Wrote this when i was sad....
Depressed Fluttershy. One-sided Flutterdash, AU
this fic is dedicated to those who hide behind a smile, and keep what hurts inside.
To the person who knows me in real life...i'm sorry.
*UPDATE*
Fluttertavi, and OCxOC in completely optional part 2 of this! Again, OPTIONAL epilogue
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is this from Rainbow's perspective and by the way this is really good you should continue it and make a next chapter one about moving beyond being in the closet about their relationship
Alright... Sad to say, quite a familiar feeling... Anyway, time for constructive criticism. Up at the top, I believe you meant "quiet", not "quite". This moved me a bit - but only because I know the feeling, I think. To move someone more, I think you'll find that a bit more material is required... Maybe even write a full-length story about it. I'd probably read it.
But, I can tell you seemed to pour your heart into this... So, I think it deserves at least a rate-up.
I read this story and feel the darkness. The fear of coming out of your shell to be yourself without second guessing your own integrity is something i can relate too. Except you have found someone special, a friend who you can depend on, lean on and feel comfortable around. From reading this i can tell your friend feels the same, and for that I envy you. But in the end all you can do is move forward and continue to live side by side with your friend into the future, where one day you both can achieve the goal of being truely happy without the mask.
yo man, this is some serious shit. I've been down the road you have, I've gone threw being bullied, harassed, name called, ignored a whole bunch of other shit. Fucked up thing is im only 14. But let me tell you something...Through all of the bull shit in life, the hate, the pain, the sadness, the fuck ups, you still gotta keep moving foward. Shit thoughts of suicide enters everyones mind, iincludeing the ones with a perfect life, hell, its even stepped into my mind a few times....
But the more you fall, the easer it is to get back up. think about it.
it takes a lot of strength to encounter and to deal with all the bullshit in life.
what I'm saying is. it gets better. Don't let others put you down, cause I'm sure many of them don't know jack shit about you or your life,
I'm sure these is sounding cheesy, but I just hate seeing a brony all depressed and shit.
"you gotta smile smile smile....."
Touching and tragic. An heartfelt ode to all the people out there who live lonely lives of quiet agony, silently screaming behind the gentle smiles we wear for the sake of those around us.
I'm young, I'm proud. I am a recently come-out-of-the-closet-brony. But I feel the same things you're feeling. People will judge me, people will bring me down, while others stand by me, and while others laugh. But you know what? I don't let that get to me. Cause I keep moving on, and we bronies and pegasisters should too.
I love this a lot, because it's very similar to me.
This is one of the things that make me shed a tear, just like, "Save Derpy," and, "My Little Dashie".
I read this while listening to this song, which you should tell people to listen to while reading. IMO.
I love this, I love this a lot.
As I said before, "Keep moving on."
It's sad. The only comment I have to make is why the fuck would you use a wall of text with art in the background as your story picture?
Why do I see myself from about 2 years ago? I was only 13 then... THe only thing diffrent is that I loved being on stage, in the spotlight because it got me attention that I never had anywhere else. I didn't feel loved until I met my cousin. I think I can say she saved my life, though I doubt I will ever be able to admit that to anyone.
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its not from RD's perspective, its more from my perspective.
1089773 I dont think i could continue this story, i think it was one of those once in a while pour your heart out things to write.
I just felt terrible and just typed and this came out.
thank you for the rate up though, thank you.
1089911 Try listenting to a john frusciante song, it's what i listened to while doing this. The will to death is the best one.
1091029 sequel
yes i am an escape artist, i am......captain..jack..SPARROW!
1092148 ....not sure, so far this has to be my best written piece yet, but I don't know if I could do a sequel. Mabye, but no promises
1093163 ummm....ok?
I don't know what to give in the form of advice. If this is coming from your own experience, my heart goes out to you, friend. None should have such darkness in their hearts, I would say, but it's unfortunately one of the certainties of life. I though about writing something like that myself, but I feared it would be seen by some as no more than a pitiful cry for attention, and I never put my thoughts into words as you have. I hope your work here doesn't suffer this fate, and I hope also that you do not have to suffer much longer. If you truly feel this way, talk to a trusted friend about it. That's what friends are for: to help us fight back the darkness that seeks to consume us.
We'll all be here for you. Brony on, my friend. /)
1089830 That comment...that had nearly the same effect as the story itself. One who can write like that should try their hand at a full story. I'd gladly read it.
