Derpy attempts suicide, and she is found by Pinkie Pie, who secretly loves her.
Chapters (3)
- Member Since 10th Dec, 2011
- offline last seen Jul 4th, 2012
Flutterspy911
I'm a Brony, and I don't care what others think about that. I am 16, and male, and I love MLP..
Flutterspy911
Joined 10th Dec, 2011 ·
Offline
Also LikedSimilarAuthor
- Kitsunin · 8.3k words · 41 22 · 7k views
- FicFicPonyFic · 2.6k words · 90 7 · 10k views
- solsticebrony888 · 17k words · 53 6 · 7.9k views
- ChappyHooves · 35k words · 111 3 · 3.2k views
- Habanc · 4k words · 78 4 · 4.8k views
- Vulpix · 3.2k words · 119 5 · 5.5k views
Join our SubscribeStar to remove these adverts!
Join our SubscribeStar to remove these adverts!
Stats
Page generated in 0.096 seconds
Total duration
699 users online
968,021 hits today, 1,996,409 yesterday
FIMFiction
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Follow & Support Us
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
D'aaawwwwww!
Cute story ;D
I give it a 4.5!
A Derpy fic hmmm....... this should be good.
At first i was all
Then i was
Now im all
Cheers
~iraqlobstah
First I was like
then I was like
now I'm all
If Derpy tied her wings how did she get on the cloud
other wise a good story and just for you 
Wow another one to the pack of Derpy shipping, I see! And might I say a pretty damn good one!
Keep up the great work this is looking good!
However, it does feel a little rushed in my opinion, but that's just me! As stated prior, Keep up the great work!
67670
I do believe that she got some rope, flew up to a cloud, then tied her wings on the cloud.
Wow guys, thank you so much! This was the first fic I have ever written. She obviously tied herself up while on the cloud :P Is anyone interested in a second chapter? If so what would you like to see? I have a heart, so no rape or beatings will be added. I love writing
a little rushed, but still very well written, i love ditzy and just any storie about here :P (dislike the name derpy e.e) it would be nice to see another chapter, maybe a more profound view of how they develop the relationship, or telling the other ponies, or making a chapter with different ponie perspectives
anywya still a good story, you should keep writing, it was very interesting
First I was
then i was
That was the most amazing story i have ever read!!
I decided to read this, since romance branching from an otherwise horrid event is always intriguing to me. I've never heard of this pairing, but...when you stop to think about it, it makes so much sense! Derpy...you can easily understand her mindset; poor Pegasus. Pinkie...she's such a sweetheart, isn't she? It did indeed feel kinda rushed, not to mention I was a bit confused with what exactly happened when Pinkie brought Derpy back to Sugarcube Corner. I mean...it was basically Derpy always going to sleep, then waking up, then asleep, then waking up...and always during a love-like scene. I guess that's where the rushing came in. Regardless, though, it was really adorable! If this indeed was your first-ever story, you did very well. Yes, there were errors, and there's always room for improvement, but you should feel proud of your first time.
This could have been much better if you used the Ditzy Doo name instead. "Derpy" ruins all emotion it could have had. :(
68515
My question is why is it spamming about sports equipment? I'm sure there are plenty of athletic bronies out there, but sports doesn't quite fit with internet cult phenomenon.
68427 Oh MAN! This story had a sense of being JUST rushed enough, to feel both Hurried, yet drawn out at the same time! I GOTTA see more of that! ...I've never been able to get that process down.
ANYWHO, I would be STOKED to see a new chapter! Maybe with Dinky's Views on everything....I just wanna Glomp Ditzy and Dear Little Dinky sometimes!
Other than that,I had so much to say that I've lost track of exactly WHAT I was gonna say. TRUST me, That's Hard to do, ESPECIALLY in a story that involves , well, THIS.
Also, I just about fired my Orbital
CAnnon...Uh Oh..... Epic 
FIring in
3.....
2.....
1....
Woops, Sorry, Misfired.
Que?
Wonderful... but que?
Very nice story...only problem is the use of Derpy over Ditzy
First I was all
But then I was
Good job man!
Daww. <3 Cute fic. I like this pairing. =3
DAAAAAAAAAAAAW
! Its so cute that I could just...just.....HNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNG!
atalude.net/wp-content/uploads/2008/08/hnnnng.jpg
At first I was
Then I was
And then I was
At first I was like:javascript:smilie('
');
');
But then I was like:javascript:smilie('
68846
Yay for glitchy HTML! Java bugs for everybody!
