Police sirens, or was it a fire truck or ambulance? She didn’t care, but whatever they were, they were sufficient to wake her from yet another nightmare.
Don't worry Adagio, as someone who sleeps next to a road where loads of Loud vehicles drive by, I can assure you'll get used to it.
I'm... kinda squeamish when it comes to blood, so when I read the bleeding wound... ugh...
Still, this is an interesting story here, definitely makes me wonder, what the heck comes next?
I have always found The Sirens interesting, their concept, their origins, everything about them I liked and I feel they deserve more attention in Equestria Girls. I have read many fanfictions about them, most of the time, it is about them either struggling to live without their powers and now mortality, which is just conjecture that would even happen, or they attempt revenge against The Rainbooms. There are a handful of them that talk about them separating afterwards because they can't stay together anymore. I personally don't believe they would ever actually separate, as it had been suggested they had been roaming the earth for a long time together. They are very close and I think it would be hard to drive them apart.
As for what you're doing with Adagio? It's different than anything I've seen anyone else do with her. I've usually seen her portrayed as a very vengeful person, and perhaps a manipulative, but a good leader. She never let failure keep her down, something I assume she'd get from living and failing so long. But, she's never failed this hard before, her failure never caused her and the others to have taken away what they are.
I still don't agree that they would leave each other, but I do agree using them losing their powers as a catalyst for their separation does make sense. As I interpreted it, the story takes place after all this. Adagio has lost meaning in life, she lost who she was as a siren, she lost the only two people she cared about in her life, she lost everything because of her failure, and it broke her. This story shows just how much a single failure can destroy a person, how much it can destroy their self-worth, how much it can take away their motivation, how it can tear down who someone is as a person. It is obvious she is experiencing some form of PTSD from the battle of the bands, which makes sense considering it was the moment that completely ruined her life.
Adagio becoming suicidal, or at least having suicidal tendencies, I saw as an interesting touch. Her life is over, she is blaming herself for ruin her life and the lives of the people she cares about, that is good justification for wanting death. Though I feel like you could touch on the fact that she wants to die due to the fact she can now die, and the long life of being an immortal had made her want death, at least a little. That is something I've seen some people do with immortal characters. I don't know if this is intended to be a redemption story, or just a story to show how much failure can affect a person. Either way, I will be continuing to read to find out.
Quick question does this take place at continuation of the previous story or is it in the same world and that’s it where is it going to be crossover characters from your previous story
in the same world and that’s it where is it going to be crossover characters from your previous story
That one. In "To Be Everfree" the Mane 7 were side characters, here they are main (mane?) characters. Well, one of them is.
9714365 Thank you my friend. Chapters will be released every Friday. I do hope you continue to like it.
9714291 I'm so pleased you find my take on Adagio so different and new. Considering the wealth of material about her on this site alone, that's quite the compliment!
Nice way to get the hooks in from the start. Having been in the pit that Adagio is currently in, I remember all of those little voices and feelings quite well. Your description of how these ghosts haunt her is pretty spot on. I am very interested in seeing just who comes and pulls her out of this and how the tags you've included come into play.
Very interesting beginning. The flow was dynamic, the pace just right and the descriptions captivating, all of it mixing into a depressing, yet somehow oddly beautiful atmosphere. One so strong that even the occasional errors* didn’t break me out of it. I’m curious what the next chapters may bring!
As someone struggling hard with depression right now and having struggled with it for awhile? And with Adagio as my favorite original EG character(besides Sunset of course) it hurts to see the once mighty siren brought so low. But in a strange way I feel a sense of comfort reading this...is that weird to say? I feel like it's kinda wrong to say that but I dunno. I usually steer away from stories about suicide and depression because my thoughts tend to run away with me.
I stand you both in. I struggle with anxiety, depression and suicide on a daily basis, so this story is a little bit autobiographical in nature, albeit dressed up with Adagio Dazzle and Fluttershy, who I paired in the previous story, To Be Everfree. I had to get it out of my head, and I'm glad I did. The Gloomies is one of my favourite stories I've written, and I hope you both like it.
Don't worry Adagio, as someone who sleeps next to a road where loads of Loud vehicles drive by, I can assure you'll get used to it.
