• Published 19th Nov 2019
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Marks for Efforts: Twilight's Treatment - DakariKingMykan



The CMC won't forgive Twilight for misjudging them

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Closing act: Reconcile

Twilight landed with a thud on the floor, having off the sofa, and a blanket fell over her head.

She frantically got up and brushed the blanket off to reveal she was in her own castle, and it was morning as the sun was starting to shine through the windows.

Starlight and Spike rushed into the living room, having heard her fall and move around.

“Twilight, are you okay?” asked Starlight.

“We heard you, you were yelling in your sleep.” added Spike.

Twilight slumped into the sofa and sighed heavily in relief. “It was all a dream. There was no angry mob!”

Starlight and Spike gawked at one another with strange expressions.

Starlight then spoke to Twilight, “Spike found out why the group of ponies were mean to you the other day.”

Spike stepped forth, “It turns out that the girls told Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon about what happened, and Diamond told her mother what happened.

Naturally, Spoiled Rich and her gossiping and blowing it all way out of proportion is never a good thing.”

Starlight felt just as upset about it when she found out, and she personally wrote to Princess Celestia and asked the whole thing be straightened out at once.

“Every-pony felt really bad about the way they overreacted at you,” she then motioned over at a table where sat an open mail sack of apology letters from every-pony who was mean to her yesterday.

Twilight felt warm inside.

Just then, there was a knock at the doors of the castle.

Twilight answered it and found Snails and Snips, and they looked very sorry and very ashamed of themselves.

“We… we’re very sorry for throwing mud at you yesterday, Princess.” said Snails.

“Our folks sent us to apologize,” added Snips “But we were going to come anyway, and they said if there is to be any punishment, we’ll accept it, and we will.

We’ll do anything!”

Twilight felt touched by their sincerity, and she decided to go easy on them, by having them help her prepare her lesson plans for the school of friendship that day…

Fetching books, and getting parchment and ink, and reading to her aloud from scripts and scrolls so she could write them down as part of her lectures.

Then when it was time to open up the school of Friendship, Twilight was very relieved as students passed by her and bid her “Good morning” and no one was the least bit scornful to her.

Twilight was really feeling her luck was starting to change, but then she looked sad again.

“What’s wrong now?” asked Spike.

“I just still wish I knew how to make it up to the Crusaders, but I don’t know if they’re still too mad at me.”

Starlight thought, and remembered about what the girls had done that started all this in the first place.

“I’ve got an idea.” And she whispered to Twilight, which made her smile widely “Yes, I’ll do it. I owe it to them.”

Spike was confused, “You’re not actually going to let them into the school are you.”

“Nope, something even better…”


It wasn’t long before the Crusaders were brought before Twilight in her office, and they surprisingly didn’t seem as mad at her as they were before, thanks to Rarity, Rainbow and Applejack.

“We all had some long talks last night.” said Applejack “The girls admitted that maybe they were a bit harsh on you.”

“And when we told them of how horribly you we’re treated by all those other ponies,” added Rarity, and then she sniffled “They cried…!

Well, at least I did.”

The girls actually stepped forward towards the desk.

“We were mad at you, Twilight,” said Sweetie “But we told Diamond and Silver we wanted to handle things on our own.”

Applebloom nodded, “We weren’t speaking to you, but you didn’t deserve all that you got last night, and we’re… well…”

“…We’re really sorry that you got hurt.” said Scootaloo.

“You’re apology is not accepted, girls.” said Twilight.

The girls felt downtrodden, but then Twilight informed them “…Because you’re apologizing for something that you didn’t do, and believe me I know you better than that.”

The girls looked up at her, and of course it was true. They didn’t tell other ponies to hate on Twilight, and they were not the ones who threw the mud at her. Though they did tell Diamond, who told her mother, who twisted and turned a whole bunch of gossip to make it look worse, it still wasn’t their fault.

“But why are we here?” asked Sweetie.

