Ever wonder how Alicorns stay young? Well my little reader, delve into this story and would will find the answer you seek! But be warned, it isn't the most conventional method.
Oh look, another vore story from my mind of madness. Yay.
To be fair though, this one does have visual assistance.
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Love the story ^^ And not just because I drew the pictures in it, honestly a good story, the like dislike ratio is very unfair
Cute story with lovely art to accompany it. I feel that the fourth-wall-breaking narrative isn't necessary though, it suggests that the story needs some overlaying humour in order to hold up, which it doesn't. Don't be afraid to let the story speak for itself!
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Thank you for the criticism.
Try not to be self-conscious.
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What you mean?
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Your writing feels self-conscious. This causes the prose to be forced. Rather, write freely, and don't worry about how it'll be received.
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Well the "self-conscious" author is supposed to be a joke if that's what you mean.
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Also I have no doubt that the story could stand well enough on it's own. I just think the added humor gives it a little more omph
I'm guessing that the last chapter is gonna feature Chrysalis.
Love it keep it up