Epilog: Second Tour?
"FALL IN!"
Fizzlepop Berrytwist barked out the order. She gave no warning to it as she walked through the gates of the court yard, and didn't disguise her approval at the response. The groups of ponies around her began moving quickly and efficiently towards their designated positions. Their movements came to an almost simultaneous halt several steps before she made it to her own position.
Three straight and evenly spaced lines stood before her, a sight that made the side of her mouth rise in just the smallest perceivable way. She slowly took a lap around the formation, speaking with a hint of pride as she did so.
"Very nice. You all seem to know what I expect." She noted that the lines even had the correct distance between them, a detail even fully trained soldiers sometimes slacked off on. "As to be expected from my first graduating class." Making her way behind them she didn't spot any of the telltale signs that they were letting their gazes wander while she couldn't see their faces. "I will have high expectations for all of you, but I have the utmost confidence that you all will deliver."
She made it back around to the front of the formation and paced the length a few times. She let a smile come to her face. It was going even better than she could have hoped for. She only noticed one small issue to deal with.
She suddenly came to an abrupt stop, turning on a hoof and coming back to stare into the now refocused eyes of a taller than average, dark coated mare.
"What exactly were you looking at cadet?"
"Sorry ma'am."
"I didn't ask for an apology cadet, I asked what you were staring at. Now what were you staring at?"
In response she broke formation, though Fizzlepop supposed it was warranted. She raised a hoof to point just past her commanding officer's shoulder.
Fizzlepop let her smirk return to her face as she knew what was coming next. Indeed, she heard a familiar voice come from just behind her with an only slightly exasperated tone.
"Fizz."
"Princess on deck!" She turned on a hoof to see Twilight giving her a tired glare. "Present arms."
Twilight rolled her eyes as the assembled ponies raised hooves to foreheads in perfect unison. Fizzlepop smiled with pride.
"At ease." Fizzlepop's smile increased at the sounds of more precision movement behind her even from Twilight's unenthusiastic command.
"To what do we owe the honor of your presence this morning your highness?" Twilight couldn't help but to notice the sarcastic tone that crept into the soldier's voice.
"Just what do you think you're doing down here Fizz."
"Your highness, it's my first graduating class from the military academy you gifted to me in all your grace and compassion. Of course I wanted to be the first to see how they performed before I could present them to you."
"So what you're saying is that you haven't told them the great news yet. You know the airship is leaving in thirty minutes right?"
Fizzlepop's smirk became even more smug as she finally broke rank to straighten the collar on her outfit and dropped all pretense of military etiquette from her voice. "Well I was about to until somepony decided to come along and interrupt."
Though they didn't show it outwardly, Fizzlepop did notice several ponies breathing stop for several seconds at that. They only commenced again as their Princess only rolled her eyes and scoffed at the blatant insubordination. "Well I can't travel without my bodyguard, so could you get on with the announcement already."
"You got it Sparky." She turned quickly, only catching the smallest movements as eyes refocused on points a thousand feet in front of them. "I'm happy to announce that your days of enduring torment from me directly are finally at an end. Now that you are all graduated and are old enough to properly join the royal guard, I have the honor of introducing you to the stallion who will be leading your classes bootcamp. Most of you know him in some capacity. My second in command, Morningstar."
On cue, a stallion in full armor began marching from the same entrance Fizzlepop had come from. He came to a stop just behind Twilight and gave a quick salute.
Removing his helmet, he placed it carefully on the ground before him. "Commander, your highness, thank you for this opportunity." With his helmet off his short horn, soft pink coat, and well kept mane became much more apparent.
Fizzlepop smiled at this. "We're technically off the clock Stubby. No need to be so formal to us seeing as we're pretty much stepping on your hooves here."
"And we're sorry for that by the way. If I knew she was planning this I would have kept her in bed longer."
Playing along, he seemed to break rank and give a smile and a little laugh at that. "Not to worry your highness, I know how to deal with commander Edgelord Shadow here."
Fizzlepop played it up, laughing derisively at that. "Oh, is that new brass on your chest going to your head? When exactly did you get so bold?"
He shot back. "I don't know, when exactly did you get so fluffy?"
The three shared a small laugh between them, until the sound of a giggle joined them. Fizzlepop smiled wickedly as her second in command disappeared from in front of her. She turned to find him in the face of a familiar dark coated mare.
"DID I TELL ANY OF YOU THAT YOU COULD LAUGH!"
The tall mare had obviously been caught off guard and struggled to reply. Her eyes seemed to bulge but her mouth did stop abruptly as he raised a hoof to quiet her.
"It would appear I have some work to do here. If I may?"
"Proceed as you see fit Captain," Twilight replied.
"Give em' tartarus," Fizzlepop flashed a wicked smile to the formation.
Twilight gave Fizzlepop an incredulous look as they exited the courtyard. "Did you two plan that?"
"Of course, but you made it work even better sweety." Fizzlepop leaned over to give her a quick kiss on the cheek.
