Feeling Alone

When Gallus's friends decided not to be friends anymore when they had an argue from the ruined Hearth's Warming Tree Gallus feels alone and decided to take his own life. Will his friends save him or remain gone forever?

based on the episode "Hearth's Warming Club"

Special Thanks to Nolamancy for proofreading Chapter 1 :
https://www.fimfiction.net/user/336740/Nolamancy

Special Thanks to Melinyne for proofreading chapter 2 :
https://www.fimfiction.net/user/385110/Melinyne

Special thanks for Miner for proofreading chapter 3 and remaking chapter 1 and 2
https://www.fimfiction.net/user/286538/Miner

Chapters (3)

It's my fault [remade] · 4th Oct 2019 · 1,266 words
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I'm sorry [Remade] · 19th May 2020 · 2,035 words
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Fixing friendship's · 25th Aug 2020 · 2,158 words
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diablo4000

diablo4000 #1 · Oct 4th, 2019 · 2 · · It's my fault [remade] ·

This is well written and could see thing play out like this. Gallus is very alone, and hurting, and his mistake hurt everyone. But he hurting the most.
He been alone for a good while, and just wanted to being with his friends/family,

He got desperate and it backfired on him, and now.... Can't wait to read more.

ExplosionMare

ExplosionMare #2 · Oct 4th, 2019 · 1 · · It's my fault [remade] ·

This is good so far, but how come everyone got to leave if they were supposed to be punished? This is just a nitpick though so don’t think about it too hard.

Also, this is more of a pacing thing, but I feel like the memories Gallus was having couldn’t been a little more fleshed out. I feel like emotions are captured better in stories the more they are delved into, but this might just be a preference of mine as well.

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Skyblazer9

Skyblazer9 #4 · Aug 25th, 2020 · 1 · · Fixing friendship's ·

I do hope Gallus can tell Sandbar and the others what he did to himself.

Switch Swap

Switch Swap #5 · Aug 31st, 2020 · · · Fixing friendship's ·

What does Twilight mean "What happened to you?"

InkWell27

InkWell27 #6 · Sep 9th, 2020 · · · Fixing friendship's ·

10411709
I think she mean is what cause Gallus to attempt suicide

Matthais Unidostres

Matthais Unidostres #7 · Sep 14th, 2020 · 2 · · I'm sorry [Remade] ·

This is way more interesting now. Sandbar and the gang might even suspect Neighsay to be the "killer".

ExplosionMare

ExplosionMare #8 · Jan 6th, 2021 · · · I'm sorry [Remade] ·

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Ooh that’s a good idea!

Cristel

Cristel #9 · Mar 19th, 2021 · · · Fixing friendship's ·

quando pubblicherai un nuovo capitolo? Adoro questa storia

Pete100

Pete100 #10 · Apr 8th, 2021 · · · It's my fault [remade] ·

Gallus tried to go to each of his friends individually to explain himself, but it was to no avail... Smolder just breathed fire on his nose, telling him to leave; Yona just pushed him; Silverstream just walked past Gallus, pretending that he wasn’t even there; and Ocellus gave him a hiss that said "Do you want to lose your head?

Wow, some friends.

Twilight, Rainbow, and Spike had heard about the argument and decided to check on the others. When they opened the door, they found Gallus.

Wow, is it me or do adults suck?

Pete100

Pete100 #11 · Apr 8th, 2021 · · · I'm sorry [Remade] ·

"Spike's right." Rainbow agreed. "Besides, what could possibly make the situation any worse?”

Why would you say that?

Sandbar finally found his voice and blurted out, "SOMEPONY KILLED GALLUS!!!"

Ohh. That’s what he thinks.

Twilight can only think one thing. "We have to take him to the hospital." She uses her magic to teleport them all to the hospital. Once there, Nurse and Doctors moved quickly to aid the young Griffen. It has been ten minutes since they got there, and no pony has said a word. They all sat there together in the lobby, waiting to see if Gallus would survive.

Well, at least they have faith.

They quickly made their way to the Doctor as Sandbar was the first to speak, "Is he gonna be okay?"

"Yes, he is. The wound wasn’t serious. He's going to wake up any day now."

That’s bullsh*t. How?

Pete100

Pete100 #12 · Apr 8th, 2021 · · · Fixing friendship's ·

“This is starting to sound like one of the mystery books Ocellus has being telling me about. A group of friends have a disagreement with leaves their friendship shatter and the next thing they know someone turns up dead.”

Wow, the irony.

“Hey we all may had a fight last night. But something like that is not enough to make any of us wanting to kill each other. I already had time to cool off already and was going to look for the girls in the morning to see if they still wanted to hangout today before you show up with your awful singing voice. To which I am going to tell professor Fluttershy about.”
“Please don’t.”

What’s she gonna do?

But Twilight wasn't finished "Well, me, Spike and Rainbow Dash figured out that it was Gallus, but we agreed that we should let him try to speak the truth because honesty is one of the friendship lessons... but it backfired"
"Really... what happened?" Starlight asked.

Wasn’t she there?

“Sandbar thinks that it was somepony else who tried to kill Gallus last night. For now, we will let him continue to believe that. I know that it doesn’t sound like a good idea. But if Gallus is to move on from this, then he is going to have to be the one to tell his friends what happen. Even if I were to tell Sandbar the truth, he wouldn’t believe me. He has to hear it from Gallus himself.”

She could be right or she could be wrong.

“Well... um, can I go see Sandbar?" Fluttershy said as the girls turned to her. "I think that one of us has to keep an eye on him and the rest of them to make sure that they don’t do anything rash. If that alright with you.”

Too late.