Not everyone can afford the latest tech. When I got my hands on a pair of hand-me-down AR glasses, I didn't realize my cracked AI companion app would pull me into a fight for humanity's future - and her own.
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Honestly this is becoming a little challenge to myself, wondering how I can keep getting the same idea across multiple stories in different ways each time so that I'm not actually posting "the same thing".
Here I'm going to take a moment to note with some interest that as of this post the comment I'm linking to actually has lost a downvote. It did have seven, at the moment it has six. Hmm.
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So... this feels like a first chapter? And it's incomplete?
Are you continuing this?
Don't get me wrong, I like it so far.
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This is a first chapter to an idea I had, yes. Who knows if I'll actually continue it.
Holy butter buscuit, its Cloud Hop. Cool to see you writing again bro!
I liked it, for the most part, and it's written well. Kudos
I really liked this one. I'm kind of a sucker for "companion AI" stories, so I may be biased, but this was great. I think it maybe spends a little too long technobabbling in the opening scene (especially given the word count limit), and I'd like to get a little more information about our main character along the way, but this feels like a really solid start to something interesting. I'd love to see it continue, if you do decide to add more to it.
This story does a great job of setting up the setting and main character. It conveys just how bleak the world is and how tenuously the main character keeps their place in it. Details like how Mike’s got a nice apartment and can give away an AR set, while the main character has a tarp and has to flee homeless raids are great at showing what’s going on. That said, I’ve read a ton of dystopian fiction, so some of these ideas were kind of familiar to me.
For edits, I did notice some tense changes in the first section (goes from past to present in the paragraph where Mike talks about GAI self-directed learning stuff, and then from present to past in the paragraph starting “Something like that, yeah.”). Also, “My adobe” should be “My abode.”
oh damn :O chances of this being expanded/continued?