"In exchange for your Kingdom's alliance, we will allow your kind to roam freely throughout Equestria. Albeit, not without careful supervision, but free nonetheless."
With the tables turned, and Chrysalis defeated. Celestia decides to give the changeling another chance, and Chrysalis must choose whether or not her pride is worth over the collapse of her entire kingdom. Eventual romance.
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Scratchy and scrappy in execution and diction in places, but this is a really interesting idea. Rustle up a proof-reader and editor from the proof-reading group on here, and I look forward to seeing where you take this.
Not a fan of the pairing, but I won't let that get in the way. I look forward to seeing where this goes
Interesting pairin/story premise. If you ned a prereader like fireflutterpony said, I would be more than glad to do the job
Looking forward to more
Was too quick in places. And was a bit confusing at one part in particular (though probably on purpose)
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Thank you for taking the time to review my story! And please forgive me in advance, I'm notorious for having terrible grammar... in fact, you'll have to thank my beta reader for even managing to put up with all my mistakes (don't forget to give her a round of applause!).
Hopefully, the future chapters will have better pacing and that the execution will be better. And I'm terribly sorry, for the confusion on some parts, but this is the second time that I actually attempted to do some serious fanfiction. One that wasn't solely a one-shot, drabble, or a collaborative story.
Yet again, thank you for taking the time to review! I really enjoy reading what advice and tips others have to offer, always makes me happy seeing what I can improve with my future works.
1075545 cool just send me the story password when you get then next chapter written and i'll take a look
I really like where this is going. I haven't seen a fic with this idea out of all my reading. My imagination is running wild on thinking whats going go on in the next parts. I just can't wait for more of it!
P.S. I'll be watching...
P.S.S Have a stache!
Interesting. Actually seems a bit like my story, but nonetheless, I'm interested to see where this goes!
I like this stories pepper sauce! Can't wait for more.
Boop.
Exciting, not sure if i'v EVER seen a crissy x celestia
watching and tracking!
make me proud! =D
will you continue?
Marked incomplete... Author last logged on a year ago... Yeah, is obviously never going to be continued, so I'm not even going to bother.
A few grammar errors here. People 'exchange banter' not 'exchange a banter'. Similarly someone would 'submit' or they would 'admit defeat' they would not 'submit defeat'. Also, shackles are 'restraints' not 'restrainments'.
Otherwise a decent start, nice use of Celestia's guilt over the Nightmare Moon fiasco to explain her going easy on Chrysalis' people.