Twilight stuck her tongue out before responding. "Well if we're late and have to take a later ship, I'm making sure all the dignitaries at the conference know it was your fault."
Fizzlepop rolled her eyes. "Yes, because the peace conference is the real reason we're going."
"Fizzlepop Berrytwist, how many times do I have to tell you that peace conferences are very important. The fact that it is taking place on an island paradise with some of the most beautiful, secluded, and historically significant beaches in the world is completely irrelevant."
Fizzlepop openly chuckled at the serious face Twilight attempted to put on. "You got me an academy for one of our anniversaries, now this. How exactly am I supposed to keep up with that?"
Twilight now dropped the act and smiled as she nuzzled her marefriend as they walked. "It's only our third year together, I'm sure you'll think of something someday."
Fizzlepop laughed darkly. "Pretty sure I already have."
Twilight now seemed confused and interested. "This doesn't have anything to do with the letters you and Shining Armor have been sending back and forth does it? Because you know he still owes you for that last stunt you pulled on him and he's not above getting his revenge through me."
The laugh Fizzlepop now gave sounded downright evil. "Guess you'll just have to wait and see."
Twilight let out a sigh. "Why do I put up with you?"
"Because if you were to ever break up with me I'd probably try to conquer Equestria just so you can reform me again and honestly who needs to deal with all that paperwork?"
"That can't be it, I like reforming villains and doing paperwork." She pretended to give her own question some thought. "I guess it must be love."
The look Twilight gave Fizzlepop at that moment made her smile. "Yeah, I guess so." She raised a hoof to check her jacket pocket, and smiled wider.
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Couldn't agree more
And it only gets better xD
Don't know if you have read any of natedogg other stories but deiffently give show business a read https://www.fimfiction.net/story/392744/show-business
That one is a page turner.
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thanks for reading and thanks for promoting me. 
Yeah, this is about the only way my stuff gets advertised. You're making me blush here
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hopefully it was worth the wait.
Oh yeah, and you finally got what you wanted
This was fantastic! Just finished reading the whole thing, one of my favourite ships and a brilliant story all the way through!
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Thanks so much. It's been fun to write, so I'm glad to see that so many like it.
Those numbers shot up fast in just a few hours. Thanks so much everyone for making this my seventh story to break one thousand views
(there really need to be a Tempest emoji)
Edit: Also now my most liked story and my and my second ever to reach the popular page
Ah, a beautiful and fitting end to this lovely story.
Also 10874457 that emote can come after the Luna emote we still need. You know, the character that's been in the show since the very first episode...
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Of course your highness, the moon must be shown some love. Thanks for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed.
Ahh... What a satisfying ending
Once again amazing story...
The assassination attempt really liked it...
Rainbow and flutters moment.
At tempest confession you had me at the edge of my seat when Twilight said she wasn't into mares.
And I am impressed the paper that Tempest signed to become Twilight personal guard didn't catch fire with how fast she signed it
If you are gonna make a sequel, plz make their wedding get interrupted by another one.
10/10 probably gonna read it again
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im sorry, #notsorry for shameless promoting you
but your stories just have the right amount of fluff, emotion and humour, that just makes you come back for more
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was must definitely the wait worth-
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I did think of tagging something on, but no solid plans to return to the story any time soon unfortunately. But the ending was left open ended on purpose.
Thanks for bringing so much energy to the comments. This is why I'm still doing this honestly.
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you are vary welcome
it did feel like Tempest could have pop'ed the question, but no i feel the ending was really good, its good enough that if you dont comeback to it anytime soon the ending has enough closure to be a ending, but if you want to continue you can also do that
i see what you are doing, you cant trick me
, feeding us with one hand, slapping us with the other one 
dangling that carrot on a stick to try and keep us coming back for more
and you know what! its working
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You know, I've never done a beach scene. Hummmmmmmmmmmm
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dont you dare tease about that. dont you dare....
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I'm on vacation for now
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You are cruel pony
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But to take your advice it's the middle of the night where I am, so will probably read one of your shorter stories and go to bed.
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Sweet dreams then, it's been fun.
OK, 2 things:
a.) it is not getting use to, it is getting useD to.
b.) you really seriously need to work on your then and than.
then < = denotes a certain time.
than < = in relation / comparision to something else.
I don't think i remember you getting either a or b right even a single time in the whole story.
I guess english ain't your first language?
Please fix those. There were, i think, some minor spelling or tenses errors in it as well, but nothing i could point at right now.
Other than that, this is a good story and well written.
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Been a while. I went with whatever Google docs said for my thens, since I seem to always get them wrong. Guess I shouldn't trust them. And yeah, I'm trying to police the used to thing, result of writing how I speak. I'll put in an extra edit at some point, thanks. And also I'm glad you enjoyed. Thanks so much for the fav
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Have a nice day.
And yes it has been fun 😅
Well earlier you asked to me to let you know what I thought when I finished ( sneaking in reading chapters on my phone while doing a 12 hr factory shift was difficult but doable) so I have to say it was amazing. I stand by my earlier statement of how in the world does this not have more likes.thank you for your time and effort I've immensely enjoyed this little romp with a pairing im a big fan of. (Sadly fizz never got screen time after the movie) I wish I had more words to express how much I enjoyed this story!
