being considered tame by comparison to what his siblings would have done. I can just imagine Nightlight quipping "well at least she didn't end up in trash-can like the bullies Rahs used to deal with".
Spike, what did I tell you about dealing with bullies? It is best done with excessive force.
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I try
dt needs to meat Q / Discord or do i mean Q for a good beat down. i am thinking a eek as a space slug may do her good.
...just bees.XP
Brisby... Nimh.... I c wut u did there story... keep it up
Rahs.... never change.... That was epic.
Here comes Flurry Heart!
Bees is a tough but fair judge.
Cheerilee.... us being all too realistic. Spike didn't even threaten her, just pointed out some facts the idiot failed to consider. Fine next time let Rahs know about the bully issue.
PRICELESS Spike 👍
Chrysalis & Twilight? Purrrfect scene 👏
Bee? I dont get that one
Bee... Not is not the smartest... But he trys anyway
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Wow. Great way to be a judgemental ass towards a pony who's only fault is having a controlling, abusive, vile bitch of a mother.
Try thinking about why someone does something before acting like you have the right to dictate life and death.
Better yet, maybe rewatch the actual show. And pay a bit more attention to the lessons, this time.
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Considering the teacher isn't solving the problem she just stalling it till the next time it pops up and sometimes in life you have to play hardball with a hard stick. Spike reminded diamond of what the possible consequences of her actions might lead to if she didn't stop and let her imagination do the rest. The teacher having to face that her method wasn't stopping the problem and that the possible consequences should the bullying not stop would not be pretty. They seen twilight mad only someone stupid would mess with those that she holds in her and their loved ones.
Don't know why, but i laughed violently at Bee antics this time. I loved Bees redicules apperance.
Pranking becomes more obvious, i can see why Celestia has made it hobby.
Filthy Rich is a self made rich nobel, unfortunately he is missing on Spoiled Milk
richruined their only foal. In time that will bite them in the back.Teach a child to disrespect others and it eventually uses that against one self. Poor filly.
CMC actinh big without massiv destruction? A definitive impressive archivment for the group!