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Equestria Girls and other human world residents: …Normal Font…
Mane Six, human Sunset Shimmer, and other Equestria residents: …Italicized Font…
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Dear Sunset Shimmer. I hope everything is going well with you and the others. Things have been pretty good here as well. I'm actually thinking about hosting the first annual Friendship Festival. Still up in the air about that though, especially since my friends and I keep getting called away on friendship quests when we least expect it, but we'll see.
I also thought you and the others would like an update on what's been happening with Sunset Shi… I mean, SunShim (we obviously don't use the nicknames here). Well, things have been progressing very nicely. She's improved a lot socially these past few weeks and seems much happier from when we first met her. She's doing her best to open up and make friends, and is doing a great job. I'm so proud of her. There are still times where she shows regret and remorse for the mistakes she made, but she's learning to let go of the past and forgive herself.
As for adapting to life in Equestria, I think she's doing quite well. It took a little while for her to get used to being a unicorn and to get the hang of using magic, but she's a fast learner. It could be because she has some experience in using it since she had the sirens' choker. True, unicorn magic is different, but she's a good student and has a knack for it. In any case, she's really taken to being a pony, even if she does slip up in using the correct 'pony' terminology from time to time.
Until recently, she's been staying as a guest in the castle. The girls and I were going to help set up a place for her to live in Ponyville, but she really surprised us yesterday. She said that before she settled down anywhere, she wanted to set out on her own for a while and explore Equestria to see what it has to offer. She told us that she wants to make lots of new friends on her journey and help others in need so they don't make the same mistakes she did. Maybe she'll even prevent future friendship problems from happening before they even appear on the map. That'll make things easier for my friends and I.
She said it was a very hard decision for her, and that she doesn't really want to leave us, but she thinks it will be good for her, and I get that. I had to face a similar situation with Starlight Glimmer once I decided that she had graduated from her friendship lessons. I think her decision is very admirable, and I have the utmost faith in her; she's grown tremendously since she came here.
Of course, we're all going to miss her, but we all understand her decision. We plan to keep in touch though, so I gave her a few empty copies of the notebooks that you and I use (good thing I made so many). Oh, and get this, while she's traveling, she plans to get by as a street artist (she said she was inspired by someone called Flanksy). I've seen some of SunShim's artwork, and can honestly say that she's really talented. Whoever this Flanksy is, she must really admire her.
It's always sad to see a friend leave, and she said that she'll come back to visit whenever she can, but I know that she needs to find her place. And whether that's here in Ponyville, or Canterlot, or Manehattan, or Fillydelphia, or wherever, that's for her to discover. My friends and I are hoping she'll eventually settle down in Ponyville once she finishes her travels, but who knows where her journey might take her. As her friends, all we can do is be there for her and support her. She's leaving town tomorrow, so Pinkie Pie is throwing a big farewell party for her (any excuse to have one, am I right?).
By the way, our world's Vinyl really enjoyed her copy of your songs and says to thank her other self for them. And speaking of other selves, tell mine that I loved the book she gave me, and she was right, it was very relatable. Also let her know that I'm hoping that her plans for your spring break cruise are coming together well. Hope no magical catastrophes ruin things for you guys since I know how hard she's working on the arrangements.
Be sure to keep me in the loop, and I'll do the same. Your friend, Twilight Sparkle.
THE END
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According to Katrina Hadley on Twitter, showing the pendants was supposed to be metaphorical rather than literal:
What a great and close to canon story! Makes sense Human Sunset would travel through Equestria cause if this story was canon, it would explain why she hasn't appeared. I agree with a sequel showing human Sunset's adventures, but I'll respect your decision not to do one for the time being. If the writers actually wanted to make Human Sunset canon, they should make a story like this!
Like the Spring Breakdown forshadowing, but way to jinx it Twi!
At least you'll reunite with your human world friends and a certain blue haired guitar player.
This sure was a great story and I'd rate this a solid 10 out of 10 it's really good
👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
I loved the story!
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I would have loved to see them use human Sunset too in this way. They could do something similar to what they did with Starlight, but since the show's over... Well, at least we still got EQG Holidays Unwrapped to look forward to. Not to mention the 2021 MLP movie. Then Gen 5.
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Wait a second. The new MLP movie is coming in 2021?! I thought it was 2020! Please tell me that was a typo!
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Sorry, but no. It was pushed back to 2021. From what I hear, it's going to be completely CGI, and it's supposed to bridge G4 with the upcoming G5. But there is a Season 10 of MLP:FIM comic coming out.