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thank you, i honestly didnt put much thought into writing this, i just let pour out. And i honestly thought the same thing when i got the idea to post this, i have seen other sad shy fics and most of them were just a cry for attention, im glad people like this. thank you.
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I apologize in advance if any of the following gives offense. My goals are merely honesty and clarity.
This is outright incoherent. It may be worthwhile to reexamine how you actually define "should" and "certainty".
Sometimes a cry for attention is legitimately justified, but that seems to have little bearing on how such cries are received, unfortunately. As far as I've seen, one's likelihood of prompting genuine sympathy is inversely proportional to one's expressed expectation of sympathy.
This is worth absolutely nothing. I don't mean to disparage your sentiment, but for the sort of suffering we're talking about, such empty platitudes have effects more similar to a taunt than a comfort.
Same as above, only a hundred times worse. You simply take for granted that any given person will have a trusted friend that they can turn to. This is not only a baseless assumption, but feels somewhat like being kicked in the balls to those who do not, in fact, have any friends to turn to, let alone trusted friends.
I have actually written quite a bit of stuff, some of which I've actually posted. Nothing in FiM yet, but I am toying with an Equestria / Culture crossover I might get around to writing at some point.
1103080 I take no offense to this. I especially agree with your fourth point. My apologies if I have actually caused anyone to feel this way. Next time, I'll stick with reviewing the story and try not to include anything that will backfire like this. "...outright incoherent...more similar to a taunt than a comfort...feels somewhat like being kicked in the balls..." A part of me hopes you're wrong, since that would stop me from now looking like a complete fool. I feel that you are correct, though, now that I look more carefully at what I had said. It seems that, despite my best efforts, I still don't know how to communicate well with people. Blasted antisocial habits...
Thank you for this. I will be more careful in the future.
1091352 but your never there when I try to...your never there when I need you the most.
I'm being selfish again I'm sorry
I'm sorry, your just busy with more important things...ii know, I'm sorry
damn! after watching terrorblades movie i cried... well inside. after reading this i now feel like a river of.... well... sadness overwhelmed my heart flooding it from inside out. ahhhh! the sadness! its unbearable!!!!
ohh and i loved this magnificent peace of art! loved it!
nooooooooooooo
how?
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what?
1241279 nothing you know to much
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umm...ok then?
My feels...
Sky...
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this... touched my heart. thank you. It's... so rare to see something reaching out to people who hide behind a smile.
This is great, it was short and sweet. I haven't really had time to read long drawn out stories so these short ones are quite nice for now.
2278142 I'm glad you enjoyed this
And that vid does fit a little bit, but overall this is more of a love story where the ones we love, or the people we 'think' we are in love with go with the wrong people and just leave you behind. And the only people who can really see the masks are ones who wear one themselves.
BTW its Kinda, not cinda. sorry
Fascinating, I've never read a story quite like this. I had fave'd this five when it first came out (because I didn't know how to put stories in my "read later" category) so when I read it, I felt like I could understand what you felt. I went through the same thing during middle school (I'm currently 18 yes old in my final year in high school). But instead of hiding behind a mask, I hid behind my books, manga to be exact. I knew I was weak, and that all I'll ever be is a follower, even to this day. I had friends who believe they knew who I was, but most of it was lies in order to impress them. And it didn't help with the fact that my family moved all over the place, so making new friends was difficult, maintaining them was even harder. But now, I've understood what it means to be in love, for me, love is a woman name Regina. Even after she left over a year ago and me dating other woman in that time span, I still think about her and all the time we were able to spend with each other. All I wish from her is to smile, smile every day, just like I was able to make when we were together. I wonder if she'll ever come back to our little "Land of Enchantment", wonder if I could. . . meh, I'll leave that choice to her.
Um, a lot of the actions and behaviors they take / exhibit towards others resonate with me. For a while I thought you were describing my life or something
Thing is, I don't think I've ever thought of myself like they do. Or, I guess I'm just shy but okay with it, kinda? Ugh, feelings are hard
But yeah, even though this fic's taking a non-standard approach to telling a story, it still feels more real than many of the others on this site. Playing my heartstrings, are you? Nicely done! Now if you'll excuse me, I think I'll go cry a little.
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I'm honestlty suprsied by how well this has done, I'm not exactly the best writer, lol. But yeah, its real because it was real at the time i wrote this. Some drama happened, but since then things have since changed for the better
So dont feel bad, or else i'd have to hug you
not that i wouldnt give people hugs anyway, lol