This story will soon be redone, I've received some good advice about what I was doing wrong, after asking around about it.
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jdssprototype
I'm a reader. I just so happen to write what I want to read, when I've read little I enjoy for a while.
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Great concept and great execution so far!
Keep it going!
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Thanks for the compliment. Can I bother you for an opinion on the pov switching? I haven't had any feedback on that yet, and am about to write the next chapter...
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I'm assuming you mean the switch of characters like Twilight to the prince.
Switching character's point of view is hard to get right, and from what I've read of stories it seems if you keep a constant 1st person pov or 3rd or whatever when you switch characters. it helps ease the readers into it a lot easier.
Other than that I'm a fairly new writer so I don't have that much advice.
If you mean 1st to 3rd I don't have that much advice honestly. Just read over to make sure it blends well.
Not sure if I'm satisfied with this chapter. But I've been stuck on it for days, trying it out with more characters, in different places, for different reasons.
In the end, this was what finally let me get most of what I was trying to, across the barrier of my mind to yours. So thanks for reading, and I'll try to slip the rest into the following chapters.
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Edit.
Just letting ya'll know, I changed Dark to Drama. I don't know what the 'official' meaning for drama is on FIMfiction. But I had Dark down because I wanted to explore the psyche and vulnerabilities of a young man ripped from reality, with memories of a life he never lived, and in a place he doesn't belong. I intended for him to struggle more internally than externally in this, though the Adventure tag is very much a core component of the story.
Maybe I'm trying to cram too much into this at once, I only have a few thousand words after all. But I'm eager to put thoughts and feelings to paper, to help share this splendid blend of ideas that motivates me, with all of you.
For reference about celestia's mane. It has four colors in the show. A cyan-indigo, pink violet, teal green, and sky blue coloration.
amazingrust.com/Experiments/how_to/Images/Flame%20Test/Log-Fire/5.jpg
^ Looks a fair bit like Celestia's mane, but anyways. Just saying, it's my headcanon explanation for the shitty canon coloration for her mane. Mainly, because suns have heavy metals in their core, caused by fusion, her mane reflects flames of some of the more widely known ones can make. Green for copper, blue cobalt, pink Lithium, etc.
Quick question. What is the flight velocity of an unladen swallow? How is it affected by the magic heavy environments of Equiss? Think on it ;)
P.S. Loving your story so far, and the cover art.
P.P.S. Concerning your latest blog post, what is "Questing"?
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Questing is a collaborative story-telling format.
Someone once said, "Questing is like sitting down to read a choose your own adventure book, except one guy is holding it, and a dozen others are screaming which page to flip to next."
It's where an author gives control of aspects of the story to his readers.
So I've gotten some information and advice that helped me see what to do with this story, what I've been doing wrong. So it's going to be rebooted in a better format soon.
Look for it in a week or two, unless I get whisked away by irl.
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... that sounds awesome.
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Well, if you're 18 or older, here you go. A pony quest on Anonkun aka fiction.live
If you're under 18 and can handle profanity and people calling you a lot of bad names if you try to talk to them and they don't like you, feel free to check out fourchan's /qst board. Here's a link to the big thread that explains what questing is, basically, and where people talk about all the quests running on the site.4chan /qst general thread
wheres chapter 1
In just finished reading this and it's really good I was wondering if you were still doing the rewrite it were gonna continue?
Just going to say. It is a shame to delete a work, you know? I'm a proponent of going back eventually to make things work. Whatever your decision know people still read no matter what, or how many little.
I like this story
a nice first contact scenario...
You could have described the way from the outdoor scene to Ponyville in more Detail even if nothing plot relevant happened.
The chapter with the greater mind of a reality-bending unspeakable Creator was good and quite enigmatic.
I would read further in this nice little universe your mind explores.
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Fortunately, he disappeared two weeks after making the last chapter and there was an entire year between that and your comment. There was another year before I happened upon it all out of curiosity.