9898465
Oh ok. I knew it would be CGI, and a bridge between the two generations. But that's all I knew. Well, I guess it's better to find out about it being pushed back now, rather than when I thought it would be out. Thanks for the heads up!
A VERY enjoyable story! This was my first real foray into EQG fanfiction, and I really enjoyed how you handled the original human Sunset. All in all, a very good story, and I am glad I read it. I especially liked some of the 4th wall breaking. It was funny and it didn't happen too frequently as to be intrusive. The comment about stealing waifus had me grinning.
Great job!
The cover art source is the same as the old one. You might want to change that.
Don’t know if you’re still reading these, but this deserves more comments, so I’m leaving one. I’ve spoiler tagged the more major stuff, but if you haven’t finished the story, you probably should just skip this comment.
I really, really liked this. It’s exactly the kind of thing I wanted out of a movie with human Sunset, and since we don’t seem to be getting one of those, this is a good headcanon.
You did really well with both the tone and continuity. There wasn’t really anything that happened that couldn’t happen under a TV-Y rating (aside from perhaps explicitly mentioning death). And nothing really jumped out at me that contradicts the show canon. So, good job. I also appreciated you not letting mysteries build up too long. Like not taking half the story and half a dozen near misses for the characters to meet. Tuat kind of stuff just leaves me impatient. Also had good attention to detail. A few times I assumed you overlooked something before it was clarified later. Like the medley song including Dazzlings lyrics.
For more general stuff. I really loved the design of both human Sunset and her dragon form. I am a sucker for ripped jeans. I would love to see those visualized. Did you use anything for reference, or make them whole cloth? And she’s just an adorable character in general, I loved everything about her. Of course, the original Sunset is my favorite character, so that isn’t hard. For the most part, I enjoyed the various references to the series sprinkled throughout. Ray was an especially nice inclusion. Since he is, through a series of technicalities, only slightly canon. The ending genuinely broke my heart for a moment, learning about the death of Sunset’s parents. I was wondering if you were going to bring up the idea of her meeting pony Sunset’s parents, but it never happened. I guess that wouldn’t really be the same, though. Throughout the story, I kept wondering about her parents. Why was a teenage girl out on her own, paying for an inn for multiple weeks. Guess that explains that. Her leaving to Equestria is a good ending, if bittersweet. Even if she’s moved on, the idea of losing what could have been your original life had things gone different is just...very tragic, to me. Also a little sad for her current foster family, and that the system will just see her as a missing person. We could at least assume Celestia could have said something to pony Sunset’s parents. The Dazzlings were a nice inclusion, too. I saw it coming a few lines early, but for the most part it was a surprise. I think you did the fight scenes well. I actually assumed you used Cheer You On as inspiration at first.. The few scenes with Flash were cute, and I would have liked more, though I get why there wasn’t. I definitely ship Sunflash.
For constructive criticism, I’d mostly just say editing issues. There’s a number of times you skip a word or double up on them. It’s nothing distracting, but it’s noticable. Otherwise, early on the characters felt samey in the their dialogue, but that improved over time. Also, Sunset shrugs a lot.
One thing I wanted to ask. You mention in a note that Sunset’s neglectful parents is something you saw as canon. I’ve hever heard that in the actual series. Did I misread that, or is it in a comic somewhere or something?
Anyway, I could probably blab for a while, but that’s most of what came to mind. Good job again. I would definitely read any sequels to this.
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Wow, thanks for such a great review (I always check every few days on my different fanfiction sites). I must admit, this story turned out being much better than I thought it would. It started out as a simple request from my cousin, but I really got into it. I always try and keep my stories as canon as possible so they can actually fit into a series.
Honestly, I was initially going to have their be some meeting misses and counterpart confusion between the two Sunset, but sometimes stories write themselves, and it ended up happening the way it did instead. I wanted to include more scenes with Flash (I'm a FlashShimmer shipper myself), but I didn't d more because I know that lots of fans don't like him for being a "waifu thief", and also because (despite the series implying a rekindling between him and Sunset), I was trying to keep things as canon as possible, and seeing as this story takes place before Spring Breakdown, my hands were tied. There were some scenes I would have liked to include with other characters (for example, I was going to bring up Spike and Sludge), but those wouldn't have taken place yet at this point in the series, so I dropped them.
