1085274 Yes, that's the point. But you'll find in the chapter I just posted that it's actually not her Basement. The effect, though is exactly the same.
1085538 Criticism you say? Well... Plot has a good foundation for a genre that is rather common, Very few grammatical errors,(I'm not a grammar nazi, so I won't point out all your mistakes), and a nice use of transition between worlds. Also, the scientific touch with gamma radiation and all that has earned you a . I can't really find any bad things about the story, so I won't make any up, or go nitpicking. All in All, Nice story. I approve.
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Yes, that's the point. But you'll find in the chapter I just posted that it's actually not her Basement. The effect, though is exactly the same.
As to this newest chapter: Board Games. That is all.
tis getting interesting it is please more is needed to quench my first for reading
Erm... Yeah lots of praise, but any criticism? *waits anxiously and braces himself*
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-grabs REALLY long papaer, gets ready for dramatic speach-
HMGGMG....-dramatic silence-
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More. More. MORE!
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Criticism you say? Well...
Plot has a good foundation for a genre that is rather common, Very few grammatical errors,(I'm not a grammar nazi, so I won't point out all your mistakes), and a nice use of transition between worlds. Also, the scientific touch with gamma radiation and all that has earned you a .
I can't really find any bad things about the story, so I won't make any up, or go nitpicking.
All in All, Nice story.
I approve.