Twilight grinned and said “Cozy Glow retook her test today, and this time she did it properly, and she got a straight A-plus, all thanks to you girls.

For this, I’d like to give you these.”

She levitated three large parchments at the girls.

They're honorary diplomas,” said Applejack “Makin' y'all official graduates of this here school.”

You've more than earned them.” said Rarity.

“…Without even having to study!” added Rainbow.

The Crusaders were speechless, and didn’t know what to say, but Twilight said to them. “And if you're interested, I think Starlight has a place for you at my school after all.”

We could use some friendship tutors on staff. And I hear you're the best out there.”

The Crusaders were beaming, as they leapt about cheering and hollering. To them, this was even better than being students at the school, it was practically a job!

“Um, just one last thing…” Twilight said, and she approached the girls and looked them ever so deeply in their eyes. “Girls… can you ever forgive me?”

She gazed at them so deeply that the girls could see their reflections in her remorseful and sincere eyes.

They looked back and forth at one another, and agreed.

“If there’s one thing friends do…” said Applebloom.

“…It’s forgive one another.” added Sweetie.

“And we forgive you.” said Scootaloo, and they hugged her warmly, and she hugged them back with tears rolling down her face.

The other ponies all were teary-eyed too, and Spike gave the girls a thumb-up.

Then Twilight led the girls off to meet their first students whom she felt could use their tutoring.

Starlight could only sigh, “I love being councillor here at this school.”

Author's Note:

Oh, Gag! even though I made it so myself, it sickens me that they made up (I don't forgive and forget like that)

I made this fic to show I CAN make normal MLP fics, without all my Starfleet stuff.

Still, I'm glad I did this, I really needed to kick some character ass and torture them, (this busy season has been hard and still much to do) now I can get back to my busy season and prepare for THE FORCE OF HATRED where I can really kick some pony butt, and more.

PS: Maybe next time you'll WAIT AND LET THE STORY UNRAVEL before you ask questions or judge as badly as Twilight did?

Comments ( 37 )

Good story if a little harsh at the start.

9951799

Well, no offense, but this IS an accusation fic (Characters are here to be punished and tortured) it's supposed to be harsh

9952060

That bitch who's spamming me still can't get it through his teeny weeny, striped bikni head. He's not the boss of me, he has no right to tell ME how to go about MY ways, and his ideas are shit.

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Just know I'm here for you man.

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I just wish I knew who this shit was, cuz I tell you... he's got a BIG BAD thing coming his way for how he's behaved, and acting like he owns the site

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I could believe that.

Why is this so disliked? It’s not that bad.

10004435

People are being petty and rude (Bullying me) for writing things the way I WRITE them, and how I think DIFFERENTLY than they do. (I post just one chapter of any new fic and it gets 20-30 downvotes, just like that)

They also downvote and mock anyone who genuinely likes my stuff and are not being hostile towards me. (Your comment will be downvoted too... just watch)

See... downvoted for the stupidest reasons.

10004437
No doubt it’s the same people doing it every time. Most of the comments on here have exactly 6 downvotes

10006095

you should see earlier posts, they have over ten...

I feel like after this I would talked to Luna.

10004437
I generally like realism in stories Twilight Sparkle fucked up big your stories are good don't pay attention to people who hate on you just because they can't write a better story and they can't accept that someone has a different opinion that's not the same or in line with what they're thinking good stories should be celebrated not hated

Matthew 6:15

But if you do not forgive others their trespasses, neither will your Father forgive your trespasses.

Dude I know it's hard to forgive I've had to forgive in life but if you don't forgive and you hold onto anger that angar rots your soul from the inside to the outside believe me it's not good to hold onto anger or to not forgive plus by not forgiving that person you make them more important but by forgiving them you tell them they're not important anymore also by not forgiving you give more power to that person since you're constantly thinking about them and focusing your anger

Grudges will only hurt the heart, and will only lead to trouble.