I'm my own beta reader, so I always end up making spelling and/or grammar mistakes. The problem is, you know what it's supposed to say, so even when you read it back to yourself, your eyes see what's written, but your mind reads it as what it should be, so you miss it. I always try to get things as correct as possible though, because yes, I agree, too many mistakes can be distracting. I didn't notice I had Sunset shrug too much though, but thanks for pointing that out; I'll have to keep an eye out for repeating behaviors too much in my writing.
In regards to Sunset's parents, what I mentioned is actually canon. It was brought up in the Equestria Girls holiday comment where Sunset mentions to AJ that she was never close to her family (so they have a Christmas party for her since she never had any holiday celebrations with her parents). The relationship (or lack of one) with her parents was expanded in an interview or a post from the writers that I read somewhere (don't remember where though, it was to long ago). It also her relationship with Celestia, and how it drove her to going bad. It's not uncommon for writing to reveal info and backstories of characters outside of the media. After all, since they were having Sunset stay in the human world, they needed a reason for Sunset not to feel obligated to go back to her parents, so they made them neglectful and uncaring of her. The writers never said if Celestia spoke to Sunset's parents about their neglect, only that they viewed Sunset as Celestia's students as a means to promote themselves. If I were Sunset, I'd likely latch onto Celestia as a surrogate parent too.
As for the human's Sunset's parents and foster home, I always intended to have her go to Equestria, and to do so meant sever all ties to the human world, which, sadly, meant taking he parents out of the picture, though this also served for her entire motive of feeling the need to control everything so to never lose anything she cared about again. This is also why I had her handed over from foster home to foster home, so when she did disappear to Equestria, she wouldn't really be, for lack of a better word, missed too much. If it makes you feel any better, look at her starting over in Equestria sort of how Starlight got to start over as Twilight's pupil, or how Twilight had to leave behind Ponyville to rule Equestria. It's sad what you leave behind and what could have had, but there's something better waiting for you.
Anyway, thanks for a great review. Not sure if I'll ever do a sequel, despite leaving it open for one, but I have been brainstorming an idea for 2 other stories. One involving the Mane Six being called by the Map where they end up in the difficult task of helping and understanding a pony who's a sever introvert (and thus doesn't want friends because they enjoy being alone), and another involving the CMCs trying to figure the mystery of why out why a full-grown adult pony never got Cutie Mark. So far, I just have a handful of scenes ideas in my head with no actual story, but who knows what I might or might not come up with. Either way, thanks for reading, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Yeah I get it and that is the oldest joke in my book not to mention the cheesiest
Was this story based off a mystery I just discovered:
https://bronies.fandom.com/wiki/My_Little_Pony_Equestria_Girls:_Sunset_on_the_Horizon,_Part_1
I'm confused as was there a twin of Sunset or was this like Star Trek in the case of good Kirk and evil Kirk and both Kirks had to link up on the transporter so they both could live? IN reading the ending of part 2, it reminded me of a story I worked on in Sailor Moon with Rini becoming twins as the twin Rini would rule Crystal Tokyo and original Rini stayed with usagi and the other girls including her Hotaru.
Also, how come that this seemed to be a book, but it hasn't come out in publication nor was it a TV special, but since there was violence in part 2, maybe it would not have made it except for Adult Swim.
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No, I never even heard of Sunset on the Horizon before you mentioned it (I wrote mine in 2019, their's was written in 2020). That Bronies Fandom website is just a fan-made website with fan stories, fan episode ideas, etc. Sounds like someone just had a similar idea to me and posted it there. Or maybe they read this story and decided to write one of their own, but I doubt I'm the only one to come up with a story about the human Sunset, so it's probably their own idea.
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It just seems like to me when I read of the quotes on that show: A script was made, they were ready to maybe film the special with the voice talent, but then the Covid 19 came along and either postponed the product or maybe it was cancelled. I liked the design and idea, when I read the part of what Princess Celestia wanted to do with Sunset after the 'human' Sunset had attacked her in a tragic way, I was reminded of another fanfiction I read of She Ra in 'Rydell' I think it was called and while TV had her and He Man saving everybody, the writer wrote He Man and all the people died and She Ra went on a rage attack on the Hoarde and his people and was so consumed that Skeletor was able to attack She Ra and on the verge of killing her. He Man had been taken to Castle Greyskull and brought back and saved She Ra in time and had a happy family reunion. The parts of human Sunset and Equestria Sunset as they were called, I wrote a story out of Rini, Chibi Usa, of Sailor Moon that was divided in two as the original Rini stayed in the 20th century while the clone Rini would be ruling Crystal Tokyo. It was great at the end that Equestria Sunset stayed and graduated with her friends. I do want to write that particular story eventually, but I want to make the human Sunset evil and there would be scenarios that she was a Changeling, maybe Starlight Glimmer the human clone counterpart went back to being evil but it wasn't her either, an alternate Sunset, but it would turn out that her human family had no choice but to disown her and Sunset the human would be lost as the human would not like her Earth at the same time Sunset doesn't quite fit in her Equestria home and wants to stay on Earth forever. Thanks for getting back to me on this. Maybe that was fan made, but very convincing that it was a made for TV special but maybe Covid 19 took it away.
