Is it me or Celestia "redemption" is forced? If you were thinking like," oh I just got idea for these new facts that she did something,that for sure will make her likeable" no, it will not work beceause it feels forced to make her "good". If she really has to be redeemed ,she should get a punishment that is long as slavery was legal in Equestria.
"I better understand why the spell came into being and kinda agree with it to a poin, but I didn't and still don't like how the marks were used to limit their bearers." I sighed as I crossed my arms as I looked at them. "Now they are mate marks as they should be not a brand of ownership,"
"I kinda have to," I said as Twilight and Spirt hugged with me. "Seeing as it's been a part of your world for longer than I've been here. It's hard to remove something like that when it helped in the past. Though the laws around it went too far having a mark that bonds you to another and keeps you safe from rape and the like is still a good thing so I'll keep it but not the harsh laws that come with it."
And yes there must be a good reason for slavery a very gooooood reason A little clue, that was sarcasm
Also Melodias is a moron if he will not now outlaw marks. Even if they were for so long, you can eliminate them step by step
You need an editor, or at least to run spellchecker, i found quite a few misspellings that pulled me outta the story. Then we get into where I feel like I missed several paragraphs... I Tracked this story because it had potential, but it seems to be going full speed rush and never slowing. I feel you could take the current chapters and put their stuff into twice as many to flesh out, and still have it at a decent pace. I'm gonna keep an eye on it for another chapter or two, but at the rate it's going I see myself dropping it.
9760663 OK I wrote those bits thinking he would make two chapters. The way I wrote the "the Mark had a good reason to exist" implies they used to just be mate/marriage marks and the slave bit was added later (Discord changed it while in power)
1 of a Thousand steps taken... Alone returning the Nation to sanity will take time. Than defense must be expanded. Following that ssmall armies must be raised to spread the news of the new Equestria order. Spreading the information will be quite a challange (that why armys are needed to defend the messangers) & other nations that have grudges on Celestia & Luna will make problems. Will the MC free other nations of slaves ones Equestria stability in a decate or two is established?
Twilight
Thumbs up yes
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Applejack
Thumbs up yes
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Rainbow
Thumbs up yes
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Pinkie
Thumbs up yes
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Princess
Thumbs up yes
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This will be a vote for who you all want him to learn about first. The princess will be a two for one if they get the vote.
Is it me or Celestia "redemption" is forced?
If you were thinking like," oh I just got idea for these new facts that she did something,that for sure will make her likeable" no, it will not work beceause it feels forced to make her "good".
If she really has to be redeemed ,she should get a punishment that is long as slavery was legal in Equestria.
And yes there must be a good reason for slavery a very gooooood reason
A little clue, that was sarcasm
Also Melodias is a moron if he will not now outlaw marks. Even if they were for so long, you can eliminate them step by step
You need an editor, or at least to run spellchecker, i found quite a few misspellings that pulled me outta the story. Then we get into where I feel like I missed several paragraphs... I Tracked this story because it had potential, but it seems to be going full speed rush and never slowing. I feel you could take the current chapters and put their stuff into twice as many to flesh out, and still have it at a decent pace. I'm gonna keep an eye on it for another chapter or two, but at the rate it's going I see myself dropping it.
That Sombra kinda reminds me of Vlad the Impaler from Hellsing
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OK I wrote those bits thinking he would make two chapters. The way I wrote the "the Mark had a good reason to exist" implies they used to just be mate/marriage marks and the slave bit was added later (Discord changed it while in power)
I CAN'T CHOOOOOOOOOOSE
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That’s because it is.vignette.wikia.nocookie.net/dracula/images/3/30/1VladTepesAlucard.jpg/revision/latest/scale-to-width-down/551?cb=20150902045329
HAIL TO THE KING!!!!!
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Glad you got that, I love Hellsing and wanted to use it again.
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So am I.
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Also I have this picture.
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Dude badass!
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Also I’d love to see a story about Sombra as a vampire. I’ve always compared his powers to alucards ever since I saw that picture.
This was another wild chapter I hope he make's a herd.
1 of a Thousand steps taken... Alone returning the Nation to sanity will take time. Than defense must be expanded. Following that ssmall armies must be raised to spread the news of the new Equestria order. Spreading the information will be quite a challange (that why armys are needed to defend the messangers) & other nations that have grudges on Celestia & Luna will make problems.
Will the MC free other nations of slaves ones Equestria stability in a decate or two is established?
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I know that is more than 2 years since the comment, but I'dont care: In the next chapter of DRAGON BALL Z ABRIDGED!!