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Perhaps... (That's all I can say for that)

But try this story...

https://www.fimfiction.net/story/472209/forgiveness-denied

10385543
Dude!

I needed to see that! I can speak of this from personal experience. Thank you for putting that out there.

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Trust me... THIS fic is the real deal... https://www.fimfiction.net/story/472209/forgiveness-denied

Best part is... the author ALLOWS US to make our own continues of it.

10737233
I know. I’ve read it. :)

10765380
That's fine, but i wish they had said that to them.

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You two ever read "Forgiveness Denied"?

10765656
I have, but it wasn't what I was hoping for the ending to go.

That was a good take on the episode.

10931795
I’d almost be ok with that.

10385543

Not only is it true biblically, but psychology tells us similarly - not forgiving someone can have negative effects down the road. Media likes to paint forgiveness as a form of reconciliation, when the two concepts are different from each other. It makes people believe that forgiving people means brushing off what they did and neglecting giving them consequences…when that’s not what it is at all.

Forgiveness is a means of letting go of the past so you can move forward - not being able to forgive is like tying yourself to a boulder. But it also DOES NOT MEAN you have to continue a relationship with the wrongdoer or even be their friend or even like them. But forgiveness is a MUST - not because we need to empathize with someone who’s wronged us (though we should try to), but because we’re inevitably hurting ourselves if we don’t.

It’s very odd - people who don’t like to forgive act like the people who’ve wronged them are pure scum of the earth that don’t deserve any good, yet simultaneously believe that by not forgiving them the wrong-doer will suffer. But if the wrong-doer was so bad, why are they assuming said wrong-doer will CARE?

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There also goes a saying... "You should NEVER forgive someone too quickly."

-the wrong-doer may still not care and is probably just trying to ease their own conscience.
-by forgiving too quickly, the wrong-doer may not learn anything and be free to repeat the mistake again, and again, and again.
-Sometimes people WANT the wrong-doer to suffer in an act of revenge.
-Most sociopaths believe that mercy is a weakness, not a strength.

and also... There's are difference between LETTING GO... FORGIVING... and MOVING FORWARD.

These things are not OBLIGATIONS, they are OPTIONS (Meaning you don't HAVE to do it no matter how much you should, or people want you too)

10989042

I mean, it definitely DEPENDS when it comes to forgiving someone right away or not - after all, it would be silly to hold small things against someone for years. On the other hand, it's not a SIMPLE task - you can't just say "I forgive you" right after someone punched you in the face or betrayed you, that means you didn't put thought into it and chances are you're still going through emotions about it.

But...you still gotta FORGIVE eventually.

-the wrong-doer may still not care and is probably just trying to ease their own conscience.
-by forgiving too quickly, the wrong-doer may not learn anything and be free to repeat the mistake again, and again, and again.
-Sometimes people WANT the wrong-doer to suffer in an act of revenge.
-Most sociopaths believe that mercy is a weakness, not a strength.

-The point of forgiving someone is not to reconcile with them - it's for YOUR OWN BENEFIT. It's not to ease anyone's conscience, though it usually DOES. If a wrongdoer is as bad as a victim says they are, then chances are they won't care if they're forgiven or not. There is a true story, though - where a serial killer was on trial, and all the families of his victims told him how evil he was. He didn't react until the last person came up...and told him he forgave him for killing his daughter. THEN the killer started crying. He didn't care until AFTER he was forgiven - he wasn't looking for it. Some people DO, and expect it, but again, it's not always that simple. I agree, that it takes time.
-Once again: forgiveness is not reconciliation. You can forgive someone and simultaneously say "I don't want anything to do with you anymore".
-Yes...but revenge is WRONG, and can lead to bad things down the road. Often times in media revenge is romanticized, but rarely is it ever discussed what happens days, weeks, months, or even YEARS after the fact. Scientifically speaking, most if not all people who take revenge on someone don't really feel better permanently - it's a shortlived thrill, that eventually turns into emptiness and guilt. What we WANT isn't always what we NEED.
-Yes...I feel like you just sorta tripped over yourself with this example here. Because isn't forgiveness an ACT of mercy? And you're trying to make an argument AGAINST eager forgiveness.

and also... There's are difference between LETTING GO... FORGIVING... and MOVING FORWARD.