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Well, there wasn't a script, but an idea for a special was presented in 2017, but it never came to light, plus it contradicted too much of what was portrayed in the series and stated by the writers. The idea was eventually scrapped (which happens to many movies and series), but it wasn't due to COVID, and we got Sunset's Backstage Pass instead, which was supposed to be the final installment, but then they came out with a few more shorts and then ended the series with Holidays Unwrapped.
I understand the medley thing for the song; trying to tie everything together...
But one song encompasses everything about EQG...
Shine Like Rainbows...
This story is a masterpiece.
It seriously feels like it was written by the EQG writers with how well you've captured the feel of it.
I absolutely love all the little things in this story like Pinkie's 4th wall breaks, writing scenes that lead into stuff like Backstage Pass, the Rainboom's record being sent to Vinyl, the nerdiness competition between Sci-Twi and Micro Chip, and so much more.
This story really feels like a perfect wrap up for EQG, even though it takes place before some other stuff.
Sunset's human counterpart being brought up, and the Mane 6 heading to the EQG world were the main 2 things I wish we could've gotten in EQG, so thank you so much for filling in those missing pieces.
Anyway, this story is incredible, you're incredible, and thank you.
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
10762504
A little late, but I was the one that made Sunset on the Horizon. I came up with the concept a long time before I actually made a page for it online, but I wrote it without any knowledge of this story.
It was actually in 2018 that I posted it for the first time.
I do agree that the show creators really did miss the chance with Human Sunset. To me I felt like the last few years of the series went down hill because there was ideas they could have done.
Thank you for this story I really like it. It definitely fit what the show could have been like if we gotten Human Sunset. I’m surprise at least she didn’t go check out other Sunset parents since who knows they might have change after Other Sunset left Equestria.
I’m having a feeling SunShin will bump into Flash… I wonder what will happen?
Hold on you sure? I’ve seen MLP versions of other stories on here…
11037082
She was talking about Fluttershy's brother, Zephyr.
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That's fine, but homeschool isn't for everyone. I'm sure there are those who would eat it up, but you DO miss out on many experiences.
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Unfortunately, according to the writers, Sunset has a very bad relationship with her parents, as they only viewed her as a way to promote themselves once she became Celestia's student, hence why Sunset grew up thinking that power was everything and you needed it to get the things you wanted. This was even heavily implied in the xmas comic where Sunset told AJ that holidays were never anything special for her since she was never close to her family, so they never did anything special for them.
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Huh, I just checked the rules, and you're right, that rule is no longer there. I did post this story back in 2019, so maybe that rule was done away with. Cool, that means I can post it here now. Thanks you for pointing bringing that up.
11038633
No problem can’t wait to read it here since this site has a better layout when reading. I did like the Last Alicorn definitely was like the movie
11038701
Bad news. I just tried to start posting, and found this in the Rules and Guidelines for stories you're not allowed to post:
"Stories you did not write. If you are not the original author or a co-author, you cannot post it, even with permission. This includes “novelizing” a comic, movie, game, etc. that you did not create. For example: a Halo crossover with the same plot, scenes, dialogue, etc. but with the characters replaced by ponies."
So I guess that rule is still in effect. It's just not listed under the "main" rules section. If you want to read my story, you'll have to read it at one of the two links below.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13427062/1/The-Last-Alicorn
https://archiveofourown.org/works/21337567/chapters/50820061
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I think they meant it as a word-for-word kind of adaptation. So I think if you make an MLP version of a story, but maintain an original flair to it, it might work.
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Hmm, good point. I guess I could give it a shot. Stories need to be approved after all. So I could submit it, and if it gets approved, great, if not, no harm done. Thanks for the advice.
11198417
Well, it's submitted. Just waiting for approval. It SHOULD fit within the guidelines since it has different scenes, events, dialogue, etc, but I guess we'll have to wait and see.
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Hopefully, they'll accept it. If not. . . well we already have a solution for it.