Starlight Glimmer and Trixie Lulamoon bake muffins inside the palace kitchen.
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It doesn't hurt, it feels fine
The trivial sublime
I'd like to turn off time
And kill my mind
You kill my mind
Paranoia, paranoia
Everybody's coming to get me
Just say you never met me
I'm going underground with the moles digging holes
Hear the voices in my head
I swear to god it sounds like they're snoring
But if you're bored then you're boring
The agony and the irony, they're killing me
I'm not sick but I'm not well
And I'm so hot cause I'm in hell
I'm not sick but I'm not well
And it's a sin to live so well
This is a brilliant little piece! I love it!
I'm not 100% sure how to interpret this, but I like it :)
How many times will it take I wonder.
You know on second read-through, this is actually hopeful, because according to
If she's getting these warnings, it must mean she escapes eventually.
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She's caught in some sort of hallucination or coma or dream that her future self is trying to break her out of.
One of these days Starlight needs to deal with her abandonment issues. Seems like maybe she eventually does! Maybe. Eventually.
Pshaw! Everypony gets those kinds of messages whenever they are in the Great and Powerful Trixie's presence for more than a few minutes. That's why she's a traveling magician. And sometimes a traveling-really-fast-in-front-of-the-mob magician.
Well, if she doesn’t wake up, Paradox.
That was... Horrifying. It certainly was interesting, though.
I think that was just the kinda story that would work for a horror movie, just extend the time loop and make it a bit more like Doctor Strange and The Multiverse Of Madness.
I’d love to see more stuff like this, has a Groundhog Horror Day feel to it. Well, if it even existed, anyway.
I think that was just the kinda story that would work for a horror movie, just extend the time loop and make it a bit more like Doctor Strange and The Multiverse Of Madness.
That was... Horrifying. It certainly was interesting, though.
I think that...
After reading through this a second time, this is pretty damn dark.
It seems Starlight is stuck in a timeloop.
Seeing how Starlight keeps getting instructions to kill Trixie in some horrific manner, I can only assume that Starlight in the future found out how to undo the spell after going crazy.
For a brief moment, I thought she was baking Derpy...
My hypothesis: In the future, Trixie dies. Or maybe she just goes to Manehattan, and Starlight is really petty, and still reckless with magic. Starlight casts a spell to hold onto that moment before she leaves, preventing time from moving forward. Or, she creates a magical dream for herself after Trixie is gone. Now she needs to escape the dream or stasis, by killing Trixie. It’s the only way out.
I can’t fully understand it (by nature, because it’s open ended), but I did like the story.
Wait, hol' the fuck up
As has been noted, those intrusive messages actually imply a happy ending. Still, brilliant work on capturing the surreality of dreams and the slowly dawning horror of the situation. Making themuffins bake in reverse was an especially nice touch.
Dark but intriguing
Okay, I don't know how, but I've missed the 'Horror' tag. As a result, I found a lot of messages on dealing with Trixie funny. Dark comedy fits Starlight like a glove, for some reason. Still, it was a great read.
P.S. Somepony has to fix the clock on Twilight's kitchen.
Oh, I see.
Well...
That's heart wrenching.
I'm not sure where the "you can't read in your dreams" thing originated from considering I've read in my dreams before.
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Just do what they say. Maybe the Matrix can be escaped after all.
I've reviewed your story here!
Facehoofs starlight is stuck in a infinite loop lol
I really liked this short story.My theory is that Starlight couldn't bear to lose Trixie,and she casts the spell she thought she learnt in a dream.But,her future self warns her that in order to escape her dreamstate,she must kill Trixie,because those random gory messages are future Starlight's way of helping her.
Also,a thing I found strange and maybe a lit paradoxal:the spell is not described very well,and since Starlight is trapped in a sort of dream(I assumed)how can she evolve to"future Starlight"?or she simply notices that after a while something is not right?
The first few times I read this, I didn’t really get anything. But after reading at a much slower pace, I actually got the whole subtext in this story. Thanks to that, this is now in my top favorite horror stories on this entire site.
You sir, deserve a round of applause. 👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻
The more I think about this story, the more I say “That’s deep.”
I really like this open-ended horror type of story. I think you (author) wrote it very well. At first, I thought the lines about killing were simply comedy, or starlights comedic thoughts, but the more I read and let it sink in, the reality was much darker…
Like I said, this story is really deep, and I have to say it is a masterpiece. Great work!
Rating: 10/10
My theory as to why all the suggested deaths are physically violent:
As 9917943 said, murder is the way to break the time loop created by Starlight to preserve Trixie after she died. Why not use a gentler method of death, like magic or borrowing a heart attack gun? Trixie clearly knows she’s not supposed to be there and is agitated to leave, though she does not recognize (or will not admit) that her proper place is in a grave instead of Manehattan. Why no gentle death?
First, even if Trixie knew the specific truth about the real timeline, do you honestly think she would ever accept that she has to die to be at peace in her proper place? Starlight needs to make Trixie’s liberation without warning.
Second, Starlight was too grief-stricken to be on her A game when casting the spell. Beyond basic telekinesis, her magic is tied up in maintaining the loop. Not only that, the loop is too tight to enlist an external assassin to do the job.
Then again, nothing at all in those messages said that it must be Trixie who becomes the victim.
Greetings. I hope you don't mind, but I did a reading of your story, which can be found below. I hope you enjoy.
...That caught me by surprise...