Well...yes...but to LET GO and to MOVE FORWARD, you NEED to FORGIVE. If you can't let go, you can't move forward - if you can't forgive, you can't let go. These concepts are DIFFERENT, but rely on each other to work and function. Forgiving doesn't mean "aw, it's okay, you just killed my parents but I don't hold anything against you, let's be friends", it's "you've hurt me, you've taken things away from me, but I will not let what you did define my future. I'm letting my anger towards you go." It can also be, "I'm not mad at you anymore/Eventually I won't be mad at you anymore, but I don't want to engage with you anymore."

These things are not OBLIGATIONS, they are OPTIONS (Meaning you don't HAVE to do it no matter how much you should, or people want you too)

Again - these are NECESSARY STEPS. If you don't move on, you're subconsciously stuck in the same place, mulling over what happened - how does one heal? I'll tell you how - they don't. They mull over it. And if they can't let go, how do they move on? Why would someone keep hugging a cactus? What's the benefit of holding onto something so painful? And if they can't forgive, how do they let go? They can't. Holding stuff against others isn't the same as holding them accountable, though they are often seen as the same thing.

You are right that these things are DIFFERENT, but they are far from simply options - you certainly have a CHOICE in the matter, but one choice hurts more than the other. And people keep encouraging the wrong answer, because they misunderstand the right one.

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I dunno what’s more insulting: the fact you think a fanfic link is a proper answer, or the fact that you’re just trying to get me to read YOUR fanfic in hopes of shutting me up. (I’ll probably read it later, but try not getting your hopes up - if that story’s anything like this one, chances are I’m not gonna be moved.)

I will respond to this though:

LESSON: Some people cannot be persuaded to change. They cannot be bought, badgered, reasoned, or negotiated with. Some people just carry the grudge forever.

It’s not that people CANNOT change - it’s that they WONT. Anyone can, no one is physically incapable of it. It’s a choice they make.

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But in the end you gave the person too much power by not forgiving by showing that you still hate them and you're not able to let go of your anger hate for them you're basically saying they're more powerful than you because you're constantly thinking about them if you're able to let go and forgive them you're able to let go you don't have to be there friends that boat sailed but you can finally let go and that's more than enough

10989042
Not being able to forgive and allowing your anger and hatred to drive you it's one of the architects of your own destruction

10989556

you can finally let go and that's more than enough

I'm sorry, but I disagree

10989559

Amen to that! God bless you man.

10989569
I'm going to ask you a question and I want an answer that's honest have you ever carried a heavy load up a mountain or up some stairs and you feel extremely tired have you ever chosen to let go of the load and you just feel fantastic that's how anger is and you finally Let It Go it feels great to not hold onto something that's been slowly poisoning you because I'll tell you this that person that you're holding the anger onto that you're refusing to forgive if only to forgive them and never talk to them again you're holding on to that load they don't even know that you hate them enough to hold on to anger they might care or maybe they don't care and think it's funny that you hate them enough to hold on to that anger but it angers them even more when you let go of that anger and you stop caring about them forgive but never forget you can choose to forgive them but you don't have to talk to them or acknowledge them

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I am currently working on an anon-a-miss story where sunset doesn’t accept their apology. They try to get twilight to help but can’t. They complain about sunset not accepting their apology which divides the school into the rainbooms supports who says sunset for forgive and forget and other say it is sunset choice. And back her up. It even get bad enough that several crystal prepers join in after the staff take sides too.

For those who want it mild: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/411596/marks-for-effort-twilights-reprimanding

For those who want it spicy: you are here.

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