I'm... kinda squeamish when it comes to blood, so when I read the bleeding wound... ugh...
Still, this is an interesting story here, definitely makes me wonder, what the heck comes next?
Keep up the good work.
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Chapters will be released once a week on a Friday. You won't have long to wait.
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Got it.
I have always found The Sirens interesting, their concept, their origins, everything about them I liked and I feel they deserve more attention in Equestria Girls. I have read many fanfictions about them, most of the time, it is about them either struggling to live without their powers and now mortality, which is just conjecture that would even happen, or they attempt revenge against The Rainbooms. There are a handful of them that talk about them separating afterwards because they can't stay together anymore. I personally don't believe they would ever actually separate, as it had been suggested they had been roaming the earth for a long time together. They are very close and I think it would be hard to drive them apart.
As for what you're doing with Adagio? It's different than anything I've seen anyone else do with her. I've usually seen her portrayed as a very vengeful person, and perhaps a manipulative, but a good leader. She never let failure keep her down, something I assume she'd get from living and failing so long. But, she's never failed this hard before, her failure never caused her and the others to have taken away what they are.
I still don't agree that they would leave each other, but I do agree using them losing their powers as a catalyst for their separation does make sense. As I interpreted it, the story takes place after all this. Adagio has lost meaning in life, she lost who she was as a siren, she lost the only two people she cared about in her life, she lost everything because of her failure, and it broke her. This story shows just how much a single failure can destroy a person, how much it can destroy their self-worth, how much it can take away their motivation, how it can tear down who someone is as a person. It is obvious she is experiencing some form of PTSD from the battle of the bands, which makes sense considering it was the moment that completely ruined her life.
Adagio becoming suicidal, or at least having suicidal tendencies, I saw as an interesting touch. Her life is over, she is blaming herself for ruin her life and the lives of the people she cares about, that is good justification for wanting death. Though I feel like you could touch on the fact that she wants to die due to the fact she can now die, and the long life of being an immortal had made her want death, at least a little. That is something I've seen some people do with immortal characters. I don't know if this is intended to be a redemption story, or just a story to show how much failure can affect a person. Either way, I will be continuing to read to find out.
Damn, this is sad but a very good concept of the Dazzlings. I eagerly await more of your work my Friend.
Quick question does this take place at continuation of the previous story or is it in the same world and that’s it where is it going to be crossover characters from your previous story
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That one. In "To Be Everfree" the Mane 7 were side characters, here they are main (mane?) characters. Well, one of them is.
9714365
Thank you my friend. Chapters will be released every Friday. I do hope you continue to like it.
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I'm so pleased you find my take on Adagio so different and new. Considering the wealth of material about her on this site alone, that's quite the compliment!
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No problem my friend.
Nice way to get the hooks in from the start. Having been in the pit that Adagio is currently in, I remember all of those little voices and feelings quite well. Your description of how these ghosts haunt her is pretty spot on. I am very interested in seeing just who comes and pulls her out of this and how the tags you've included come into play.
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All shall be revealed in time
Very interesting beginning. The flow was dynamic, the pace just right and the descriptions captivating, all of it mixing into a depressing, yet somehow oddly beautiful atmosphere. One so strong that even the occasional errors* didn’t break me out of it. I’m curious what the next chapters may bring!
*Mainly watch out for mixed up lay and laid.
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Thanks for the feedback mate, I appreciate it so much! Stick around for the future, it gets saucy on the road to recovery.
As someone struggling hard with depression right now and having struggled with it for awhile? And with Adagio as my favorite original EG character(besides Sunset of course) it hurts to see the once mighty siren brought so low. But in a strange way I feel a sense of comfort reading this...is that weird to say? I feel like it's kinda wrong to say that but I dunno. I usually steer away from stories about suicide and depression because my thoughts tend to run away with me.
Either way. Great story so far. ^_^
As someone who still struggles with depression and has attempted suicide before, I know those feelings.
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I stand you both in. I struggle with anxiety, depression and suicide on a daily basis, so this story is a little bit autobiographical in nature, albeit dressed up with Adagio Dazzle and Fluttershy, who I paired in the previous story, To Be Everfree. I had to get it out of my head, and I'm glad I did. The Gloomies is one of my favourite stories I've written, and I hope you both like it.