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Really appreciate you taking the time and I'm glad you liked it. Honestly, think fizz is better off in fanfics. She's a character that can be used in so many interesting ways and I'm kind of glad her story is so open.
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And thanks for the fav
Damn. Love that ending. I mean, what else can I can add? Other then thw wait was worth it!~
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Glad to hear. Thanks so much for reading and commenting
So, I finished it sooner than I expected and I fully enjoyed it! Such a sweet and nice story, I like your take on Tempest and the relationship between her and Twilight. I'll reread it in some time for sure.
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Thanks so much, and I'm happy you enjoyed. BTW, both a fav and 'things that I will never forget. I'm honored.
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It's so rare to see a good and big Twilight/Tempest story, the only one that comes to mind besides yours is The Princess's Captain (which is still unfinished), so thank you! Again, really liked your work and I would love to see a sequel if you're planing to make any.
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I'll be honest with you. The literal reason I wrote this was because I had been seeing so many Tempest/Twilight stories at one time.... and so many of them were bad. And I mean really bad. The second chapter of this story is actually loosely based on the one that broke me and made me decide I needed to do one. I'll have to look up the princess's captain of you say it's good, because it's a pairing that can be interesting if done well.
Also, no plans for a sequel any time soon, but I can still tease it
Thanks for reading.
My first story to break 100 likes, thanks so much everyone
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). But I did say any time soon. Takes a long time to become a good athlete even if you are able bodied. Fizzlepop didn't have the means to fix her horn on her own, so she decided to do whatever it took and toughen herself until she could. Same sort of thing, just with a little more evil.
I have a lot of love for disabled athletes, takes a lot of guts for someone with no legs to decide they want to be a world class runner. (I'm totally stealing that gif btw
Plus adrenaline is a heck of a thing. Even if it hurts her to use magic, in a pinch she could use it to help wreck someone. She is pretty tough after all.
You did make me realize I might have been a little too generous with how much she can use magic in this story, but it's a little late now. Thanks anyway for the thoughts and for reading.
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Yeah, your wife has a point.
Also, knowing the Ever Free Forest, the grass itself is probably also super poisonous when consumed.
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In soviet Equestria, grass eats you.
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Yeah, Tempest just wants to beat all the dumb out of them before it gets her killed. But somewhere between there and Twilight, I'm sure some balance can be created.
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Worst I’ve ever heard of was some idiot lightning C4 on fire before hitting it with a shovel.
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Lighting C4 on fire apparently isn't that dangerous, since during Vietnam, US soldiers would start campfires with C4.
Smacking it with a shovel would be the dangerous part.
I know that some explosives will tolerate getting smacked with a hammer, but some explode if you look at it funny. I don't know which are which though.
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It’s the combination. Lighting it on fire is fine, hitting it with a shovel is fine, hitting it with a shovel when its on fire will result in a bad day.
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For being so powerful, c4 is remarkably stable. It takes persistent stupidity to accidently blow it up. Humans are capable of wonderful things, and some really stupid things.
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Of everything in this story, that took the most deliberation as to how to include it. I had to ask my wife what the pony equivalent of finger sandwiches might be, then when we couldn't decide on that the idea of fingers had to be addressed. It was a fun bit of; ok that actually works surprisingly well.
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I've seen it done in more then a few fics where it's revealed that they are entirely for show. They usually just assume the immortal godly ruler are going to handle real threats. Which does cast Shining Armor's character into question.
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Ah! I see!
Didn't know you could wreck your day like that!
Another instance of where traditional first instinct fire fighting techniques will get you into more trouble!
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Hey, it also works to be married in most situations too. I've explained it to women a few times before. Am I aware you're attractive? Yes. Do I want to sleep with you? No. They laugh when I explain that they can basically just think of me at the big gay friend every woman is supposedly supposed to have. I'm not gay, but my lack of interest in other women is at least partially functionally identical.
Unironically one of the best ship-fics I've ever read. 10/10
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Thanks so much. That unironically means a lot to me
Is it Tempest that has the jacket and ring in the pocket?
Nice to see that the pink mane stallion had a happy ending.
Took me a bit to realize that they were at a military academy and not the courtyard of the friendship castle.
Probably would have been better if you put a notice at the beginning of the chapter that it was 3 years in the future.
One problem that I saw throughout the fic, was that it was tough to figure out who was talking, so it was sometimes hard to have the appropriate internal voice reading the lines.
Nice ending to the fic!
Nice to see that Tempest was able to find happiness in the end.
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Wouldn't you like to know
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I could see that as an issue. A lot of the story is just back and forths, so I was trying to maintain immersion with more context of who was talking and not actually saying it. I won't make excuses, it was a style choice. Same with not telling all the details at the end
And I do like it when everyone has a happy ending, especially those who took the time to read. Thanks so much for reading and keeping me entertained with your commentary throughout.