68427 There shouldn't be a second part it just works this way. For there to be a second part you would need conflict between Derpy and Pinkie and it ended so happily that the second part won't be so good
I agree with everypony else, is seems rushed yet at the same time giving a good enough amount of detail.
Please continue this.
I don't think there ever was a point in the story where Derpy got the pretty serious wounds treated. When Pinkie found her she seemed to be light-headed from shock, but woke up the next morning pretty fine (other than her lack of being able to move)
I'm not sure if it's possible to get wounds that serious without some sort of bleeding.
Then again, it's a cartoon about colourful ponies so
68768
I dont need to say anything, as this guy already said all that could be said.
MY EVIL! NOT ONCE BY TWICE IT HAS LEFT ME EARLY IN THE MORNING! CONFOUND THESE CUTE STORIES! Now I can't write evily... Take your 5 stars and leave me to be evil....
Such a wonderful story, well done, well done.
the best gift for xmas-a derpy.
the best gift for xmas-a derpy.
I actually tried to commit suicide once, Until I found Ponies and the Brony community that is.
This Story warms my heart, Good Job
Thank you All!!!
Uhm... I'm not gonna be a dick right now, so I'll just ask straight out: Did you by any possible means had some inspiration from my story "Ponyville's Lusts", chapter "...And nopony else" when writing this? I couldn't help but reacting a little bit when I first read the description, and when I finished reading the story, I had to ask.
Any truth to my suspicious thoughts?
68427
This fanfic....MADE MY HEART MELT WITH CUTENESS!!!
=
69274
I know this question is random, but can you tell me why when I put in the URL for an avatar it dosn't do anything? am I right about the URL being the link to the picture? ps.I LOVE Warrior Cats!!! I'm on The New Prophecy- Midnight!
68427
YOU MUST LAUGH:
psx-scene.com/forums/attachments/f16/28015d1308833084-my-little-pony-friendship-magic-130883248006.jpg
69421
Actually, I have never read that fic.
What's wrong with calling her Derpy? I mean, it's her name, right?
I'll start a second chapter and see what I can do, as far as no conflict, there is still a lot of ground to cover. The other ponies don't know she's alive, they don't know they're in love, I could go into a little more detail. give me an inch, I'll take a mile.
69076
Okay:
"Pinkie, thanks for taking care of my serious wounds"
good?
She landed in the everfree forest, while she got some scrapes, she happened to land in soft bushes, which is why pinkie had to spread them to find her, we'll go ahead and say she didn't break anything, and the majority of her injuries were slightly severe cuts, scrapes, bruises and rope burn. I don't want to seriously hurt her.
and as for waking up significantly better the next day...
Well, Huey Lewis said it best...
"that's the power of love"
I dig this!
68427
Yes, yes, yes
so much love!!!
D'AAAAAAAWWWWW!!!
SECOND CHAPTER!!!!
you will put up chapter 2
my confermation pony was pinkie oddly enough
Its so cute!
68635 I think you mean: ¿Qué?
Imagine that! Derpy: The actress!
So adorable, I think I have a new favorite shipping
This story. This story is fucking beautiful. I cried, and that's a very rare thing for me. This struck a special chord for me, as my step sister (who I secretly have a thing for) is suicidal, and I don't know what to do about it. All I can say is thank you for writing such a beautiful and touching story. Very good job with spelling and grammar too, I've read a lot of stories like this one, and spelling mistakes just ruin them for me. You must write a second chapter. You must. You MUST. YOU MUST!
Also, at first I was like
The I was like
then I was like
You, sir, are to change the completed tag to something else.
Right now.
This story's description is "Derpy attempts suicide, and she is found by Pinkie Pie, who secretly loves her." I can honestly say that this story delivers exactly what it says on the tin, and nothing else. It just takes that fourteen word premise and stretches it out to four thousand. Nothing happens in this story. All it is is scene after scene of fluff, and these scenes lack any sort of emotional weight.
The story tells instead of shows, the majority of it being told in clunky, forced dialogue. We are TOLD how the characters are feeling rather than SHOWN; it's like having a man with a dead-pan expression on his face having to say "I am happy" for us to be able to tell, instead of seeing him smile and jumping for joy, at which point those words would have been redundant. If you need to TELL us that Derpy is sad when she tries to commit suicide, then you are doing something wrong.
The rest of the Mane 6 serve no purpose in this story, other than making Pinkie Pie seem like a horrible pony for letting her friends worry.
All in all, this story is something "short and sweet" that was dragged out to "long and dull." It could have been told much better in much, MUCH fewer words.
Didn't like it, the writing was bland and the story mad little sense though i do really like the idea's you had. may just be my critical thinking that nags me but still nice effort.